Date: 11/17/09 09:05 am Title: Chapter 22
you know... your story was good... but right now...its always the same... always the same drama and the same problems... it all begins all over again, its like the only thing they are able to do is cheat on each other. Right now i dont even believe they love each other and it kills me. They are always fighting and when they are finally happy one of them cheat or learn they have another kid with somebody else... i seriously think that in this chapter tom didn't need to learn that he had another kid with somebody else... again, it wasnt necessary at all. Its to much... christ doesn't he know about condoms... and bill and fucking bushido why dont you put them together... bill just cant resist him even if he ''loves'' tom. And tom... no he dont deserve bill, he never did anything or almost anything for him... he's just an asshole who doesn't know how to love properly... i'm going to continu to read your story because i want to know what is going to happen by curiosity... but right now i just feel that they are going to do the same thing that the last they did when tom cheat and they almost broke up...
happiness is not a bad thing you know and even if this is a story i dont think that somebody in the real life would be able to live with so much sadness and drama... i love the way you tell your story your writing is beautifull and let me feel the emotion... the only thing is that i dont like the emotion that it gives me anymore...
Author's Response: Well I'm sorry. I fiqured that it would get boring of the same thing. I don't really know what to say. Lol. I really don't. But thank you for being brutally honest. I know it gets old but I like it....well sometime. In the next chapter there different drama. Hope that makes up for this flop. Sorry for the emotion you don't like. Hopefully I can redeem myself in the next chapter and epilogue. Thanks for sticking with me and reviewing.
Date: 11/17/09 08:06 am Title: Chapter 22
BTW Locked up is so much better than the fuck it file, I don't know if you wrote both or wath but they're completely different from one another, of course the Locked up is refreshing and thrilling while the fuck it file looks like it's been written by a overexcited teenager, no offense
Author's Response: My friends write 'The Fuck It File' and really work hard on it. One of the authors does co-write 'Locked up' with me and she's a amazing writer/ beta. Thanks for your opinion! It means a lot to us!
Date: 11/17/09 08:01 am Title: Chapter 22
OK where's the poll?, I just wanna say I loved this story and I want the trilogy ASAP! seriously I'm always excited to see you have and update plase let us know if you're gonna continue this amazing fic.
Author's Response: The pole is at the bottom. And I'm planning on putting one more installment which will be posted after the epilogue. I'm glad you love it and it will be updated soon! Thank you!
Date: 11/17/09 07:51 am Title: Chapter 22
Did Bushido drug Bill with the pudding???? Coz he said it was like a dream but felt real. Bushido did didn't the dastard. Anyway good chappie Bill and Tom have to stay together
Author's Response: I don't really know! Lol! Maybe! Hmmmmmm......I'm going to work this in with Bushidos explaination to Bill in the next chapter. But you know the dreams that feels real but aren't? that's the dream Bill had. Thanks for reading!
Date: 11/17/09 06:20 am Title: Chapter 22
are bill and tom gonna stay together? why is tom always cheating?
Author's Response: Of course. They are meant to be! Lol! Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 10/30/09 07:18 pm Title: Chapter 21
Awwwwe that last part was so cute!I love Chris so much, he's one of my favorite characters=D
Tom and Bill never get tired of each other huh?They're always doing the nastyXD Those naughty guys!
I love when Tom get jealous, it makes my day!!I like how possessive he gets over Bill!and i wanted to kill those guys at the restaurant, how dare they do taht to Bill!!I got a little mad at Tom cos he was a dick to Bill>:/
I mean can't he understand that he can't fuck Bill whenever he wants to, Bill has to be the decent one and stop Tom when he's going too far!!XD
I love "Locked up"!!you guys are doing a great job but a little update wouldn't hurtXD
Date: 10/29/09 08:58 pm Title: Chapter 21
I'm scared now...Really, really scared
Date: 10/29/09 09:34 am Title: Chapter 21
Yay part 21 ^^
Really LONG Reivew xDD Story for that lol x i need too lol i hope you enjoy my reivew on is and i also hope my english isn't too shit xDD
oo yeah before i start i read that part you told me to read ^^ i now understand the billshido now ^^ it was sexy xDD *cough*Not becuase i also like Bushdio ^^ *cough* anyways thanks for that for making me understand where that came from xD i enjoy that pretty much too ^^
Awww that start of is very cute with Bill and Tom cuddling together in bed ^^ and then gets sexyer then the Kids are at the door ^^ I lauged my head off when "What’s sex?” “It’s nothing Christian! xDDD! i love that part soo much its make me laugh everytime lol i do that alot xD It is safe to come in i'm not going to get scar for life am i xDD its was classic to hear that because i say that alot too lol
Yay cut off dread times ^^ woop lol aww bill okay with it too ^^ i wasn't at frist i flip over the moon for while and then came back down and i was fine with it xDD
Awww Bill and his baby is cute as hell to me ^^ xDD You make me laugh agian with Grace was poking a mark on his neck. "Daddy, what’s this big red mark? Is it a rash?” she said crawling in his lap looking closer xDD Awww all so young for all is stuff so cute ^^ love when kid are that young and so clueless to stuff like that
Aunt Flow Here xDDD Ahhh that makes me laugh and Tom all like "Who" xD OO..God that put me in lauging fit lol and Maddie tell Tom what it is xD Tom get all mad becuase he never knew what it was xD and Tom get all mad because he think younger kids shouldn't know about it but their do and Tom only one who didn't know that kids know too lol
Aww everyone leaving now :( to go back home and Chirs doesn't want to let Tom go aww :( Chirs always like that in is story too lol his Bill's Boy xDD soo cute
and aww Teething..ooo no that bad nothing can stop the pain really from that :( but from Baby Oral gel but Tom save the day and put Chloé to sleep ^^
oooo dont you think their had enough sex already xDD Not like i dont enjoy it
i love it but its alot xD all i'm think is are these boys always Horny xDD
hah xDD More kids poor Bill xDD I dont think he wants anymore kids but look like Tom does in way but Bill having none of it of it at all xD ...That tom fault Bill cant come with him lol
Kiro and Yu YAY ^^ their my 2 favouite from CB xDD I love that couple lol but its not real !! Stupid YU Girlfriend ¬¬......all well i just have to read it here and imaged it xDD
Yay Tomi 's Black Corn rows ^_^ i love them..to picec i want them xD Joking lol Tomi suit them more then me xD
Wait Bill wearing black thong 0-o.... lol thanks for the image xDD ...its nice image now to me now i think about it xDD
oooo great xDD Sex agian ! lol woop xDD oo now with Thoug in is too xD lol Party tonight xD ooo wait now Bill want Tom i thought Bill had sore Ass lol and he want him inside of him agian lol
oo no Poor Billia :( he get attack by everyone ...Dam it but Tom will save the Day agian ^__^ yay for Tomi lol but from that playing with Bills underwear xDD And that does hurt when someone snap it lol but its is kind of funny too lol
oo that dont good for Bill ...Tom trying to have sex in Bar now...o wait there that word agian xDD Sex lol and then Tom leaves ¬¬
Aww noo.. Poor Bill really getting attack in the bathroom :(
Awww That bad for him Bill thank god Tom saw it sooner or later ^^
I hope Bills Wrist is okay ^^
But everyone is forgivin for that night soo cute agian ^^
ooo great xDD Bill come back and somone not well xDD That will be fun for Bill but Aww both sleeping agian like their used too ^^ aww
Cant wait for 23 ^^
Author's Response: Damn I love your long reviews! Wait until you read the next chapter! It has bilshido in and a few sad suprises instore. Bill doesn't wasn't to be pregnant again but he just might by someone you wouldn't expect. And no it's not Tom. Lol. They kids are fun to were because they are so innocent and cute. Serenity is growing up so quickly and behind it all Tom doesn't want her too. I'm so glad you like this! Keep reading! Lol!
Date: 10/27/09 01:48 am Title: Chapter 21
Aww! I love you, too! :D
Date: 10/26/09 11:36 pm Title: Chapter 21
Loved it so cute..Poor Bill though..Loved it and can't wait for the last installment...
Date: 10/26/09 08:29 pm Title: Chapter 21
I love this chapter. I really do. I love it!
Author's Response: I loved this one too! Im glad you liked it!
Date: 10/26/09 09:43 am Title: Chapter 21
i love it! update!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm writting as we speak! Lol!
Date: 10/26/09 09:28 am Title: Chapter 21
i really liked this chapter...a lot of hot moments ;)...tom and bill being sweet!
i was worried that you might let anything really bad happen to bill in the bar...uff i'm glad he's okay..i thought tom should have taken bill to a nicer place...
AAAAND there will be one more story!!! yeah!!
Author's Response: He did. The bar wad after dinner. Lol! And there was a lot of hot moments! Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 10/24/09 08:17 pm Title: Chapter 20 - Part 2 of 2
Ok so it's only been like 10 days since you last updated but i'm missing this story like crazy!!!
So yeah i just hope you update again soon=D
and don't forget i love you!!!=D
Author's Response: Thanks for checking up on me! They story has been done but my beta has been busy. She just sent a text saying she was reading through it. So hopefully I will post sunday or monday. I love ya too!
Date: 10/24/09 03:00 pm Title: Chapter 20 - Part 2 of 2
I'm sorry i miss 19 :(
i never did Review for it ! i have been busy lately so i have not been on FictionTHFiction
so i will review now ^^ for is one!
I still really like is Story is amazing and i love reading your story but i would like to know How did the Billshido happen ?? is new too me xDD! I knew Anis like Bill and love him to death ! just like in real life in way xDD ! but i never knew Bill kind like him back ...and even if Bill say he doesn't we can see it lol and Bushido made point there to about Tom but Bill Hopeless in love with Tom but Tom is Jelouse of the little things really =/ and Awww Bill work at Germany is going down with that co-boss runner! i guess bill always has to come and save the day and his work life
and ooooo Sexy Sexy hey xDD T-shirts Up and Pants to Underwear ^^ MMMM YUM! And Kiro is my favouite too xDD from CB ! Poor Chirs :( he all confused on Daddy n Daddy ! its not wrong at all ^^ it good Tom say its fine and Bill is like Mummy too ^^
and Aww Poor Bushido his all Confused ! why Bill messing with his head ! when he knew Bushido was Married and soo was he ! ...and their fucked each other 0-o...how did that happen xDD!
i wonder then lol
Awww Tom is still werid with Bill :( it look like Tomi here not trusting Bill 100% has he did before
but Bill can say the same too with Tom Habbit
ooooooo ^^ end with Sex Scene SEXY SEXY xDD !
And ooo their Birthday the same day ^^ but i thought Tom was older than Bill in is Story ??
and i am sorry agian for not reviewing ! i feel bad for missing out :(
I cant wait for Next one ^^ and i will try and keep up with your Story ^^ Lol
Author's Response: Ok....this is what happened. Bushido and Bill fucked back in 'Beautiful Disaster' when he was pregnant with Chris. Go back to that story and read chapter 26. It's in there. I can tell you why it happened cause i dont even know! Lol! I just wanted some Bilshido smut in the story and the reviewers were upset with me! It was like worse than Tom cheating mutiple times. And yes...Anis is in love with Bill and thoughout BD Bill was scoping him out but no one caught that. Tom is a jealous person but Bill a hopeless romantic with Tom but in the last installment....that might change.rnrnBill was in Germany for his job yes...but he didnt think he would have to fix all the mistakes Monica did but Bill did save the day! Yay! I wanted to put lots and lots of sexiness in the story cause i love smut! And i would love to see Kiro and Bill's pants really low..mhmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm....lol..... As for chris he's still confused on the daddy n daddy thing but yes Bill is like the mommy cause of the pregnancies and make up and stuff.rnrnBushido is a confused and Bill doesnt mean to mess with his head. Be honest with you I might make Bill get with bushido because if you look at it they have done the 'relationship' right. They were friends before they fucked and they are still friends and eventhough it not written in the story Bill feels comfortable around Bushido until he acts stupid. When they fucked Bu wasnt married yet. after Bill left him that night he met Sara and had kids. Bill was the married one. I might make them fuck again cause i love it!rnrnTom is always going to be werid with Bill. He doesnt trust Bill but only a little. Bill doesnt trust Tom and it will be revealed that he holding on to him for the kids. Oh! They share the same bday but Tom is 2 years older. So at this point Bill is 28 and Tom is 30.rnrnIts ok. I understand if you busy and stuff. Im hoping to post soon! Thanks! Dont forget to check out Chapter 26 to see the bilshido part. it's very quick but i love it! Thanks again!
Date: 10/18/09 07:49 pm Title: Chapter 20 - Part 2 of 2
I would suggest cramping and then Andi takes Bill the hospital where they discover that either the stress has caused the fetus to dislodge from his body or that his body has rejected the baby. In either case he will require emergency surgery and as a result the doctors tell Bill that he can no longer have any children. He then is depressed etc.
Author's Response: Yea. I'll do that. But there will be a surpise in 'When I Grow Up' for him.
Date: 10/15/09 11:57 am Title: Chapter 20 - Part 2 of 2
I think that you're amazing. It almost seems as though this is somebody's real life that you are writing about. If you do decide to write that It'll be sad but that's life. I'll love it either way!
Author's Response: The miscarriage happened to my friend with her second child because the now husband then boyfriend was stressing her out. So with some of this stuff in this story is true.....for her. She helps with the pregnancy stuff. But it's life and it happens. I just don't know how to write it out as the miscarriage for mpreg. With woman you have a heavier period but for men.....stomach cramps? But I want something more vibrant. Any ideas my friend?
Date: 10/15/09 01:45 am Title: Chapter 1
Maybe he should get pregnant and miscarriage...Tom can be angry about the pregnacy and Bill could react in some way and be stress which causes the misscarriage. It'll be sad but that is what happens when pregnancies come back to back like that.
Author's Response: I was thinking that but was afraid to say it. I will so put that in the story. Bill finds out he's pregnant again like in November and tells Tom and the kids. Toms pissed and Bills stresses out. Later in the month he's having terriable stomach pains and Andi rushes him to the hospital. He lost the baby and can't have anymore kids.... It is sad but it's life. The younger kids are confused and Tom feels bad and doesn't touch Bill for a while. Hurts Bill even more. What do you think? Yeah? I got carried over board! Thanks for the idea!
Date: 10/14/09 10:27 pm Title: Chapter 20 - Part 2 of 2
I completely loved this chapter!!I loved how Tom reacted to Bill and Bushido's little incident!!!I LOVE Jealous Tom, i think jealousy can sometimes make a story so interesting but it can also ruin a relationship big time!!It spices up the stories and makes them more dramatic!!!
I've never been a Bushido/Bill fan, i actually don't like him!Only for when Tom is being a man whore but i'm hating him big time right now!!Can't he understand that Bill doesn't like him anymore?Where is his dignity?and also i feel bad for Bill, 'cause Tom accused and called him a whore but you got to admit that he did liked Bushido at some point. and he kept giving him hope!!I'm not in any way, shape or form, defending Tom, you more than anybody, know how i feel about him constantly cheating on Bill, but i am feeling his pain at the moment!I wouldn't like it if my i saw my husband kissing another girl, fuck i would probably kill them both *Yes, I'm a violent person*
So yeah i was kinda on Tom's side for this one!!!
I'm so glad you're updating earlier now, i hate it when you take a long time:( God here i came with my long ass reviews again huh?you must hate them!!
Anyway i'm reallly glad you updated and i hope to hear from this story again soon!!!
LOVE YA!!*kisses and huggles*
Oh and FYI, I'm supposed to be working on my project, which is do tomorrow but instead here i am reading your beautiful story!!!That's how much i love you!!!
Author's Response: Tom is a jealous person and even though he royally screwed over Bill for quite sometime he believes Bill should be only for him....which he should and is. Im a HUGE Bilshido fan and thats why I kept him around so long for this story....lol....I was thinking about another sex scene between them but was like naw....I dont want to die just yet. Tom was just mad and thats wy he said what he said. Im trying to update weekly but depending on school adn other things it's hard too and i love you long ass reviews. You and a few others are the only ones who leave reviews like this and I loved them so much. Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 10/14/09 10:11 pm Title: Chapter 20 - Part 2 of 2
I'm so sorry I didn't review last chapter. I really love the new drama you have, especially Bushido and Jason. Finally, they aren't cheating on each other. I really like it.
Author's Response: It's ok. I was wondering wehre you were though. Im glad you like the new drama too and there is more to come. Not too bad though. Thanks for the review!