Date: 09/07/08 08:56 pm Title: Wolf
This is actually really interesting, at first I thought it would be totally AU, but you can imagine my delight when i figured out it wasnt :D
I cant wait to read more (:
Author's Response: thank you, it means a lot to me that people like this ! hope you'll like what comes next as well !
Date: 09/07/08 08:32 pm Title: Wolf
OOOOOO so is tom gonna b a werewolf??
Author's Response: guess you'll have to wait and see ,)
Date: 09/07/08 06:17 pm Title: Wolf
I like it :) I can't wait to see what comes of it!
Author's Response: thank you, it means a lot to have a great author like you say that !
Date: 09/07/08 05:51 pm Title: Wolf
I loved how you narrated the beginning in first-person. It really made the whole thing more exciting and chilling. I also loved how Tom would only say Bill's name when he woke up in the hospital. It was so sweet! I can tell this is going to be a great fic and I can't wait for more!
Author's Response: aw, I'm so glad you liked the Tom saying Bill's name only thing, I sort of imagined that would be like the only safe thing in a scary place you know <3 thank you so much, love ya for this !!!
Date: 09/07/08 05:26 pm Title: Wolf
oo00oh!! thank goodness Tom is ok!! and poor Bill being all worried... *hugs* i wonder if Tom will notice that something about him is going to change?? :DD can't wait for more~~ ;DD
Author's Response: thank you so, so much for this, it means so much to me !!! lots of love <3 lucy
Date: 09/07/08 05:09 pm Title: Wolf
And ONE last thing, listen to 7 Days To the Wolves by Nightwish. It'll take you about seven minutes to get through but I love it. And it's about wolves, sorta, actually not really, but that's a whole different story. Just... listen to it.
Author's Response: lol, okay girl, will do ,)
Date: 09/07/08 05:07 pm Title: Wolf
Oh, yeah, and tell Dixxi I said the banner's totally fab!
Author's Response: it is gorgeous isn't it *dreamy eyes*
Date: 09/07/08 05:06 pm Title: Wolf
Your baby huh? Well in that case I guess I'd better not rip it to shreds. Not that I could ever say anything bad about anything to do w/ you! LOL.
OK, so I'm assuming the first part was from the perspective of the attacker. How did he not get caught? Whichever way you look at it he should have been seen. Either leaving the bathroom (human or werewolf) or in the bathroom, and if he'd been in his werewolf form SOMEONE would have noticed him. So how'd he escape?
Also, what's Bill and Tom's relationship? It seems really really touchy feely, but not quite twincest but maybe that's b/c they have people/security cameras all around them.
So does Tom have a month before he changes? Or are the effects going to kick in the next night? I don't pay a lot of attention to wherewolf stuff so I don't know how many nights a person becomes one.
I loved your writing of course. I'm getting a bit more critical w/ writing, the more of these I read, but I'm still oblivious to grammer. You did have something in here though, it was like, the repitition of a word or something, it confused me so I'm assuming it was a typo.
I really liked this beginning. I can't wait to see where you go w/ it. Based on the description it sounds like Tom's gonna be locked up? That's no good. Also, any chance you'll be a littl... tacky? (not sure if that's the right word) and make it so that Bill's the one thing that even as a werewolf Tom won't attack? I just think that would be so romantic in a sorta strange way.
alrighty... I'm done for now.
Can't wait for next week.
Also, my story? Anytime soon? It's ok, I can wait, for a little while at least. And also, any chance of hearing from ya? You don't have to write an epic if you don't want to.
Author's Response: yay, you found your way to my new baby xD you and your questions girl, it pains me not being able to answer all of them ,) How did the attacker escape? that will be answered, but not in the next few chaps I can tell you. Tom and Bill's relationship will get clearer durning the next chapters, promise. Tom will not change the next night. lol, that's all I can answer so far. as for the tackiness, you'll just have to wait and see ,) your story will be updated today girl, it's taken some time, but my teachers are still going a little crazy, so. much love for you girl, and yes, I've written you !!! <3
Date: 09/07/08 04:59 pm Title: Wolf
I love it already and look forward to next Sunday. Great job so far. :D
Author's Response: thank you so much, I hope next sunday will not dissapoint ,)
Date: 09/07/08 04:59 pm Title: Wolf
i like it!!
Author's Response: happy !
Date: 09/07/08 04:46 pm Title: Wolf
Luce, this was a wonderfully mysterious beginning, and I'm loving it more and more. Very intriguing!
By the way, the banner? Just fabulous, amazing! You know I loved the background, but the finished product is just beautiful. Big kudos to dixxi!!
Author's Response: Yay, my darling mentor, you're the first reviewer to my new baby. and yes, the banner is great, I was just amazed when she sent me it, it's georgeous! *joins the big kudos to dixxi movement*