Date: 08/10/10 01:18 pm Title: Lie
this is good, but sad just like the others said.this song is one of my current favorites so it caught my eye while i was looking around. the way you described what he did to her was very straight to the point.and i think it worked well.had you written it any other way might have lessen the pain that the readers might feel while reading it.
all in all, i really like it although i think it would be nice for you to add a few more chapters just to see what will come out of their abusive relationship.
Date: 08/08/10 08:34 pm Title: Lie
its really good! just sad, but i love the last line :)
Date: 08/08/10 05:04 pm Title: Lie
poor girl...but it was a good story
Date: 08/08/10 01:47 pm Title: Lie
this was my prompt. x)
Author's Response: Yes, thank you for giving me the opportunity to write this. Without your prompt I doubt I would have ever thought of it.
Date: 08/08/10 09:43 am Title: Lie
Awww that is sad. ): But good all the same.