Date: 09/25/09 09:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
As you forewarned, I have come to this piece with reservations and been astounded. While the pairing generally repulses me I can only read and re-read with a glazed expression of awe. The balance of spiritual and physical is without fracture and the description is superb in both. This is achingly beautiful without seeming like an exaggeration of love. Work worthy of great respect, Onnisan. Well done.
Author's Response: I told you so! *sing-song voice* Now see, I'm the first person to admit I hate that pairing and will not read anything involving it as a main pairing. But Dunno seems I am good at writing them when the mood strikes.
Date: 06/10/09 08:28 am Title: Chapter 1
Umm.. :)
nice take on both guys.. and something I can see, both being afraid to love.. and so besotted it's beyond sense
Author's Response: Thanks sugar, and your right on all accounts!rnrnNow please stay out of my roleplaying folder and no snooping for back stories!
Date: 06/09/09 12:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. This is amazing. I love Billshido and this one took my breath away.
Author's Response: *gives oxygen tank and mask* There ya go, need to keep that breath in you so you might think about reading my other stuff. :D
Date: 06/07/09 04:47 am Title: Chapter 1
...Bill could see a demon lurking in those eyes - he could swear to it...
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...Bushido could see the gods in his eyes - he could swear to it...
*fans self.. totally hot! ur a natural...u sure u never write bill/bushido before? =P
Author's Response: I am 100% positive that I've never written that coupling before. I don't even roleplay them, or with anyone who plays Bushido.
Date: 06/05/09 10:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
I'm almost ready to DEMAND that you write more Billshido. *_* This was perfection, plain and simple.
I wish you the best of luck with the challenge!
Author's Response: And I am ready to protest the very thought of writing another fic featuring those two together! Icky couple, and I like writing gen. fics more.
Date: 06/01/09 03:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
Nicely done! :D
Author's Response: :P Thanks!!
Date: 06/01/09 09:14 am Title: Chapter 1
I've never read Billshido before. It was awkward to be honest. And I got confused at times because you kept changing the perspective.
Good luck with the challenge!
Author's Response: Sorry, and thanks.. though I am sure someone else won it.
Date: 05/31/09 01:32 am Title: Chapter 1
how can you not like bill/bushido pairing and write something so sexy like this? I really like it a lot!
I like how it doesn't sound like they were just fucking.. they were making love
Author's Response: Well in the notes I mentioned that this was actually based off a roleplay between a friend and I.. It just seemed to fit better as Billshido rather than any other pairing.
Date: 05/30/09 03:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
I don't like Bill/Bushido, but I have to admit, this was hot. I've read one other Bill/Bushido fic and I didn't really like it. I guess it's just how Bushido was described that I didn't like. Here, in your fic, though, he seems almost perfect for Bill, you know? Well, as perfect as someone could be. I thought it was cute that Bushido couldn't tell Bill what he wanted to and kissed him instead. Also, I love the last line, I really do:D Good job and good luck in the challenge:)
Author's Response: I am actually in the exact same boat you are, I only read one Bill/Bushido fic before and disliked the pairing ever since. Don't ask why I actually thought to write the pairing as these two.
Date: 05/28/09 10:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
Aww, this was so ridiculously adorable! I love it! I just recently discovered my love for Billshido! I'm so glad to see one here in the challenges!
Author's Response: I am glad I can help you with your love of the pairing, even if I am not a fan of it at all.
Date: 05/28/09 06:54 am Title: Chapter 1
woah, I don't even know if I'm going to be able to write a decent review for this. This was pure genius on a steek(personal joke added). I adore all the details, the way you describe things is perfect. I think I died, and came back.:).
Author's Response: Well its good you came back, I'm not to sure Beetlejuice has internet for you to use for reviewing.
Date: 05/28/09 04:44 am Title: Chapter 1
Very emotive and hot - nicely done!
Author's Response: Thank you thank you!
Date: 05/28/09 02:56 am Title: Chapter 1
Jeebus. *bites lip*... I think you should write Bushido/Bill more often.
Author's Response: But I am just not a fan of the pairing, but if I get an idea I might give in and write them again. That is a HUGE if though.
Date: 05/27/09 08:12 pm Title: Chapter 1
Honestly the writing is a little awkward. It’s stilted.
You switch between present tense and past tense in the same sentences and paragraphs as well as perspective changes. It’s a little awkward to read.
It was a wicked trade of sorts. – this is a good line a good concept for the fic.
Cruel fate was working hard that day. – another good line
It’s gotten better but still like you pieced together lines instead of writing the story as a whole.
Much like that first time, Bill was amazed at the other man, how soft and skillful he was - when everywhere else, he was loud, harsh and almost clumsy. – this is a really good example of how your story is pieced together. Too many commas, so much is going on in this sentence. The concept is good the execution is awkward.
You cleared it up at the end. It got smoother with better execution.
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Not a bad concept you just need a beta to work on it.
Date: 05/27/09 02:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. I have never read a Billshido that I have liked as much as this. That is the stuff that the best romance novels are made of.
Author's Response: Thank you! That makes an aspiring romance novel-writer feel all warm and gooy inside! I'll dedicate my next romance fic to you love or my next book which ever comes first!!
Date: 05/27/09 09:39 am Title: Chapter 1
Lovely!
Author's Response: Glad you liked the fic!
Date: 05/27/09 08:04 am Title: Chapter 1
awesome. loved it
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! Now that I can actually say thank you, it was the hardest part of the contest.. not getting to thank my reviewers.
Date: 05/27/09 02:32 am Title: Chapter 1
O_O That... was... AMAZING!!!!! xDDDDD I love the love *-*
Author's Response: THANK YOU!!! I love the love too, though I am sure it wouldnt have been the same if it was any other pairing.
Date: 05/27/09 01:23 am Title: Chapter 1
Hot damn I loved it! Best Billshido fic ever! Smut and love - and not the sappy kind either, but I could feel how genuine it was. Woah, I bow down to you my friend =D
Author's Response: Aww thank you! *gives a Billshido cake* Seeing as I hate the pairing myself I did do good huh?
Date: 05/27/09 12:50 am Title: Chapter 1
Holy Cow! That was super hot! You should definitely write more.
Author's Response: I highly doubt that I will ever write another Bill/Bushido. I don't like the pairing so much. But I am working on attempting to finish off my series before I begin doing anything new!