Date: 09/06/09 09:23 am Title: Chapter 1
Awesome. I can't wait! :D And I need some happy feelings. I dropped my MP3 player down the elevator shaft at my university today. :(
Author's Response: That sucks hon. rnrnWe will update in a couple of days and hopefully that will lift your spirits hon :)
Date: 09/05/09 11:41 pm Title: Chapter 8
Awww! That's all there is! :( I really like this!
Author's Response: Thanks hon, rnrnThe next one will be up soon :)
Date: 09/05/09 08:57 pm Title: Chapter 5
Hmmm. Somehow I think I'd have liked it more if Tom was on bottom. But that was pretty hot, too.
Author's Response: We understand hon ;)rnrnTom does bottom sometimes, but Cha loves to bottom and Tom loves to oblige him ;)
Date: 07/23/09 04:37 pm Title: Chapter 8
*swallows* it was worth the wait. damn that was hot.....
Author's Response: Thanks hon :)rnrnWe were hoping it came out as hot as we were going for.
Date: 07/14/09 03:25 pm Title: Chapter 7
Billshido with a plot makes my heart sing!
I'm loving this story!
Author's Response: Thanks hon!rnrnWe love that type of story too ;)rnrnAppreciate the comment.
Date: 03/01/09 11:30 am Title: Chapter 7
ohhh snap! Bu and Bill are getting married!!!!! ....I hope they tell Cha and Tom hahah i can just see Bill going up to tom and being all like 'guess what Tomi!?!?! Bu and I are married!!! :)' and then Tom would have like a panic attack lolololololol. Um *coughcough* anyway. I'm glad that Chas friends took to tom so well! their coversations made me laugh. also I dont think i've mentioned this but i love the nicknames Cha and Tom have for eachother. its really cute, and how Cha is on his way to being completely whipped by Tom. We dont get to see a lot of bill and tom interaction with eachother, but w/e. Um an idea for getting away from the RPG style writing is detial and description, because with rpg its very coversation based with action (which you guys do very well) but like theres not a lot of description of people or places or what a room looks like or anything. also maybe some like inside thoughts like when writing one of themyou can put what their thinking. Not everyone does that tho, these are just some ideas to get away from RPG writing. anyways I love this
Author's Response: Thanks again hon :) We appreciate the feedback and suggestions. lol Yeah I like the idea of Tom and Cha together. I wasn't sure if anyone else would like it.
Date: 02/25/09 09:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hummmm It is possible that the site ate my whole review....and if so that would really suck. I pretty much gave a huge rant on how I liked your story, and that Tom and Cha are my favorite ever. I went into detial and everything. So if it ate it...let me know? and i'll give you more indepth on what I like in your story and whatnot. I also pointed out someting that I think might make your story flo better and thats basically the fact that you use a lot of the same words over again ie: Giggles, Teased and so on. So maybe if you try to switch up the words a little so its not as repeative. Hopefully this one will show up if my other one HAD got eatten. But I hope not. I just really want you to know how much I enjoy your story, and that I have mad love for Tom and Cha. Like seriously I think I wrote a whole paragraph on what I liked about them and they way you write them. So heres to hoping that neither of these get cut short...sorry if you had gotten the other one haha!
Author's Response: Yeah, I think it got cut off. I would love to hear your response to this story. It has come to our attention that it would be better if we got some help turning it into more of a regular story style, as opposed to an RP style. Neither one of us has ever written fic, so any suggestions would be much appreciated. Thanks hon :)
Date: 02/24/09 11:01 pm Title: Chapter 5
Ahhh! Bill and Bu are so sweet
Author's Response: I know! I love them together. Thanks hon :)
Date: 02/23/09 06:11 pm Title: Chapter 5
haha.
Tomi's falling.
I like it.
Bill's also falling, hard.
I like that too, of course!
Author's Response: lol, Yeah :) I'm half sap, hon.
Date: 02/23/09 04:45 pm Title: Chapter 1
Yes, I realize you stated that, I'm only pointing out how obvious it is. What I'm really trying to do is show you how you can improve it and get more readers. It has potential, and there are a lot more billshido fans who will read and, more importantly, review this if it gets cleaned up. Right now, the response seems minimal and I think that you could get so much more with just a small amount of effort to fix the flow and format.
Author's Response: Thanks hon :) I think that we would have to have some help with that point. Like I said, neither one of us has ever written fic. If you know someone let me know :)
Date: 02/23/09 06:49 am Title: Chapter 4
AWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE
*gives her heart to you two*
Author's Response: *accepts heart* Thanks :)
Date: 02/22/09 11:12 pm Title: Chapter 4
This is good (and long!) I love it! :)
Author's Response: Thanks hon :) I love long stories too.
Date: 02/22/09 05:53 pm Title: Chapter 4
One thing that's really off in this story is stuff like this...
Bushido quickened his pace as he heard the singer's moans increase. He loosened his throat as he felt Bill start to come in his mouth. Bu swallowed it all as he moved his hand down to relieve himself. He sat up as he started jerking himself with firm strokes. When Bu felt his balls start to tighten; he flipped the singer over and came on his ass.
Bill let out a soft squeak when Bu flipped him over and moaned softly as he felt the rapper come on his ass. His back arched slightly and he gripped the pillow as he regained his breath
It's obvious it was a RP put together to make a story because things are repeated. Bushido does one thing, and then the next paragraph has it repeated, only with Bill's response to the action.
I think it could be a lot better if you weren't just taking all of the responses and compiling in them, and instead changing the format into an actual story.
Author's Response: Uh yeah hon, that was kinda explained in the notes in chapter one. We said that the story is in RP style and if you like it, you like it. If not... that's cool too :) We do change a lot of it to flow more like a story, but neither one of us has ever really written fic before.
Date: 02/22/09 03:41 pm Title: Chapter 3
WOOTWOOT!
Get some Tomi!
I love love love your characterization.
Amazing.
You really know how to make a girl swoon.
Author's Response: Thanks so much hon.rnrnWe appreciate it... and so does Tomi ;PrnrnSwooning girls is SO what we were going for :)
Date: 02/22/09 03:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is so sweet. I was actually looking for something like this fic and - yay - here it is. I love it!
Author's Response: Thanks hon :) We love writing it. There is so much more coming.
Date: 02/21/09 06:19 pm Title: Chapter 1
*falls down her chair*
This is absolutely amazing.. I loved every bit of it *__*
Author's Response: LOL *helps you up* Thanks hon and there is more to come :)
Date: 02/21/09 05:51 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow, that was amazing, I loved it! Is there gonna be a sequel where Bushido get the twins "to do naughty things on camera"? *hopes*
*sends inspiration through air*
*_*
Author's Response: Thanks for reading it hon :)rnrnThis is actually a series and a lot happens, but not that. Not yet ;Prnrn