Date: 12/14/08 05:54 pm Title: Guilt Has Taken Over Him
Sheesh, a lot is happening! Well, there's no sense of setting here, which can be unique and good if you like that. Or you could develop characters, people close to them, where they live, etc. Otherwise I like it, JoJo!
Author's Response: Thanks, i know alot isnt described, but its just the first chappie and i wanted to get that mystery sorta feel to it. Thats why i made everything so mysterioius and didnt reveal alot.
Date: 11/13/08 10:43 pm Title: Guilt Has Taken Over Him
I like this beginning. Keep it coming.
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you like it! =]
Date: 11/13/08 10:42 pm Title: Guilt Has Taken Over Him
Haha this is good.
Can't wait til the next chap!!
Author's Response: Thanks, I'll update tommorow most likely. =]
Date: 11/13/08 10:38 pm Title: Guilt Has Taken Over Him
I remember getting a nice preview of this story. :]
Keep it up!
Author's Response: Thanks Katie! Glad you like it! I'll update more often now! =]