Date: 04/17/12 12:38 pm Title: Chapter Four: As Long As We Got Love
Damn.. well don't they have some cool parents.? Lmfao. Can't wait for more.!! :D
Author's Response: Yep, they both have cool parents... :/ I'm so jealous. I have conservative parents so.... yeah! XD Thanks for the comment..;)
Date: 04/17/12 12:08 pm Title: Chapter Four: As Long As We Got Love
Um parents wouldn't do that! Jessica's dad would be okay with that?!! Ummm :-/ I think those boys have something to do with it! D:
Date: 04/17/12 11:59 am Title: Chapter Three: I'll Be Your Man
Omg! :D you have no idea I have a huge smile on my face while reading this haha!
Date: 04/17/12 11:51 am Title: Chapter Two: Friend
Wow Tom got a temper! I hope he can still go to the dance :-/
Date: 04/17/12 11:42 am Title: Chapter One: That's What Makes You Beautiful
It's only the first chapter BUT I love it!
Date: 04/16/12 10:39 pm Title: Chapter Three: I'll Be Your Man
more. NOW.
Date: 04/16/12 09:13 am Title: Chapter Three: I'll Be Your Man
Oooohhhh.. I can't wait to see how this night will turn out. I hope its perfect and that everything falls into place. Can't wait for more.!!! x)
Date: 04/06/12 04:42 pm Title: Chapter Two: Friend
loved it! can't wait to see what will happen next!
Date: 04/06/12 04:35 pm Title: Chapter One: That's What Makes You Beautiful
loved it!
Date: 04/02/12 04:35 pm Title: Chapter Two: Friend
Aww man. Let Tom go the dance please please :) suspend him after the dance lol :D
Date: 03/27/12 11:08 pm Title: Chapter One: That's What Makes You Beautiful
Wow! this is something new.. looking forward for the next chapter..:)
Date: 03/27/12 07:35 pm Title: Chapter One: That's What Makes You Beautiful
I see a lot of potential with this story, but there were a few mistakes that I came across. No big deal, really =] I just thought you should know that you had put 'Maria' instead of Jessica near the end. And there was a part where Tom said 'Em'. I don't know if that is just his nickname for her or what.
I also was a bit confused about the part where Tom asked Jessica about nobody asking her to the dance. There wasn't anything said on her part about nobody asking her.
Like I said, this story has a lot of potential, I just thought I would help with some helpful criticism =]
Anyways, I am looking forward to what you come up with =]
Author's Response: Hi, I have already made the necessary changes. All mistakes are mine. I have no beta and I was really sleepy when I posted this chapter, so I wasn't thinking straight. Sorry for the confusion. :3
Date: 03/27/12 06:35 pm Title: Chapter One: That's What Makes You Beautiful
I like the start, but who is Em and Maria? Thats a bit confusing... :3
Author's Response: Sorry for the confusion. Mistakes are mine. I've already made the necessary changes to the story. Thanks for noticing it for me. I was really sleepy when I posted it, so I guess I didn't see the mistakes. Thanks again. I appreciated it a lot.. :)