Date: 07/27/10 06:41 pm Title: XIII: You've Got a Broken Heart and a Fixed Rationality
I'm so bummed that this story is almost over, I've really enjoyed it so far. The quick updates are great and I can't wait to read what happens when Tom comes over. :)
Author's Response: Thanks for continuing to read and review in support of this story. It's fantastic! ^--^ Thank you very much~~ n__n
Date: 07/27/10 06:39 pm Title: XIII: You've Got a Broken Heart and a Fixed Rationality
AHAHAH. I love it when people speak gibberish.
Author's Response: Okay. ^^" I suppose it's charming. Thanks for reading and reviewing~~
Date: 07/27/10 06:08 pm Title: XIII: You've Got a Broken Heart and a Fixed Rationality
I'm completely ecstatic that you are on a roll with the fast updates. I had to be without my laptop over this past weekend while I was at my grandma's hosue, so today I caught up with chapter twelve, and came to find the, 'next' button awaiting my mouse pointer at the bottom of the page :D
{& sorry. I'm not quite sure why I felt I had to include my past weekend events xD}
I guess before I address this chapter, I just wanted to say your author's response to my last review had me laughing. Mainly with the, "sockmates" :D It felt good to know that even in my mishap of, 'rausible,' I'm not one of the only word-squishers left :P
One thing I sort-of picked up on while reading this chapter {& I'm still in some deep trance of thought about it XD} was the fact that in the e-mail to TD, Bill had mentioned that he would be wearing his Pink Floyd T-shirt at the New Year's Celebration. After the Alfonse incident, It said Bill had switched from his turtleneck into the PF Band T-shirt. Bill called Tom. Tom's coming over. & No where did it mention Bill changing shirts once more. So, won't Tom notice after reading the email that Bill was indeed wearing the shirt that 99red_dreams said he would wear? I mean, he is smart enough to put two and two together I'm sure.
{OMTH. Did I seriously just go into a ramble about a shirt? It must be the 'Amp' I'm drinking. My apologies :P}
I loved this chapter, Just as every single one before-hand *heart*
{I will definitely try using a HTML code in my next review XD} I personally liked the fact that Bill lost control, he became a bit vulnerable, letting himself cry the way he did, & flat-out letting Alfonse know he's done with him. {& I can give a 'woop woop' to that fact alone XD} Silly Alfonse. It's not like he can find someone better than Bill. & If he thinks he can...he is even more delusional than I imagine :p
For Else, the 'step-sister' thing didn't cross my mind {so that was a nice little twist in there} I need some better deciphering skills, that's for sure xD
This Line:
"Christmas Eve sucks like a rat stuck in the vacuum cleaner"
BAHAHA XD I LOVE IT :P
I think I will take out the 'Christmas Eve' part and just adapt it to whatever situation I'm in. I'm pretty sure my mother would get a kick out of me saying, "Loading the dishwasher sucks like a rat stuck in a vacuum cleaner" XD
{Of course, copyright credits to you *teehee*}
As always, I'll be looking foward to more of this captivating story ;)
-----Samantha
Author's Response: Yay! Another happy camper! :D I too, am also happy about the fast updates. I feel less burdened and more acceptable for everyone. ^^ Haha~ Not to worry abut the weekend events, it's good you're here now, of course. I go absolutely batshit without my internets! *pats* You're a brave woman. T__T
Has my story gotten you thinking, now? XD I had to read this part of your review more than once. My stomach sank a little, because at first I was sure I did something totally wrong. (I do like to plan out everything as best I can. I review my story/chapter quite thoroughly) However, upon reading it a second and third time (for good measure) I realise everything is as it should be and that you've come to a critical conclusion. No apologies needed, you made a good observation, though, for me to say anything more about it would be unethical! xD Suppose we'll all have to wait~
Haha, I'm pleased you liked that line. I used to say something similar to it all the time. Most often, I'd say to my friends, or especially my sister, 'You suck' plainly, just because I know they'll say 'I don't!' and I reply, 'like a vacuum cleaner'. I'm not all that creative in that sense (I don't use the phrase now so much, having moved on to cruder insults as I've grown, but yeah. xD) but I'm glad I could amuse you! =3
Yay, I must be the Queen of long Author responses~~! xD Okay, once again, thank you very, very much for reading and reviewing! ^--^
Date: 07/27/10 05:56 pm Title: XIII: You've Got a Broken Heart and a Fixed Rationality
Score! I really love being right! XD It was so weird seeing my own name in the chapter end notes, though...but kinda cool :) Thank you!
FINALLY! They've decided to meet! *does silly Bill-dance with glee* If things go down as I picture them in my head (me and my damned predictions), it will be epic! Yes, I have quite high expectations, but don't you worry, I'm quite sure you can deliver ;)
Sooooo...Tom did the right thing, even though Jelena had been acting like a bitch.. I really hope he will take part in Else's life after this, though I know your story probably won't say anything about it, and that it ends soon. (Which in itself is making me a bit sad.) I'll just have to create the future in my head, I guess, and so I choose to make him a really good step-brother!
I feel really bad for Bill now.. Okay, so first I was feeling bad for Tom 'cause he had no one, and now I'm feeling bad for Bill, not for having no one, because he actually does, but because he's feeling like he can talk to them about what's bothering him. I'm really glad he called Tom, though, the two of them need each other!
What can I say, I just want the twins happpy, and they're always happiest when they're together (related or not, in reality or fiction, doesn't really matter).. It's just, Bill & Tom, you know. ;)
Did I mention how excited I've been about your quick updates, by the way? (Yes, I know I haven't..) I'm loving it!! :D Seing a new BA update always makes me happy, and lately you've been spioling me. No complaints, though, only a lot of smiles :)
Author's Response: Haha, no problem. You were, after all, the only one who mentioned it! So~ ^^
*squeaks* Now I'm totally nervous for your expectations. T__T Aish, I will do my absolute best! *Absolutely sure now, that I will screw up*
It's a long shot, regarding Tom and Else, but I'm glad you have a good picture of them in your head. Don't be sad~~ n__n
Yes, I totally get you. Tom and Bill belong to each other any way, any how. It wouldn't feel right any other way~
Well, I'm extremely glad you're lovin' the fast updates too! I know I am~~ ^---^ Thank you for reading, and leaving me a fantastic, wonderful review as always~~ ♥
Date: 07/27/10 12:34 am Title: XII: You've Got to Realise Something's Gotta Give
i loved this chapter, but i'm kinda hoping that Bill dumps his stupid bf and runs to Tom...
Author's Response: Don't we all! T___T Don't worry, is all I have to say~ Thanks for reading!!
Date: 07/25/10 11:43 pm Title: XII: You've Got to Realise Something's Gotta Give
This all so messed up :S I want to read more... and more
Author's Response: I'm being a little faster with updates these days, so maybe your wish will be granted faster! =P Thanks for reading!
Date: 07/25/10 11:25 pm Title: XI: You've Got to Slowly Start Speeding Up
I love the story, have I told you that?
Author's Response: You might have, but even if you have, I don't mind hearing it again. *selfish* XD Haha~ Thank you! ♥
Date: 07/25/10 11:02 pm Title: X: You've Got to Be Dreaming
God, I want Karla out of the picture so badly
Author's Response: Your wish is my command~~ Ommm~~XD Hehe~
Date: 07/25/10 10:25 pm Title: XII: You've Got to Realise Something's Gotta Give
ive never mentioned how much i love your chapter names with their little...definitions. :) theyre clever and so perfect~ and OH GOD, YES ME TOO!! I AM ALSO IN MOURNING OVER BILLS NOSE :'( we can only hope that he'll get over it fast and take it out permanently...
okay so this chapter was really great, i loved it tho it made me a tad sad. stupid alfonse...“If here isn’t my ass, then no.” lol...at least bill seems to be this close to over him. and the kiss with reality was really long awaited, tho of course it didnt turn out like a fairytale just yet. after the emails from this chapter, can bill not easily guess that it is tom?
Author's Response: Haha~~ Nice to hear from you again. Yes, I don't know why I began writing the chapter titles like that, some of them are a little strange, but if you like them, I'm glad. =P To be honest I like coming up with chapter titles, I've found, not just here, but in others too. *goofy smile* I'm SO glad everyone is with me on this septum piercing thing! *hugs and cries into shoulder*
I'll try and makes things happy again soon. D: I have to argue Bill is over him, he just has a problem with letting go and putting himself out there on the line. As for Bill guessing it's Tom, the pieces aren't there yet but he will be suspicious, I assure you. Anyone would. However, we haven't seen Bill's response to those messages, so, we have yet to find out his thoughts on those revelations!
Thanks for reading and reviewing, love! *big hugs* ^---^
Date: 07/25/10 11:43 am Title: I: You've Got a Beginning and an End
I cant believe I missed the last update! I only really track this story anymore, because honest to god it is amazing, and when I saw you'd updated I wanted to fist pump ;) LAME I know lmfao, but still that is how much I love it.
You write so perfectly. I love everything about your style. The way the emails write an overview of the story in an almost third person way, to leave you guessing through whilst reading what's going to happen.
I adore how you're keeping things slow, and totally realistic. And how you're making the emotions last through out.
The way you describe the emotions too, totally sucks the reader in, because I can honestly say whilst reading your story I totally get absorbed and when I finish I feel the way the characters do, and then as if the situation is real I totally mull over what could happen in my head.
(lmfao I sound so lame, and disjointed :| but I usually write and read)
And the humor! With the STFU and Bill pondering over the english lettering, so smart and well thought out, and intertwining it with Tom and Hello sunshine.
I like that Alfonso is an asshole Mr Nice guy, honestly anyone who isn't Tom is gonna be seen as an asshole, so even if not intended we all hate him anyway :P
You researched everything so well, with the Christmas festival location and the court proceedings, not many people do that and I am totally thankful and grateful for the people who take the time to make their stories as realistic as possible.
And now I'm going to stop being an absolute creep and read the next chapter again. :')
Hope you are doing okay sweetheart!
(longest review I've given ever ahah)
Author's Response: Nothing lame about it. I think it's sweet. Boohoo T__T You made me happy~~~ It's okay, I do this really gay flutter-clap when stories I really want updated, update. xD Yours is less embarrassing. =P
I don't know what to say, your praise is all so lovely, I'm drawing a blank for a response. I don't feel worthy, I must say. *bow* You're just a darling, but moreover, I'm absolutely, one hundred percent thrilled that my writing has made an impression you. That, more than anything makes my day bright, and makes me feel accomplished. I do work very hard, and in return, if you're happy with the story, it's all worth it.
Thanks for your thoughts and feelings, and I'm honoured I get your longest review thus far! xD Really! I'm doing pretty good right now, and I hope that you, too, are healthy and happy. Thanks for that fantastic review, it made my day - nah - it made my week. =P ♥
Date: 07/25/10 06:52 am Title: I: You've Got a Beginning and an End
Okay, I honestly want to kick you right now. How the hell can you think this chapter was LAME?? I loved it! Honestly, I did.
By the way, I don't really want to kick you haha. :)
P.S. I LOVE You've Got Mail! And When Harry Met Sally, come to think of it.
Author's Response: Kick me all you want. xD I still really dislike it, but if you like it, I can only be appreciative and glad. WHMS is my favourite movie, well one of them. Glad to find another fan! Ah... I really hope to hear back from you if you decide to read on. I appreciate your reading and reviewing here, sending me your kind thoughts. Thanks very much! ^--^
Date: 07/24/10 04:40 pm Title: I: You've Got a Beginning and an End
haha sory it wasn't really a review....
I liked the chapter
but found it,sad.........and sweet?
Its cute that Tom and Bill get jealous...
XD
Author's Response: That's all right. o.o Haha. Thanks for reading!!
Date: 07/24/10 04:28 am Title: XII: You've Got to Realise Something's Gotta Give
Great chapie!
and I wish Bill would take the septum off too!
Author's Response: Thank you! ^--^ And YES! Thanks for agreeing about that! Rawr~ T_T
Date: 07/24/10 02:49 am Title: XII: You've Got to Realise Something's Gotta Give
*Stomps foot* Why? Why Bill did you slap Tom?!?! I was bouncing cause they kissed and then Bill slapped him! *sobs* I have to say I love the email TDeluxe is writing, soo many hints in this one. Will they finally figure it out? Will Bill realise that Alfonse doesn't love him and he can do sooo much better? I love this honey, so happy to see the update! Can't wait for the next one.
Author's Response: So many unanswered questions! D: Don't worry~ The strings will tie together soon. Thanks for reading and reviewing love, I'm so happy you liked it. ^---^ ♥ ♥ ♥
Date: 07/24/10 01:27 am Title: XII: You've Got to Realise Something's Gotta Give
NOOOOOO GODDAMMIT BILL.
Author's Response: Boo Bill! D: I know~... fufu. Thanks for reading.
Date: 07/23/10 10:00 pm Title: XII: You've Got to Realise Something's Gotta Give
cant wait for more!!!
Author's Response: Okay, thank you! o.o ♥
Date: 07/23/10 09:45 pm Title: XII: You've Got to Realise Something's Gotta Give
Does Alfonse love Bill? Because I get a feeling he doesn't really :/
And don't mourn Bill's nose >.< His nose is still perfect imo. And he likes his piercing.
Author's Response: I don't know, love. (Well, I suppose I do, but that's for me to know, and you to find out. =P) Does he?
As for Bill's nose, I can't; I've just never liked septum piercings, as long as I can remember I've always disliked them. I suppose that dislike became hatred when it showed up on a face as pretty as Bill's. D: I dunno.
Thanks for reading and reviewing!! Much love. ^--^ ♥
Date: 07/23/10 08:42 pm Title: XII: You've Got to Realise Something's Gotta Give
Don't worry hun, I'm in mourning, too. :(
At the very least it's only a somewhat subtle silver ball. I would die if he put a giant black ring in.
Anyway, this chapter was gold :DD So much stuff happened!
Author's Response: D: *sniffle* So true. Let's hope he doesn't get some horrific bull's ring or something next. *starts welling up with tears again* xDD... oh gosh. D:
Eee~ I'm glad you liked it! Yes lots of stuff just poured out all at once. >.> I was a bit hesitant, but I was like, ah, what the hell. Thanks for reading and reviewing!! ♥
Date: 07/23/10 07:00 pm Title: XII: You've Got to Realise Something's Gotta Give
Damn Bill, why can't you just accept your feelings?
Anyways, loved this. Twas awesome, and I can't wit for more!
Author's Response: Bill is a bit stupid, but we love him anyway. D:
Thanks for loving it, reading and reviewing! ^--^
Date: 07/23/10 06:32 pm Title: XII: You've Got to Realise Something's Gotta Give
Wow....I really hated this chapter...in a good way! ;) There was so much emotion, and my insides actually churned when Bill slappen Tom. I mean, seriously, WHAT THE FUCK IS HE DOING?!
I feel strangely sympathetic to Tom, though. Seems like his world is kind of falling apart. Well, I guess it has been for a while.. What I mean is that somehow, Bill's been the one keeping things in check, and now that he's turning his back on him too.. I dunno, I get weird feelings when reading, and sometimes my head kind of propels in strange directions.
Granted, Tom still has Georg (though he's not around much), Gustav (though he's more Bill's friend than Tom's) and Felicia (though she's actually in love with him, which means shes got alternative motives).. And yet, I somehow picture him all alone in the world, 'Red' his only confidant (which in itself is kind of sad). I really want to give him a hug, pet his head and tell him everything will be all right...
And, oh my lord, what on earth is going on with Bill?! Reading about him breaking down made me really sad... *sends lots of hugs and kisses in his direction* Why can't he just follow his heart? It's screaming at him, and he'd turning a deaf ear! Not good, not good. Not good at all! :(
I join you in your mouring.. If I ever see him, I will smack hiss ass (*yum*) for pulling that stunt.. Then force him to take it out. ('Cause you have to remember; If you pull it out, it will ruin his perfect nose. If he removes it 'willingly', there will only be a small scar as a result. *Nods*)
Author's Response: Your reviews just, goodness, brighten my day. A serious reader, and you take it all in; I love it. ♥
Yes, poor Tomi. Ouch. D: Can't imagine get slapped by Bill would nice, even with those skinny little arms. Awww, I'm so glad for your sympathy ~ I feel bad for Tomi too, but I always have faith things will turn around. *sniff* When you lay it all out there like that, I feel I've destroyed Tom. *wail* T__T
Bill is a bit delusional, but I have to say if I were him, I'd be a bit sceptical too. D: Let's hope he gets himself in check soon~
HAHA~ If you're ass-smacking, I'm helping!!Yes we must spank him until he realises the errors of his ways and takes it out. T____T (Why does that sound like fun, and a very lengthy activity?) Thanks for reading darling. ♥