Date: 08/25/09 11:19 pm Title: Chapter 1
...Yea now im positive those shoes were bad luck... - hehe no on can resist bill's puppy face ^__^
...I will kill you with my eyeliner... - ouch!!
...Nobody calls me just a pretty face... - servs him right! eeeewww, stupid creepy guy
...Suddenly it began to hail... - gustav spoke a lil' too soon
...David had run over a video camera the girls had dropped when they ran away... - owh yeah! david to the rescue ^__^
Date: 08/16/09 12:25 pm Title: Chapter 1
Combine eyeliner death threats, the Megatron version of Perez Hilton and some soul stealing fangirls and you have…Luck, Fans and Shoes!
This is definitely the best use of the line that I’ve read so far, you worked the dignity and pants parts into the story without making it feel forced. There were a couple of minor errors but nothing a quick beta read wouldn’t be able to solve and overall the fic was hilarious to read. The image of David pulling up in an escalade and scattering the fangirls had me giggling into my coffee. Thank you for a new phobia of shoes on tables and a good ten minutes of laughter. =]
Date: 08/14/09 11:02 am Title: Chapter 1
i liked it a lot...i believe that superstition too...i'm always yelling about shoes on the table...good job...funny too...i like bill's american sayings...again, good job...
Date: 08/13/09 06:18 pm Title: Chapter 1
Nice tie in with the final line and neat idea for the whole fic using superstition. I think some of it felt as though it was going a little quickly, and a couple of errors could be picked up by a beta, but overall well done - one of the smoothest uses of the line I've seen ^_^