Date: 08/10/13 05:31 am Title: ...To Be Loved
I read the 8.48 update and then found this too. I didn't realise you also had another story on the go. It shows promise and I'm wondering where it will go. Just a couple of points you might like to go back and amend, I noticed in the first chapter you mentioned Tom wanting to wax his dreads and also Bill having black hair, then in a later chapter you mentioned Tom's cornrows and Bill being blond, and also again in another chapter you call Tom a dreadhead, so you might want to go back and fix the mistakes for someone coming in and reading from the start. Also, from things on the BTK app we now know Tom refers to Bill as Billi, not Billa...but then he could call him Billa in private, couldn't he? Sorry, that sounds like a lot of criticism, and its not meant to be, just that I know how prone to inconsistencies my own writing is (especially when I do my own beta-ing like you) and I hate knowing I've not kept the details right throughout. But...as I said, promising story, and the twins' relationship is really sweet. Love all the details you put in about the recording studio, and the trials that life as a celebrity brings. Hope you keep updating. Hugs, Helen x
Author's Response: Oh god I know!! I've had it going for some time so I know there's a lot of little details that are probably off...by then again I have kinda left the fandom now (I don't have the time to devote to my obsession anymore :( ) but yeah, I may actually take it down and just overhaul it completely then re-post I'm not yet sure...an it's not criticism! I prefer people to tell me these things as it helps me grow as a writer, so thank you muchly! <3 rnFern xx
Date: 10/02/12 03:02 pm Title: ...To Be Loved
conti please
Author's Response: i will be soon, my other fiction 8:48pm is having to take priority for now please sit tight and keep an eye out for me <3 rnFern xx
Date: 02/21/11 01:56 am Title: ...To Be Loved
I'm very glad to see an update. I really like this story, thanks for the great update, keep up the good work!
Author's Response: thank you very muchly :D and i will, another update may be up soon :D rnFern xx
Date: 02/20/11 11:38 pm Title: ...To Be Loved
Adorable!! I love it :) I can't wait for more!
btw, I've always loved when people use 'Tomi' and 'Billa' it's just so cute :3
Author's Response: thank you!! more may be up soon :D rni know! its just too cute sometimes :L rnFern xx
Date: 01/30/11 10:49 pm Title: ...To Be Loved
make new one plz i like no lurv this story
Author's Response: ooh! a review!! -OMNOM- XD rnrnaww thanks a lot for your nice comments!! hopefully a new chapter of '...To Be Loved' will be out soon! rnFern xx
Date: 01/07/11 07:32 pm Title: ...To Be Loved
I LOVE THIS :)
Author's Response: Wow thank you! :) rnFern xx
Date: 11/08/10 12:39 am Title: ...To Be Loved
xDDDD I love that dammed song by Papa Roach :)
Author's Response: me too!!! i saw them at a venue in my city last year and they were so immense!!! and they did ...To Be Loved too!!! :) rnFern xx
Date: 11/08/10 12:28 am Title: ...To Be Loved
I like how Tom made reference to them having talked about Bill's size before. I am very much looking forward to more of this. I hope you can update soon. =)
Author's Response: hehe yay! someone picked up on that :) theres a lot of this fic written already, but its all on paperr :/ so it'll take me a while to get it all on my PC cos i have loads of work, but hopefully it wont be too long! thanx for reviewing rnfern xx
Date: 10/26/10 01:23 pm Title: Tourniquet
wow this is hard
Author's Response: i'll take that as a good thing :) thanx for reviewing!! i might go write a new chapter for Tourniquet now :L rnthanx again rnFern xx
Date: 09/14/10 10:57 pm Title: ...To Be Loved
Are you planning on continuing this? I hope so.
Author's Response: indeedy i am!! :) rnFern xx
Date: 09/14/10 09:19 pm Title: ...To Be Loved
Lol.. wooly arms.. lmao.
Anyways, it didn't go anywhere, like you said, I thought it was a oneshot at first so I was like, wtf. xD Then realized it's a WIP chapter fic! Yay.
We didn't really get to understand what the plot is yet, that's okay though.
One thing, just don't add the random German. Seriously. It's even stated on the THF Grammar Guide NOT to use that. It's stated as rules of the site not to stick random German in there. (unless it's part of the plot. Like Bill only speaks German but Tom only knows English say ,and Tom has problems communicating with him. It contributes to the plot. What you showed, did not.) It makes the writing look sort of iffy, and we all know what it says.. "Hallo" is pointless, why not just 'hello'? The rest of the text is in English. Ich liebe dich auch is I love you too. We all know that...
Anyways, it just really annoys me when I see that. Just giving you a heads up.
Billa bothers me too, but that's a personal preference, don't mind it. xD
(I sound like a jerk now wtf.)
I could go on, but this is about YOU not ME.
So onto your story.
(btw I just clicked this fic b/c I liked your username. o.0 lmao.) The title seems interesting and suspenseful, makes me wonder if it's gonna be Tom wanting to be loved, or Bill!
Tom seems so clingy in the fic, love it. Sweet and Bill is a lazy head. :3
Does the last paragraph hint something...? 'she' seems strange. Idk what will come of this...
Loving it so far, don't use random German again please. I'm looking forward to future updates!
Author's Response: haha! thanx for the heads up! :) tbh iwrote this first bit quite a long time ago and i forgot to take that out!! so i shall go back and change it! thanx for reminding mii!! :) rnas for the plot this chapter isnt meant to give much away yet ;) and yes Bill is a lazy head atm the reason will be revealed in time :) and i dont know where 'she' is going. rni promoise no more random german :P and im glad that you liked it! rnas for my username its a song by The Rasmus, in case you didnt already know :P rnFern xx
Date: 09/14/10 08:48 pm Title: ...To Be Loved
I really like it so far! I'd love to read more. I can't wait for the next update! Good luck with your first attempt at twincest. :D
Author's Response: yay! thank you :) more will be up soon and thanx a lot! :) rnFern xx
Date: 08/29/10 03:16 pm Title: One step Closer...
This is so sad but amazing! your an amazing writer :)
Author's Response: wow thank you very much :) -ubermassivehugs- xxxx
Date: 08/16/10 01:47 pm Title: A Place Where You Belong
aw, i hates you *pouts* I had the Sonisphere festival in my country in June, but Bullet didn't come T.T As for Fever, it's absolutely awesome @.@ though I still don't get the cover art *laughs*
Author's Response: Bullet for doing a tour of the uk, and they're not coming near my city so im having to travel to Manchester...>_<....and i missed sonisphere in england too :'( rnFever is brilliant!!! i love it, ive listened to it non stop since it came out and im not bored yet!! rnno i dont either....the naked woman thats part crab, makes no sense lol rnxx
Date: 08/16/10 05:06 am Title: A Place Where You Belong
*grabby hands* Bullet! I love the band and the new album is totally wicked xD Matt *hearts*
Author's Response: i know! Fever is immense...im proper excited cos im going to see them live in December <3 <3
Date: 08/16/10 12:33 am Title: A Place Where You Belong
loved it. AND I LOVE MATT TUCK!!! I've met him twice and he's amazing. It was so cool to see this pairing. Great job!
Author's Response: thank you :)i doo too...really??? wow!! im uber jealous!! im going to see them live in december, iam sooo excited!!!! XD with Bring Me The Horizon and Atreyu as support <3 rni just thought it was a bit different, since i dont think ive ever seen a Matt Tuck/Bill pairing beforernthanx again! rnFern xx
Date: 08/15/10 11:45 pm Title: A Place Where You Belong
I absolutely love BFMV and TH. Especially when they're compared together :) I love this story. I'm going to recommend it to my friends
Author's Response: me too! :) i just thought it would make a cool change to the normal pairings we always read...oh cool thanks a lot XD and thanx for reviewing!!! rnFern xx
Date: 07/27/10 12:54 am Title: Tourniquet
i started to read this story cuz...it said general XD im getting tired of all the twincest...i really liked it and i hope you come with more soon.
i'll definetly keep up :)
Author's Response: yeah, the 'cest is a side story, this fic is not about love its about drugs and how they destroy lives, etc. :) rnglad you like it!! rnand thanx for reviewing! rnFern xx
Date: 07/26/10 11:25 pm Title: Tourniquet
Happy to see an update...been looking forward to one! This is gonna be one big nightmare before it's all over-I had to check the warning's again because of how bad Bill is getting!
Author's Response: thanks :) yeah im sorry its been so long!! >_< like what?? a year?? shiiiiite rnyeah it is :/ and yes ima gonna review all the warnings and stuff when i start chapter 7.....not sure how this is gonna end, theres a one shot alongside this that reveals one possible ending titled "Just To Get High" :) rnthanks for the review! <3 rnFern xx
Date: 07/05/10 11:50 pm Title: No Roads Left
WoW. All I can say is wow. I really, turely appericiate you for posting this story. It doesn't make me feel so bad for always having bad things happen to my character. Thank you.
This story was definately one for my favorites because it shows, even in death, true love awaits us all.
Author's Response: your welcome :) i do bad things to my characters all the time.....its better than me doing stupid stuff to myself....writing for me is escape and my therapy as is writing and listening to music :) rnthank you for your amazing review, it was greatly appreciated and has made my night! thank you!! -hugs- rnFern xx