Ok then. I have a lot to say about this, so hold tight…
MANY comma splices… “He wasn't thinking, he couldn't believe it.” “Droplets of water were falling onto his precious twin's face, he later realized they were the tears from his eyes.” “Nobody would understand, nobody COULD understand.” Try using semicolons instead of commas if you want to get the same dramatic effect when seperating sentences. And that last sentence is just a bit awkward. Capitilaztion should probably be left for speech, and even then, it should be used sparingly. Use italics instead to stress something. Other than that, I just have to say that Tom was extremely OOC, but you never know how he would really react in a crisis like this one so it’s okay.
OK, the good parts now! Very sad, but not all stories can be happy, right?  I really loved flashback Tom had as Georg and Gustav talked to him. The story has very few details about the setting and what was acutally going on, but I think that, because Tom, who is going through an extremely tragic moment, is focused on, it works. I found very few spelling mistakes!
Thanks for a good read! Keep writing, please!
-BRE

Author's Response: thanks I'll try to remember those. Well, I was trying to make it so that you didn't know which twin was which; to leave it up to the reader's preference like...refering to who was dead and all...rnok that last sentence was weird...thanks anyway