Date: 04/30/09 07:30 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part I)
O: This is so good. x3 I love your details. Please update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks! =]
Date: 04/27/09 10:00 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part I)
i really dig your writing style. very refreshing.
eager to read the next update..
Author's Response: danke! :] Just updated five minutes ago lol
Date: 04/27/09 09:09 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part I)
Ha! That's right. Make Tom do what he doesn't want to. XD
Author's Response: Exactly! =D
Date: 04/27/09 03:01 am Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part I)
I need more updates!!XD
Sorry if that sounds too rude lol. Go take your time please^^
And I just can't wait for Bill to come out!^^
Author's Response: Haha no no no, it's not rude at all! =]rnOur beautiful Bill shall make an appearance soon, I'm thinking.
Date: 04/27/09 01:36 am Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part I)
I love the way this is written, so descriptive without being over the top. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! =]
Date: 04/26/09 08:57 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part I)
Hmm... what a curious story I have stumbled upon. I'm not quite sure what I think about this story and I like it that way.
I have to compliment your writing style. I'm not drowning in metaphors and long strings of words and descriptions---not that those things are bad in writing, but you can only take them in certain amounts. I think your writing has a really simple elegance to it; everything is clear and flows really well and it's very pleasant to read. Your description is well placed and not too much nor too little and your vocabulary really compliments this. You also manage to avoid cliché and overused phrases quite well, which is refreshing.
Tom's disdain for his surroundings is clear and I feel like I can relate; I can feel the uncomfortable summer heat and compare it to life in the city. It's ironic that Tom wants to be in the city, somewhere cruel and cold, because he's so discomforted by the cozy and 'perfect' life in the countryside.
As for the plot, I'm really a sucker for stories like this, where the plot is centric to surroundings and relationships. A plot doesn't have to be complicated to make a good story, and I quite like where you're taking this. It seems very promising, and I'm eager to see how Bill is properly introduced. I like that you haven't given him much description yet and I'm very curious about him.
Also I adore the opening paragraphs of each chapter. They're very intriguing and thought-provoking and really add a nice finesse to the story.
Overall, a very good story so far and I'm eager for more :)
Author's Response: Wow, I really appreciate the detailed review! Thank you for the compliments. rnYes, good old Tom would rather be watching movies on the couch and stuffing his face with pizza than spend a summer in the midst of beautiful nature. :P rnBill will enter the story very soon, and it will be somewhat challenging characterizing him. I don't want to mess Bill up!rnThanks for noticing the paragraphs, too. They are meant to be a deeper insight into the situations of the story, and I'm glad you like them! :D rnrn*HUGS*!! =]rnrn
Date: 04/26/09 08:49 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part I)
Don't be nervous! This story is seriously good, and I love your writing style! PLease add more soon. You have new fan.
--Mona
Author's Response: yay! Thanks! =]
Date: 04/26/09 08:40 pm Title: Taste and See
Oh. My. God.
That's all I can say.
You can freakin' write.
Descriptive as I don't know what. I mean, you have me freaking hooked already. What the hell man?
I love it.
Author's Response: *grins* thank you so much!
Date: 04/26/09 08:35 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part I)
Ahh, I really like this.
I love the way you write; it's so detailed. I feel like I can picture everything perfectly.
Update soon ;D
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! =]
Date: 04/26/09 08:31 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part I)
I'm excited for the next chapter! Could it be that Bill will be there? =O lol
Good chappy, wish it was a bit longer though, but I like it! =D
Author's Response: Hmm! Quite possibly :PP he has already had a glimpse of a certain black-haired someone twice. Sorry it wasn't long; I had to debate between adding the dinner scene into this chapter, but that would make it freakishly long, so I'm saving it for the next one :) Thanks for the review!
Date: 04/12/09 09:14 am Title: Taste and See
Oh, this is really good so far =] I can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!!
Date: 04/12/09 03:35 am Title: Taste and See
wonderfully written.
I'm enchanted by it.
Author's Response: I'm happy that you like it =] thank you!!
Date: 04/12/09 01:48 am Title: Taste and See
Oh, this is absolutely beautiful! You're so eloquent!
The plot sounds extremely interesting, and this chapter was too. It drew me in, and by the end of paragraph three, I was won over completely.
The vivid imagery completely sucks you into a new world, makes you see what he's seeing, think what Tom's thinking, and feel what he feels. You have a powerful talent with words, and I look forward to reading more! :)
Author's Response: Wow thank you so much! I'm glad you like it. =]
Date: 04/12/09 01:32 am Title: Taste and See
Ooooh, I like where this is going! Nice use of details in your descriptions - I like that a lot. Please update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks!!! =] I really appreciate the review.
Date: 04/12/09 01:15 am Title: Taste and See
it's a really nice start
and I like your writing style.
please continue soon. :]
Author's Response: Thank you very much =]
Date: 04/11/09 10:51 pm Title: Taste and See
Oooh. It sounds interesting so far. I can't wait to read more. What inspired this, if I may ask?
Author's Response: Thank you =D Well, I'm not really sure. I guess I just wanted to try a different storyline with an outdoorsy-setting. And the first thing to came to mind was a cabin that my family owns on the Gorge so I guess this is kind of based off of that.