Date: 05/11/09 09:03 pm Title: Paint it on My Heart
wow DAMN! lol i like it but try and tone down trhe detail just a tad
Author's Response: too much?? sorry I get a little carried away hehe :P
Date: 05/11/09 09:01 pm Title: Paint it on My Heart
omg............okz update soooonnn..plz...omg..let it be bill catch him..and make tom apologize..idk mae tom kry in front of him...dont make it bad=[=[plz..
Author's Response: hmm, I guess we'll just have to see what happens next! thanks for the review! :]
Date: 05/11/09 08:46 pm Title: Paint it on My Heart
Oh, that was so sad :(
*bops Tom* What he did to Andreas was so mean. That poor kid...
I didn't think Georg and Gustav would turn out to be assholes xD But then again, Tom deserved it for even CONSIDERING spray-painting the house. I can't wait to find out who catches him :D
Love, love, love the chapter. I'm so glad you could update =]
Author's Response: Yup, Tom is a meany. Bill has his work cut out for him! THANK YOU FOR THE REVIEW :]]]]
Date: 05/04/09 12:51 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part II)
I'm glad to see this updated, and I love the new banner by the way.
I'm so intrigued by Bill. With the way Grandma Annabelle acted in the beginning before Bill entered, I thought that Bill would be some deranged manicly depressed freak, or something. But you totally fooled me, and now I'm dying to know what exactly is ailing him. Bill has lots of quirks and I've been left guessing about him, which is always the best. :) I can't wait to find out more about him. The praying threw me for a loop, and I'm wondering why he didn't eat anything, but I don't want to jump to conclusions.
I'm still hooked and anxious for more, so I hope you will update soon. :)
Author's Response: Thanks =] I finally decided to ask somebody who knows what they're doing (unlike me) to make the banner. Yes, Bill is quite a complicated, interesting fellow with a past. We'll just have to delve more into it soon, eh? Don't worry, Bill's not some religious-nutcase, but I won't give TOO much away. Thank you so much for your feeback! =] *hugs*
Date: 05/03/09 10:02 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part II)
Who ISN'T cranky when they're hungry? I know I am. What exactly are Jorg and Grandma talking about?
Author's Response: So true. I know I am! My parents can attest to that haha =] well, that is a very good question. Looks like we'll just have to wait and see doesn't it? =]]]
Date: 05/03/09 07:00 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part II)
Haha I feel Tom's problem! I hate being dragged to friend/family things and my parents force me to mingle with other "kids". Sorry, got my own friends already heh
Ooooh, what's up with Bill? Crazy? Super-religious to the point of craziness? Now that I find a bit strange, but whatever. Care to share? =D
Happy sweet sixteen btw! Update soon please!
Author's Response: Me Too! It's so annoying and awkward haha. Lol Don't freak out- Bill's not that religious. They just say grace at their house, it's no big deal. It's just supposed to symbolize the close family community of the atmosphere. Thank you =]
Date: 05/02/09 05:03 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part II)
I swear I can't get enough of this. This is one of the only stories where I actually take the time to read it word for word, because ever sentence opens up more distinction and imagery to the story. You truly have a knack for keeping peoples attention.
It's nice to finally meet Bill. He is a crazy thing isn't he? Haha, Tom needs to get a grip of himself and lighten up. Cranky indeed, my my.
Loving it thoroughly hun!
--Mona
Author's Response: Thank you so much; you are too kind =] hehehe I know Tom is quite the grouch lol
Date: 05/02/09 01:50 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part II)
Cute! :D
I can't help but wonder what's wrong with Bill. I'm sure we'll find out later, though ;)
And Tom...is hilarious.
Oooh, and happy birthday! =]
Author's Response: Thank you =]
Date: 05/02/09 01:41 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part II)
Happy Birthday!
Glad to see more of Bill here...
He seems so carefree and i like it, you could also see that as much as Tom doesn't like it, he's drawn to Bill.
Can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: Thank you very much!! =] yes, I'm glad you picked up on that-it's just what I was going for.
Date: 05/02/09 01:11 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part II)
Tom's sure is cranky when hungry lol!XD And wouldn't it be embarrassing if he went back with no pants on? LOL...
Bill's being a sweetheart. But what's wrong with him..??T____T I can feel the adults were talking about him. Is something wrong with him..??T^T Or is it another person??
OMG I can't wait for more updates...XDXD
Author's Response: Yes he is! HAHAHA a pantless Tom would go over real well at the dinner table :PrnWe will just have to find out later hehehernthanks so much for the review! =]
Date: 05/02/09 12:06 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part II)
OOO: Awww...Bill is adorable! I'm so curious as to whatever Bill's ailment is. Please upate soon!
Author's Response: Hmm...maybe it's not an ailment? =P
Date: 04/30/09 07:30 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part I)
O: This is so good. x3 I love your details. Please update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks! =]
Date: 04/27/09 10:00 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part I)
i really dig your writing style. very refreshing.
eager to read the next update..
Author's Response: danke! :] Just updated five minutes ago lol
Date: 04/27/09 09:09 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part I)
Ha! That's right. Make Tom do what he doesn't want to. XD
Author's Response: Exactly! =D
Date: 04/27/09 03:01 am Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part I)
I need more updates!!XD
Sorry if that sounds too rude lol. Go take your time please^^
And I just can't wait for Bill to come out!^^
Author's Response: Haha no no no, it's not rude at all! =]rnOur beautiful Bill shall make an appearance soon, I'm thinking.
Date: 04/27/09 01:36 am Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part I)
I love the way this is written, so descriptive without being over the top. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! =]
Date: 04/26/09 08:57 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part I)
Hmm... what a curious story I have stumbled upon. I'm not quite sure what I think about this story and I like it that way.
I have to compliment your writing style. I'm not drowning in metaphors and long strings of words and descriptions---not that those things are bad in writing, but you can only take them in certain amounts. I think your writing has a really simple elegance to it; everything is clear and flows really well and it's very pleasant to read. Your description is well placed and not too much nor too little and your vocabulary really compliments this. You also manage to avoid cliché and overused phrases quite well, which is refreshing.
Tom's disdain for his surroundings is clear and I feel like I can relate; I can feel the uncomfortable summer heat and compare it to life in the city. It's ironic that Tom wants to be in the city, somewhere cruel and cold, because he's so discomforted by the cozy and 'perfect' life in the countryside.
As for the plot, I'm really a sucker for stories like this, where the plot is centric to surroundings and relationships. A plot doesn't have to be complicated to make a good story, and I quite like where you're taking this. It seems very promising, and I'm eager to see how Bill is properly introduced. I like that you haven't given him much description yet and I'm very curious about him.
Also I adore the opening paragraphs of each chapter. They're very intriguing and thought-provoking and really add a nice finesse to the story.
Overall, a very good story so far and I'm eager for more :)
Author's Response: Wow, I really appreciate the detailed review! Thank you for the compliments. rnYes, good old Tom would rather be watching movies on the couch and stuffing his face with pizza than spend a summer in the midst of beautiful nature. :P rnBill will enter the story very soon, and it will be somewhat challenging characterizing him. I don't want to mess Bill up!rnThanks for noticing the paragraphs, too. They are meant to be a deeper insight into the situations of the story, and I'm glad you like them! :D rnrn*HUGS*!! =]rnrn
Date: 04/26/09 08:49 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part I)
Don't be nervous! This story is seriously good, and I love your writing style! PLease add more soon. You have new fan.
--Mona
Author's Response: yay! Thanks! =]
Date: 04/26/09 08:40 pm Title: Taste and See
Oh. My. God.
That's all I can say.
You can freakin' write.
Descriptive as I don't know what. I mean, you have me freaking hooked already. What the hell man?
I love it.
Author's Response: *grins* thank you so much!
Date: 04/26/09 08:35 pm Title: Grandma Annabelle (Part I)
Ahh, I really like this.
I love the way you write; it's so detailed. I feel like I can picture everything perfectly.
Update soon ;D
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! =]