Great story and the song fits perfectly. You did really good job:)

Author's Response: Thank you, m'dear.

Ok, let’s get reviewing!
I loved some of the descriptions, because they were beautiful. “I could feel that cold ring of white gold on his right hand, and yet it seemed to be burning into my skin, making its very presence known, making my insides writhe in pain.” “Bill had his hands folded in such a way to where the light was glinting perfectly into my eyes off of it. Like a sick taunt of 'I win, you lose.” Those were amazing, and there were many more like that. Didn’t notice many mechanical errors, so that’s good. Because this is in first person, even though Tom seemed sort of OOC, it doesn’t really mean anything, because no one can read minds and know what Tom really thinks. I like that Bill didn’t just dump Brielynn and go to Tom and that there was an actual plot. The arguments and everything that went on between them… Very believable. “I'll take... Tactless for 200, Alex.” That line killed me, dear god… XD I just liked this story; you seem to know what you’re doing, and you’ll only get better as you write more and more.
Thanks for a good read!
-BRE

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much for the in-depth review, that really made my day.