Date: 04/07/09 06:47 pm Title: Chapter 6
Great chappie hun. You did an awesome job. I never expected there to be a rape scene. But never the less, I still LOVE this fic. Please update soon. No being lazy now. lol.
Author's Response: Thank you so much *heart*
I'm glad it was a surprise to someone lol. Well this is all the pre-writing I got done for this story. I'll start working on the next chapter soon.
I'll try not to be lazy lol
Date: 04/01/09 04:08 am Title: Chapter 5
ahhh make bill cave already... please post soon........... i'll love you forever...
Author's Response: Make him cave? lol patience my dear, patience. I'll put the next chapter up later today
Date: 03/28/09 12:04 pm Title: Chapter 5
OMG, hopefully Bill is found & safe...
Author's Response: I know, right ;~;???
Date: 03/28/09 12:00 am Title: Chapter 5
Grrrrr, I hate those flipping cliffhangers. Their mean, lol. Still love it, I can't wait for the next chappie. Mor soon? *Does Bill's pout*
Author's Response: I know I'm sorry :O!! If the chapter wasn't so long I wouldn't of had to split it. I'm so mean lol. Aaww of course more soon! Anything for a Bill pout ^^ j/k because you're a nice reader and reviewer!
Date: 03/27/09 11:49 pm Title: Chapter 5
WHAT HAPPENS TO BILL!!???!?!?!?! i think something BAD is going to happen, maybe like some guy comes and like rapes him or something (but i don't really think that), or the bullies from school come and beat him up worse (more possible in my opinion) or their mom was there, and found bill and is going kick his ASS, along with tom's (which, is really unlikely in my opinion). oh, and i'll definitely try and feature this fic, cuz i LOVE IT!!!! *goes to fill out the form*
Author's Response: LOL I really like what you think is going to happen! They're actually not too bad of guess's but since I'm the author I can't give anyhting out T^T. But it just makes me more excited to put the next chapter up hehe.
YAY!! Thank you so much for filling out a form!! *Super hug for you* ^///^. I'll have to think of special gifts for people who filled a form out as a 'thank you'
Date: 03/27/09 09:22 pm Title: Chapter 4
Oh the cell phone talk everyone does the same talk with their parents in high school. I remember you have to get the favorite kid to make to parent give you want you want.
I knew Simone favored Bill but it seems that her doesn’t care because Tom’s the only one’s affection he after. He like to use his power over their mom to its full extent. He pulled out the big guns with the doe eyes or puppy dog pout. That boy has her so wrapped around his finger but doesn’t he have everyone including friends and Tom. Oh and the Simone yelling at Gordon for treating the kids differently was laughable. He really treats them the same or tries to give Tom attention that he lacks from their mother. She need to look at herself in the mirror she’s the one treating them differently and at least the boys don’t lie or connive Gordon. Simone makes me so angry sometime or most in this story.
Well school life for Bill has gotten worst and he’s still not understanding what’s wrong with him. He doesn’t see that school life is just one dog eat dog world and he has to live in it. They just tease him because he’s different and they don’t understand different. He’s a beautiful boy and they find it appalling that they find him attractive and they think he’s a girl. Tom dresses more manly so they won’t call him faggot. Stereotyping is very common in school so glad you put all of the problems and psychological issues it arises in the story it’s probably why the real boys from Tokio Hotel were so displeased with going to regular school because of all the taunting. Oh and Bill trying to hide that it affects him from Tom is really interesting. It’s probably because he doesn’t want Tom to know that it offends him or he’s ashamed and doesn’t want Tom to know want people think of him. But I think he could be trying to stop Tom from trying to do something stupid and get hurt trying to defend him or get ridiculed as well. Both brother try to protect each other all the time from the outside forces.
Bill and Tom got the phones and Bill’s smart he knows how to work it. He thanked Simone first acting like it was her doing all on her own. But Gordon probably is the one that got BOTH boy’s the cell phones. Dun Dun Dun Simone seen something she don’t like again. Love love love that Simone twitched. She is so going to do something drastic in the future I just can see that she’s going to be a real pain in their ass for their relationship. I was like no Bill why did you call him Tomi, he’s always so good at keeping up false pretenses around Simone and this is bad, he even mentally kicked himself for the slip up. Poor Tom, Bill might be picked on at school but at home Tom was the one being picked on by the worst bully ever that can actual enforce the worst treat ever SEPARATION. I really love how Tom calls his mother Simone, it shows it lack of respect but doesn’t respect have to be earned not even Bill respects her but he tries to humor her all the time. Tom keeps it more real between him and Simone while Bill uses his mother’s affection to their advantage. Really love how it’s getting so deep.
Oh and more Georg and Andreas who want the boys to go to the party wonder if that will happen in next chapter or is Simone going to do some damage next chapter.
Well you kind of left it a cliffhanger with what will Simone do next or what will happen to them. Well I tried to review on time this story but I failed because of my chaotic life but I will try to always make it worth reading late. So I felt you left me in suspense with this chapter totally different than all the rest kind of scared what the future holds for them. And excited that you will make it worth the wait.
Author's Response: Really? Well me and my 2 siblings are like 7 years apart. So I’m the youngest, and in technical terms, labeled as an only child. But I hope I hit it just right!
Yes in this chapter it clearly shows Simone sees Bill as an angel and Bill doesn’t care what’s so ever. He’s using her with his manipulative ways, that he clearly knows he has now over people, and wants only Tom. Oh hellz yeah XD! Bill was going all out, he was unleashing those doe eyes! lol. Simone is so blind and naive that she doesn’t see the string Bill has her on. It’s kind of funny really I like it. Makes Bill sound wicked. Actually though Bill doesn’t have Tom wrapped around his finger. He would never do that. The worse he would do is unleash that puppy face, again, on Tom and beg if he wanted something XD. But he would never mess with Tom. Remember their in this together and everyone else doesn’t matter ;)
BINGO! We have a winner 8D!! Gordon IS trying to make up for the lack of love Tom is getting and Simone only said that it was unfair cause her ‘baby boy’ didn’t get anything. Although Bill could careless and they share a room anyways which is what Bill was trying to secretly say. It’s ok Simone makes me angry too T~T
The bullies have gotten worse. It’s just as you said, they see him as so beautiful that it’s appalling. They’d never confess to it instead take it out on Bill to show how ‘tough’ they are. Stereotyping is shit and I’ve had to go though it in my younger years of school. It’s over rated really. Actually the real Tokio Hotel boys have said they used to be called such names that I brought up in here. Bill’s even confessed to bullies picking on him, especially throwing rocks at him. Bill is mostly embarrassed by the ridiculing and doesn’t want Tom to know what goes on everyday in school or how others see him. He doesn’t want to make a big deal out of it and doesn’t want Tom to get into trouble. Se he tried to act like it never happens which confused Tom.
You’re right Gordon did get the phones for the boys especially since he has the money in the family XD. But of course evil Simone takes the credit for it :). Yeah I had to add the twitch in there just to show how crazy she is lol. Exactly I had to give in a slip up. They can’t be perfect all the time hiding everything. Secrets get out and Bill was just so happy he slipped the name up. The tension was... thick o-o. Wow I never thought of it like that 8D. See this is why I have you around lol. Bill gets picked on at school Tom gets it at home. I love how awesome I am sometimes and don’t’ even know it :). Tom most likely will never call Simone mom cause she shows him no love. Bill does it to toy with her because who knows when they’d need to use her again heh, seriously.
Nnnooo! You don’t fail! You don’t fail till I say you fail! And that’s never XD! I have no problem waiting for your awesome reviews :). If it makes you feel better I failed keeping my every-other-day track going ;~;. Going to put the next chapter up now lol.
Date: 03/27/09 07:57 pm Title: Chapter 3
It started off with them already getting interrogated by Simone. She doesn’t even give them breathing room. Tom is constantly think of lies off the top of his head because of his mother’s pestering. She is the main reason the boys learn how to lie so well. She makes the boys practically raise themselves and depend on only themselves by making them grow-up too fast with the lack of loving parenting. She’s their mother she should be protecting them not assaulting them.
I was so right with the playground thing because last chapter he tried to take him home and cover up that he way hurt like at the playground but now he cleaning him up in the bathroom like last time too. Bill being a clumsy person is understandable or maybe he seems so awkwardly adorably innocent cute that he would be believable about how he gets hurt. And Tom takes on the protective older brother role very serious and takes care of Bill lovingly.
The birthday party wow, Simone is so making a big deal out of nothing. Or maybe just trying to analysis her boys relationship? Love all the questions that go through her mind about her boys. She’s really starting to catch on to thing that are going on around her kind of. I love how she is so the villain in the story and in the boys lives. She keeps trying to find out what’s going on with them and then you just know she will stop them if she knew the truth. wouldn’t put it passed her if she would try to separate them if she found out what they meant to each other and how far gone they already are. They don’t really need anyone but themselves and she’s starting to pick up on that and she’s finding it disturbing. Wait tell their so far gone that they will be inseparable when they have more than just brotherly love. She really brings drama and dimension to the story.
Bill is so cute when he’s upset about everyone seeing him as something weak that can’t take care of himself and clumsy or ditsy.
And after the incident Tom’s so adorable with his puppy dog ways. And every time he spends time with Bill and Andreas he makes me laugh with his possessiveness. And the things he thinks every time I would love to see Bill reactions or thought around Georg as well.
The boys act more like Siamese twins than twins but It seems like that in real life as well sometime because of their need for closeness.
Oh I thought that Tom was going to try and have full on penetration but I was wrong the way you worded it I thought it was going to happen but Tom’s words reassured me that he would never do anything that Bill wouldn’t want. And love that both boys think about what is going on. Like Tom’s thinks about what their “close time” really means. And that his feeling for Bill have been getting stronger but he never questions them because they don’t seem unnatural to him. Hey Bill seems to be playing a game with Tom when they do this. He tries to act neutral or indifferent to wants going on but he wants it just as much as Tom he seems to be enjoying to as well now. And Bill’s confession was sincere since he’s only 15 he really wouldn’t know how anal sex worked so with his knowledge he thinks it can never be pleasurable or realistic. And he still afraid of being truly the closest they could ever get. He still wants to keep a little bit of himself closed off from Tom it seems. But Tom is persistent so he seems to be getting more aggressive as time goes by hopefully he could see all of Bill’s body before that time to show Bill that his body is not something he should hide from him and that he could bring pleasure to his front side as well. Bill’s just very shy and Tom’s not but hopefully he could bring him out of his shell at least in front of him.
Ok lets see funny parts with Andreas and some of the thoughts that go through your characters heads made me laugh like Bill fingering himself and Simone thought crack me up as well as Tom’s someday talks. And overall a happy chapter with their birthday.
Author's Response: Did I tell someone that? Or maybe I just thought it in my head to myself lol. That Tom is pushed to lie because of Simone. I swear I put that in some end chapter, maybe that’s chapter 4 lmao. Man you are so GOOD at getting everything! You’re like reading my brain! It’s insane XD. But I agree Simone is... a lost cause. She’s turned for the evil side and I don’t think she’s coming back.
YES YOU WERE RIGHT XD! Stop being right about everything! lol I’m only kidding! Bill being a clutz is believable because... he just seems like that kind of person haha. No offense to my poor character *heart*.
If Simone knew the truth I honestly have no idea what would happen. In fact I won’t say anything because I’m not sure how the ending of this story is going to go yet :) *zips mouth shut*. The twins are already way far gone. Nothing could keep them apart now. Unless you mean like far from home XD. Either way they’d kill for each other. Wow.... actually they probably would o-o. Good thing it’s not that kind of story but that’s a good idea for another one ;) lol.
Aw picturing Tom as a puppy dog makes my day *heart* It is interesting to see Tom suffer through lunch everyday with Andreas near Bill. Pppoorrr Tomi~
I’m sorry if I confused you but hey it just kept you on your toes right :)? But Tom would never hurt his baby brother or go against his word. He’s a good older twin brother hah. Bill plays a innocent game, no harm comes from it. Like I said before-somewhere-Bill is high and mighty in school and Tom just falls back. once home and by themselves Bill falls back, as if knowing his place, and Tom takes to dominate position. It’s like Tom gives Bill his little glory around people XD. I love it!
Bill is just very shy. In fact I don’t think he really knows why he won’t show Tom him full self. Just something in his mind telling him not yet. They share a lot of love and Tom is the only person Bill trusts with his life but he still isn’t ready yet. He isn’t afraid of what will happen he knows Tom is loving and caring but maybe he still wants to keep some innocents to himself. He’s like controlling haw far they go, keeping Tom in line in a way.
Hey life isn’t all seriousness there’s some hilarious stuff in real life and that makes everything all the more real 8D! I thought it was cute bill had tried “it” by himself. But I have lots of gay friends and it’s not far from reality believe me XD.
But I missed you!! And your awesome reviews :O!! I can’t wait for the future ones ! I hope you’re good and don’t be too busy. Actually I’ve been really busy so I broke my promise of every other day update to my readers T~T. I should put it up now that I’m here. LATER!
Date: 03/27/09 06:44 pm Title: Chapter 2
Ok sorry sorry so so late but I’m really busy right now. So it might not be the best review but I’ll try. Just warning you ahead of time.
So love that you started to show how school life was for the twins. Especially the way Bill got teased merciless for his choice of style. And I see that he still depends on his brother for everything. And still only them in his world doesn’t really care about anyone but Tom. Tom means the world to Bill and you really showed it in this chapter.
And I was screaming no don’t go back to the school alone Bill there’s going to be something bad waiting for you. And I was right bullies, I thought the bullies scene was horrifically beautiful. I was so getting a mental picture through your description. I thought it was very realistic not cheesy or half fast really I thought it was really the main attraction of this chapter because of everything that it brings to their story.
Tom is so knight in shining armor in this chapter. He wouldn’t leave Bill alone or get hurt and he blames everything on him. He kind of rescued Bill. And he would do anything to make Bill happy and his life perfect. Tom always wants to take care of tom but we wouldn’t want it any other way and either does Bill. The end scene with the brother reminds me of the playground scene. But love the way Tom was the hero for Bill again. Tom tries so hard to protect Bill all the time but he can’t and it makes him feel worthless but glad that Bill reassures him that in Bill’s eye’s everything Tom does is perfect.
And I see that Bill in this chapter keeps trying to ponder why the older boys keep calling him a faggot and to stop being one. He doesn’t see what he’s doing wrong but I think this will make him more reluctant to do anything with Tom once he finds out what that means. And Tom doesn’t think that he’s a faggot so it might not happen because they don’t assume that their actions with each other is homosexual tendencies. But the kids are only talking about his demeanor so this might not come up I guess.
Oh lets see I see they talk about Simone again. Keeping things from her and already not loving the way she treats them and their relationship. But they do love Gordon as a parental figure I see. They don’t feel like they have to walk on eggshells around him like with her. So Simone starting to be a bad mother again. Probably love Gordon more than their mother or appreciate him more because he doesn’t judge them.
And in the beginning of this chapter with bill in school being jumped I felt sad and worrisome as I pointed out and anxious with Tom bus scene and him finding Bill. But at the end or when he found Bill I felt that their reunion was heartfelt and kind of the sun shining through the clouds after the storm. Very emotional chapter. Joyous at the end with how Bill was with Tom I think they bring the best and happiest time out of each other with each other.
And for my final note I’m sorry if I gave you the impression that I thought that you were greedy. Trust me I’ve seen people on this web site that do want a lot of reviews and you didn‘t seem like that. But I understand what your saying that it’s a privilege to post your stories on here it’s just I hope that if you did that you would continue doing them because you have fans that really write down their opinions and appreciation of your work. And Don’t stop because you only have one review. And I thought that your great with your responds and love that you e-mailed me no one has used that on this site so far with me I wish they would. You really appreciate your reviewers so don’t think I’m saying or meaning anything bad about you.
Author's Response: Your reviews are always wonderful, great, and highly appreciated! I am always patient and wait for them. You have no worries with me ^^.
I felt it was important to give a quick review over the school life so everything would fall into place making sense. I don't think Bill depends on Tom for everything but they like being with each other. They've always been each others shadow and they make each other stronger :)
Thank you *heart*! I tried really hard on the bully scene. I didn't want it to be cheezey or stupid sounding or bill to be totally helpless like just taking it instead of trying to fight back. Thank you I’m glad someone enjoyed it. I had fun imagining it hehe.
Tom would never leave Bill behind anywhere. That’d be horrible T~T. Even if he didn’t get there right away he did save Bill cause something bad was about to happen. But poor Tom doesn’t look at it like that, he blames himself for being such a bad twin brother. It’s sad to see him mentally put himself down. That’s funny how you picked up on it as sounding like the playground scene cause that’s what I was going for 8D! And as you saw in the next chapter Bill did refer back to that day. You are just so wicked! I love you XD. You’re exactly right though Tom tries so hard to please his brother and wants to be like his hero. He wants to be the only one in Bill’s eye’s. I don’t think Bill could ever see Tom do any wrong *heart*
I don’t think it will make Bill more reluctant mostly because he doesn’t know why they’re calling him this and he doesn’t see what his brother and him does being homosexual like. So it’s just like you said they don’t see it that and I have faith it won’t stop them for doing what they always do ^^. But mostly it’s cause how he looks in school.
Exactly right, they prefer Gordon over Simone. Gordon isn’t constantly on their back or favoring, as Simone slowly reveals. Honestly they have more respect for Gordon I don’t think they could love anyone except each other. It may sound like an obsession with each other but it’s not at all like that. They refuse, and want no need, to love anyone else. It makes no sense to them.
Lovely ending note *heart* They do bring the best out of each other :)
No no it’s alright I never thought that. I only brought it up in end notes so everyone was on the same chapter and I could confront all my readers. I probably would post it all up even if people lost interest only because I am more than half way through it. It’d be sad for me but I’d do it hoping more people would enjoy it in the future. And you’re more then welcome with me emailing you . I wanted everyone who faved to know that the second part was up. Don’t worry it’s all good between you and me 8)
Date: 03/24/09 10:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
oh, that makes it soooo much clearer!!! thanks!!!! i really do love your story, by the way. it's just so original in its writing. you're really good at describing what's going on, and you make everything clear to the reader. i truly can't wait for the next chapter, to see what kind of drama it unfolds!!!
Author's Response: Oh wow thank you for the compliments ^///^! REALLY!
I hope to see more reviews from you in the furute! Rreally glad you love my story and so happy I could help clear your confusion up *heart*. Thanks again 8D
Date: 03/24/09 08:01 pm Title: Chapter 4
y does it matter if he calls him tomi???i luvz this update soon plz thx=]
Author's Response: It mattes because he's never called Tom that infront of anyone before ^^. AND it's Tom's pet name. Simone is already suspisous. Hope that helps *Heart*
Date: 03/24/09 07:48 pm Title: Chapter 4
ok, what confused me was that simone twitched when he called tom tomi. what's wrong with him having a nickname? or is it because simone is a weird mom or something. and why would it be okay for him to call him tom-tom and not tomi? yeah, that's what confused me, everything else was awesomeness! and i saw the new summary. i think it definitly fits the story better, and i love it!!
Author's Response: Bill and Tom have never called each other by their pet names infront of people before. And Simone is already crazy suspisous of them :). And he dind't call him 'Tom-Tom' it was ment like correcting himself. like 'tom! I ment Tom' kind of thing. understnad ^^? I hope that helped 8D *heart*
Date: 03/24/09 02:11 pm Title: Chapter 4
I love Bill in this! He's so cute and manipulative! Can't wait for the maybe-party scene!
Author's Response: Thanks FairyCelt!! I believe it really shows Bill's manipulative side and how he's aware the effects he can have on people ;). I'm excited for the party scene to go up too XD
Date: 03/24/09 03:22 am Title: Chapter 2
awwww... sweeet Tomi..
Author's Response: YEs Tomi is very sweet isn't he? ^^
Date: 03/23/09 10:29 pm Title: Chapter 4
this chapter somewhat confused me.... but i think that the next chapters will explain what i'm confused about. i love that bill would be mama's boy... of course... and that they are so conniving. but really, i love that their relationship is still okay, i'm sure something will eventually come between them, but at least it's not right now. and i didn't notice the change of the summary, but i noticed the banner, and i love it!!!
Author's Response: Please contact me telling me why it confused you please *heart* I can clear it up for you. Well he's pretending to be mama's boy to get what he wants ;). Typical Bill(in my story).
Really? The summarys shorter and not so cheezey sounding and thanks about the banner!!!
Date: 03/23/09 08:14 pm Title: Chapter 4
I love it, You still got it hun. I can't wait for the next chappie. And I love how Bill persuaded Simone to get twins cell phones with his whining and pouting, It was sooo cute. You gotta do more cuteness. And I gots a question, Is there a wee little chance of some spanking between the twins, like Tom swating Bill's butt, for fun or because Bill was being naughty before Sex??
Author's Response: Thanks darling *heart* And yes thats a side of Bill I don't show very often mostly cause it was just to Simone for what they wanted. Bill is indeed becoming aware/most likely is aware the effect and control he can have over people. I wonder if he'll every try it with Tom... probably not but we'll see ^^. But I'm not a cutey-cute-cute type of writer maybe in the future you never know ;). Spanking... eehh probably definalty not in this story. It's too sweet and nice. Maybe in my storys to come. Hope that doens't ruin your reading T~T
Date: 03/23/09 06:03 pm Title: Chapter 4
Oh my that's terrible.
Author's Response: Whats terrible? My chpater?
Date: 03/23/09 03:38 pm Title: Chapter 3
Still good, your gonna update soon?? Right???? I love this.
Author's Response: Actually I got to get to that in a few minutes. Come back in an hour and the new chapter should be up ;)!! Hope to hear a review from you!
Author's Response: Actually I got to get to that in a few minutes. Come back in an hour and the new chapter should be up ;)!! Hope to hear a review from you!
Date: 03/23/09 03:35 pm Title: Chapter 2
I loved, not stupid at all. I actually missed when ya updated this. My bad, I gotta fav it, I keeps forgeting. Hehehehe, But it was and awesome chappie. I loved it.
Author's Response: Thanks dubblebubble! It's ok and thanks-again-for faving if you did ^^. Means a lot to me *heart*
Date: 03/22/09 04:26 am Title: Chapter 3
I really like this!
Like, srsly. I'm getting ideas for my own fic from this. Though the thoughts running through my mind are more along the lines of horror.
xDD
Hope you update more soon!!
Pleeeease??
Author's Response: Really?? Wow that is like... wow! I inspired someone :D?!
Ooo I like horror, I wonder how it'd go :3 if you make it you have contact me 8D!
No worries I update every other day come back tomorrow for a new chapter *heart*
Date: 03/21/09 09:03 pm Title: Chapter 3
ooh, this chapter was very hot and very sweet at the same time. I am really glad you are continuing this and look forward to reading more. I like that bill is so innocent, but its going to be hard for him when he finally figures things out. Tom i think will get things faster. i dont want them to get caught though! keep up the great work!! I'm tracking you. :)
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing with yoru thoughts and telling me you're tracking! I hope at the end you decided to fave it ^^.
I agree with you. I think it's going to hit Bill like a truck and Tom will just accept it all since he's slowly inching his way already into accepting it. Bill is still blocking it out however.
Hope to hear a review from you in the future *heart*