hi!
i have to things to say
1. i dont think it should end here...theres so much you can do with this story!
2. i think it needs a little more detail caus it says tom blacks out almost as soon as Bill arrives having had ahrdly anyting to drink then hes suddenly waking up having drunk atleast half a bottle off vodka so yeah it doesnt quite...flow...
anyway i hope you keep writing this caus tis got so much potential and i love your style :)
much love
dancing in the moonlight
xXx
p.s. OMG im the first reviewer *happy dance* atleast i am when im writing this!
xXx

Author's Response: Hi, back! Thanks for reviewing. rnrn1. As soon as I'm done editing this chapter, I think I'm going to start working on the next half. rn2. I know, I re-read it after I posted it, so I'm editing it now, and adding a bit. ^_^ Thanks!rnrn:) Still the first reviewer. :)