Date: 11/11/09 09:10 pm Title: Wilkommen im Hotel
Ok, so I'm reviewing this several months after reading about half of it. I've lost interest in this story, but I think it still deserves a review- afterall u took time to write it, it's only fair. :)
So... the beginning where they were playing hard to get was interesting, sucked me in and I totally wanted to read more. Then there was that kidknapping which I thought took the story a bit off track, and then u added Bethy who I pretty much hated as a character cuz she's like a bad caricature of a bratty highschooler, AND she dropped by for no specific reason, so yeah, you lost me. It really seemed like u were trying to mix in too many plot points into a story where they didn't all fit together. I think u should have focused more on Tom and Bill, as odd as that sounds. Anyways, I did like parts of it, and thank you for the frequent updates! :)
Author's Response: there really was more of a plot planned out with her; but, without ML i just kind of lost the drive to do more with this story and tried to wrap it up as soon as possible, that's why it went downhill. there was going to be more with the bushido thing but i CAN'T write him and ML wasn't here to do that. that's why it feel's so choppy. i'm sorry about that, but i did what i could and i feel bad because this story ended up being far from what we planned but i just couldn't do it alone.
Date: 11/10/09 09:02 am Title: Angel in Disguise
LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT!!!!!!!! Oh my gosh, I'm gonna miss this story!
Date: 11/09/09 11:23 pm Title: Angel in Disguise
It totally is the end of an era. And it's kinda sad, really. But, like, you said, now you're free to experience new things and move on. It was a wild ride.
Date: 11/09/09 08:21 pm Title: Angel in Disguise
Awesome, I'm sad to see this end :/
Date: 11/09/09 04:33 am Title: Angel in Disguise
Awwww. x]
That was such a perfect ending. I loved it.
Date: 11/08/09 10:41 pm Title: Angel in Disguise
awwwwwww omfg i love it to cute ILD
Date: 11/08/09 09:34 pm Title: Untouched and Hating it
there's a song called untouched, by the veronicas, that works so well for this chapter!
Author's Response: yeah, well that song was part of the inspiration of the chapter lol
Author's Response: yeah, well that song was part of the inspiration of the chapter lol
Date: 11/08/09 09:28 pm Title: A Free Fuck
bill's gonna rape tomi..... isn't he.
Date: 10/23/09 02:56 pm Title: Heavensent
plz right more soon!!!!! plz right more soon!! i luv dis story. its sweet. romantic.and each chapter leaves me wanting more!more!more! so right more soon!!!!!
Date: 10/09/09 12:15 pm Title: Heavensent
OHMAGOD I LOVES IT! *weeps* hugs and cookies for Anony!!!!!
Date: 09/12/09 10:07 pm Title: Wilkommen im Hotel
Hi! Just peeking in to beg you to update soon! :)
Author's Response: Ooh well, danke. i am working on an update. i promise. it's just been slow! xxAli
Date: 08/21/09 07:42 pm Title: Wilkommen im Hotel
~sings along with bill~ bad girlfriend! (y) awesome song :D i lovedd thiss chapter!!
Date: 08/12/09 12:46 am Title: Heavensent
This story just breaks my heart in a good way. Meaning, the shambles that Bill is or shall I say, WAS in is a heartbreaker....
Date: 08/09/09 03:14 am Title: Heavensent
Awwww, sweet reunions.....
^_^
I'm glad Bill's dad didn't make too much trouble this time!
Date: 07/28/09 03:35 am Title: Heavensent
I love it!
I want to read more!
It's so good and adorable and gah! no words to describe it!
Update soon!!!! Please!!!
Date: 07/25/09 10:24 pm Title: Heavensent
YAYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY!!!!!! I love Tom's family!!!!! And Maxie!!!
Date: 07/25/09 09:47 am Title: Heavensent
i like...glad he went to see his brother and that tom's family likes im...
Date: 07/25/09 05:02 am Title: Heavensent
Hi!
Lovely story you both have written!
Tom is so charming and Bill is just so cute.
It's a shame there's only one chapter left, but still I really would like to read it as well.
Thank for sharing!
Date: 07/25/09 04:38 am Title: Heavensent
me likey anony! update! oh, and are you ok with betaing a het story? i have the first few chapters done and I need a beta.