Date: 04/27/23 10:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
I've mentioned this on other reviews: I came into the TH / THF fandom in Jan’22. The vast majority of fics I've read are quite old and I'm sure the authors have moved on (and probably wont even see new reviews), BUT I figure why not leave one anyway… I enjoyed this fic and wanted to say thank you for writing and sharing it!
Date: 09/08/18 04:50 pm Title: Chapter 6
this was a good story!
i hope u did a sequel to this!
Date: 12/28/17 02:56 pm Title: Chapter 6
this was a good story!
i hope you did sequel to this
Date: 08/30/12 03:41 am Title: Chapter 6
this was a good story!
Author's Response: Thank you.
Date: 12/17/09 12:31 am Title: Chapter 6
Sequel please?! I loved this story and I wish it wasn't over. Thanks for writing it
Author's Response: Thanks for reading it! Sequel's up, it's called Release. :)
Date: 10/03/09 01:46 am Title: Chapter 6
oh dude! i hope you have a sequel...
Author's Response: I do... :)
Date: 05/23/09 05:32 pm Title: Chapter 6
I think I keep accidentally leaving blank reviews...
If I did I'm sorry, cause this story was awesome! I loved it! ;D
Author's Response: no blanks that I see! Thanks for reviewing, glad you loved it. :)
Date: 04/20/09 10:05 pm Title: Chapter 1
"Mhhnn." Bill moaned in discomfort, but Tom thought it was something else. He yanked his hand away.
"Bill, I can't touch that-" He stopped, and stared. Bill was kneeling on the bed next to him, shirt pulled up and jeans undone. – ha ha that’s very funny.
Bill rolled his eyes back. "Manwhore."
Tom grinned. "Diva."
"Rasta."
"Metrosexual Idiot." - *cracks up*
He made the decision quickly and removed what makeup he already had on. – anyone who wears as much make up as Bill knows that he can’t wear make up to bed or his skin would go to crap. He’d have washed it off last night.
"No makeup, twinnie?" ok who says twinnie? I doubt that they would call themselves that but…ok I’ll go with it.
Bill slumped. "You don't like it?" – whoa can we say codependentcy for emotional stability. Ick don’t make Bill so weak!
Bill smiled again. "I know. I can go outside to shop now." – why would he ask his brothers permission and he would never be so caviler
"They usually want a piece of you, they just want my help with their makeup." Bill said, a little bitterness creeping into his voice. – um…sort of but they’d still run Bill down and rip chunks off his body.
You’re a good writer but this chapter is sadly… kind of blah. I think you need to work on tension. Working the readers up.
An example of how you could have done it would be: that there should have been more build up of Tom touching the tattoo, more thoughts in his head, more hesitation, he should have been more affected by it and been thrown by the affect on him, he should have been upset. Bill should have woken up with a start and been surprised by Tom being awake and been confused. The star should have haunted Tom all the next day. Tom should have wanted to see it again, to want to touch it. See what I mean we have to feel his want…with the stories that you want to build you have to work on torking the readers up.
Author's Response: So I have some strong points and some weak ones :) Thanks for helping me. I'm glad you think I'm a good writer, and I'll work on the tension. Thanks for taking the time to critique. :)
Date: 03/09/09 08:46 pm Title: Chapter 6
I love this so much because, I've read all kinds of fics where the G's either found out by voyeurism or knew by clever deduction or something, and also plenty where they never knew, but no fic ever where the twins actually tried to announce to the G's, hey, we're gonna have sex in this bus, chill? It was amazingly cool! Great story.
Author's Response: Thanks! I was trying for a little something original. Thank you for reviewing!
Date: 03/06/09 03:23 pm Title: Chapter 6
Ooooo..sequel please! I thought this was so cute. And I really like Georg in this one!!
But who doesn't like Georg?! haha :P
Author's Response: I have a sequel up, it's called Release. It's still in progress, but I have 5 chapters up. Thank you for the review!
Date: 03/04/09 02:08 pm Title: Chapter 6
This was absolutly amazing you should totally write a sequel lolz
Hearts
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! ^_^ working on the sequel in the next couple days
Date: 03/04/09 01:12 pm Title: Chapter 6
This story was so good and so sweet, and I love Gustav and Georg in it!!
A sequel would be a great idea by the way!
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!!
Date: 03/04/09 05:39 am Title: Chapter 6
hai,
4n a half billas out 5.
i would like a sequel please.
:)
Author's Response: Wow, Thank you! ^_^ ^_^ ^_^
Date: 03/04/09 12:12 am Title: Chapter 6
LOL at Gustav re-adjusting his pants.
this was really good.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: 03/03/09 11:35 pm Title: Chapter 6
LMAO
Awesome! Gustav, the twinsest fan-boy ^-^
Author's Response: I gotta have something in there about him! Thanks for the Review!
Date: 03/03/09 11:18 pm Title: Chapter 1
Baha!
Gustav with a Hard-on x3
Thats so hot.
Yumm.
sorry -- awkwardness :D
Luffed the story deary x33
I sound like an old lady.
BAHA!
Author's Response: :) Thanks for the review. I'm glad you 'luffed' it. :D you dont sound like an old lady to me!
Date: 03/03/09 08:24 pm Title: Chapter 6
sequek plzplzplzplzp thx=]
Author's Response: I'm going to start working on a sequel in a couple days. Maybe tomorrow if things here get boring. Thank you for the Review!
Date: 03/03/09 08:03 pm Title: Chapter 6
I can't believe I'm saying this, as I'm a strictly Bill/Tom kinda person, but you should write a sequel that also has Gustav/Georg in it.
Author's Response: lol, That's a pretty good compliment. :D Thank you!
Date: 03/03/09 08:00 pm Title: Chapter 5
ooooohhhh me wants! :D
love it!
Author's Response: Thank you. ^_^
Date: 03/03/09 07:35 pm Title: Chapter 6
a sequel is definitely needed. u can't leave a good story like this without a sequel, it's against the law (my law ;-)). and great work, i honestly enjoyed reading this. ur a terrific author, keep doing what ur doing!!!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'll probably start working on the sequel in a couple days. :)