Date: 03/04/09 06:26 am Title: Ill boding blood
God no, it was nowhere near horrible! It's sad and painful, nobody should ever have to get through that. I can even guess how much this has come between them. Even if such common distress could also make people hold on to each other. What else happened, girl? Please tell me...
Author's Response:
I will! i promise, its sad and possible horrible too, but it's all part of the story, the next chapter has quite a bit happening in it, but i've got half of it done, i hope to have it up soon.
thank you so much for your review!!!
Date: 03/03/09 09:09 pm Title: Ill boding blood
no far from it, it was great, really great,i`m officially speachless.
Date: 03/03/09 04:06 pm Title: Ill boding blood
wow. this chapter was by far, in my opinion, the best chapter you've written so far. it just makes me sooo emotional, the way you write. it's as if i'm in the story, and what a story to be in. i mean, you've got bill, the rather psychotic person who doesn't want to be psychotic, and his girlfriend (or is it wife?), who just keeps wishing that everything was the same, or at least better than they are now. the broken bond between the twins is heartwrenching, even though you only spent like 1 sentence describing it. the flashback was one of the best flashbacks i've ever read by anyone, with the emotion just pouring out in your words. the ending just leaves the reader hanging, thinking, what happened to eventually (almost) pull them apart completely. in this flashback, bill is so caring, so understanding. it makes us wonder, what could possibly have gone wrong? i just gotta say that you have talent!!!! your writing is just so addictive!!!! oh, and by the way, thanks for dedicating this chapter to me!!!!!! luv you too!!!!
Author's Response:
aw!!! HUGGLES i swear you are the reason i write this! your reviews keep me going, if it wasn't for you i probably would have given up by now * i'm so lazy!* so really i have you to thank! *BTW anything you'd liek to see? i can try my best, a haooy, sad, horrible flashback?* i have a bit more written but my beta hasn't gotten back to me yet.
anyway hope to hear form you on the next chappy XD *don't forget to track this story XD plz?*
Date: 02/28/09 04:40 pm Title: a happy memory
o wow. this is good i luv ur writing style by the way.
i really liked the shower part,sweet/sexy
Author's Response: thank you very much
Date: 02/28/09 04:39 pm Title: a happy memory
Awww yay
Author's Response: lol!
Date: 02/28/09 03:22 pm Title: a happy memory
aw yay she is prego
Author's Response: yup :) wait for the next chapter, :/ thank you for the review!
Date: 02/28/09 03:10 pm Title: a happy memory
that was BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!!! that flashback just right now made my day. it was soooo wonderfully written!!!!!! it is kind of sad, though, to think about how that's how they once were, and then to think how they became. i'm glad u included at least one happy chapter, it just makes the story all the more better. i love that u are able to switch between writing depressingly to writing happily. i'm just guessing that u normally write happily, but i actually think i like (at least in this story) the depressingly written stuff. it just seems to me that in the other chapters the description was more.... um... descriptive? of course, that might be because this chapter is a flashback, and not in the time they are in now. this really was a good chapter, i'm not trying to say that i hated it, i'm just saying that i liked your other chapters better. thank you sooooo much for updating so fast, and i hope you update quickly again!!!! and again, really, i love this chapter! (oh, and by the way, in your other stories, the happiness is perfect, i'm just talking about this story)
Author's Response:
lol! your so cute XD yes the less descripitve quality of this chapter wa son purpose to make it seem mor elike a memory, 'cause in memories you don't remeber much else but the importants stuff.
and sadly, i'm much better at writing the depressing stuff TT.TT despite the fact tha ti liek ahppy stories better i find i'm much better at describing pain than happiness, i find my writing to be much more emotionaly 'captivating' that depressing way...? dunno, lol. your reviews make me so very, very happy!
i was literally clapping my hands when i saw it wa syou who had reviewed. and i promise to do my best ont the next chapter *yet another depressing one :( *mou**
Date: 02/25/09 05:32 pm Title: Picking up the pieces
Meanie! Im desperate for more!
Anyways - AWESOMENESS.
I love it! Please Continue!
Update soon! Write MORE!
Author's Response: i promise to! i'm working on it right now!!! lol XD
Author's Response: i promise to! i'm working on it right now!!! lol XD
Date: 02/25/09 04:41 pm Title: Picking up the pieces
of course you deserve a review, even if the chapter is short. it hurts to see him so down, but since he's not alone, maybe there is his chance. waiting for the happy thing!
Author's Response: yes there will e lots of happy in the next chapter, but after that i'm not too sure...
Date: 02/25/09 02:50 pm Title: Picking up the pieces
wow... the story becomes deeper and deeper.... I LOVE IT!!!!! im ecstatic that you decided not to make us readers wait, cuz im sure that it would've killed me. this chapter is really intriging. the way you start it off, without truly connecting it to the story, is absolutely wonderful. that beginning was leading you perfectly into the rest of the chapter. one perfectly poetic part i found was the part where bill is like "i wish i could just wave my hand..." that whole paragraph is beautifully written. *sighs* why must i be pulled to read such depressing stories? not that it's bad or anything.... just sooo depressing. it makes me wanna cry. the sad thing is i can probably imagine bill in real life eventually ending up like this (that's something that i like about this fic... that i can picture it happening) i can't wait until the reminiscing starts!!! oh, by the way, just gotta say that i love the way you described everything so perfectly, it makes me able to picture it even easier.
Author's Response: oh wow, thank you thank you! You have no idea how much this means to me! i'll try and finish up the reminicing tonight. thank you soosososoos much!!!!!
Date: 02/24/09 04:22 am Title: Unconditional
Your writing style needs no more improvement, at least not coming from anybody else but yourself. I love this story and you should continue it. As it started, it seems to me to be more a psychological story than an action one and this needs writing skills. Which you have. So please go on, I'll be waiting!
Author's Response: AW! *glomps* your amazing!!! i love you! *glomps again*
Date: 02/24/09 01:28 am Title: Unconditional
Keep on!
I like it u should def keep on. I love it when bill acts all mean, crazy lol.
Date: 02/23/09 11:52 pm Title: Unconditional
it is amazing please update as soon as you can, and about your writing style itīs great.
Date: 02/23/09 11:03 pm Title: Unconditional
i get it.
Date: 02/23/09 08:47 pm Title: Unconditional
ok, 1st of all...
awesome !
this is truely entracing.
its very well written and there is NO
way that you need to change or improve this writing style.
it's perfect !
creepy perfect 0.o
hahaha i love it !
more please(:
Date: 02/23/09 07:14 pm Title: Unconditional
.O.M.G.
Woah. Amaizing.
Truelly, Honestly! WOW!
-LoL- I LOVE IT!
Love it Love it Love it.
Dude, I NEED more as soon as you can -
update soon, please!
Date: 02/23/09 05:38 pm Title: Unconditional
ok... to start, this is one of the most well written pieces i've seen on this site. your style needs no improving for me (although if you do "improve" it, then i'll die of blissfullness, if that makes any sense) i really hope you decide to continue this, even if not a lot of people read this or review it, because, i'm reading and reviewing it, and i wanna know what happens!!!!!! the way this chapter was set up was beautiful... i mean, at the beginning, you had no idea what was going on, and then you get a hint that she was leaving because of a fight, and you get this terrible image of the boy she's leaving (you don't know his name yet), and then he breaks down, and she turns around and stays... it's just so perfect, and yet.... DON'T END IT NOW!!!!!!!!!!! i mean, yeah, it's possible to end it, but then i would be sooooo sad, so pwease don't end it? *bill's puppy dog eyes* i'll do anything for you just to not end it!!! ok, that's enough of a review, isn't it? PLEASE CONTINUE!!!!!!
Author's Response: WOW! thank you so much! you have no idea how much this review means to me! i'll do my best to continue, at first i was going to leave it, but then i got some awesome ides for expanding it, and i'll try and keep my writing up to par >.< and i am soo sos os os happy with the way you interpreted it! thank you thank you! you made my year *double kiss on the cheek!* TT.TT you made me cry (in a good way)
Date: 02/23/09 05:36 pm Title: Unconditional
YES. PLESAE EXPAND :) I loved this! At times I can seriously imagine Bill being like this. I was like AWWW when Bill broke down and told her not to leave
Author's Response: i know! I almost broke into tears myself when i read thism *i'm a noob and read my own stuff* TT.TT i'll do my best to continue, i just need ot get in the mood, i'm a very emotional writer, lol but usually on the happy side....so! *method acting here i come* i'll give it my best shot! thank you for the reivew!
Date: 02/23/09 04:30 pm Title: Unconditional
Please make more of this, its really really good. amazing in fact. i love that you used 1 Corinthians 13:4-7 in your summary
Author's Response: lol! i love your pen-name! its the story of my life, I'll do my best to write more, but i have to be in the right sort of depressing mood to churn out his stuff! lol, and as you can tell....i tend to be a hapy perosn, hence the 'lol's anyway! thank you for the rievew !