Date: 03/31/12 09:49 pm Title: Better Than This, and, A New Beginning
This was beautiful
Author's Response:
-snifflesnots- thank you :)
Date: 12/17/09 09:56 am Title: Better Than This, and, A New Beginning
I have been a lurker this entire time and I'm sorry. xD This story was so great, I love when Bill is mental, maybe it's my demented side that enjoys it... The very end waaaaas a bit fruity but I mean, something so sad NEEDS something real happy to end it. All in all, I give this story 5* for the originality, creativity, writing style, and just all around awesomeness.
xxx
Madi;;
Author's Response:
wow! ).) thank you so much, and thank you for reviewing. Ja i know the end was very...strange, somethign most people would never put on the end of a fic, especially the whole heaven thing, but thank you for reading, and ja, i de beleive that was the only way they could ever really be happy, mental "problems" (we shall jsut say that) never just stop, and even if they did, bill had just caused too much heartache for it all to be forgotten, this way they had a new start.
So once again thank you for your review, and for reading, this just made my day :D
Date: 07/06/09 06:09 am Title: Better Than This, and, A New Beginning
i
am
deppressed....
*sob* this was very very awesome and sad and painful and wonderful and full of love!!! Its going straight to my favorites *Sob* and im still crying.. I think ive been crying through the whole thing *choked laugh*
Author's Response: oh! thank, you thank, you thank you so much for reading this story! i am so happy to get your reviews, even if i did officially depress you, i feel privaliged to have left an impression on you with my writing. Once again thank you for readin and reviewing.
Date: 07/06/09 05:51 am Title: Ill boding blood
OMG *sob*
im
officially deppressed
*cries pitifully*
Date: 07/06/09 05:39 am Title: Unconditional
wow...That was intense, and it was amazingly written. I ADORE how you made everything so painful, and how you described the mixed emotions so well. i think i'm about to cry, which i have NEVER done from reading only one chapter before! and im not sure on your writing style, im not that great at these things, but it's awesome as it is i think xD
Author's Response: WOW, thank you so much for reading, this story was very special to me while i was writing it and it means quite a lot to me that you both read and reviewed it, if i may ask, how did you find it?
once again thank you for the review! (and i'm sorry i made you cry, but at the same time it makes me happy to know i coudl convey the emotion behind this story.)
Billa
Date: 06/11/09 02:02 am Title: Better Than This, and, A New Beginning
Awww I didn't want them to die.
But it was still beautiful!
Date: 05/14/09 04:03 pm Title: Better Than This, and, A New Beginning
did they all die? are they in heaven?
pretty sad if they all died =[
Date: 05/14/09 12:19 pm Title: Better Than This, and, A New Beginning
Could you explain. I really didn't get this chapter. Are they dead ?
Author's Response:
yes, they are dead, i was a little ambigious in the explenation of whether they had died or not, but yes they are dead, Tatiana died first, and Bill just a little after, they are in the after life, and once theyve been there a while, years, or perhaps only days, as time has no imporatnce once you are dead, then Tom is there, its up to you to decide if he died after living a full life, or if he died because his twin was no longer with him, i left that bit up ro the readers imagination.
but i had to have him come, because i beleive Bill will never be completly happy unless his twin is with him.
Date: 05/14/09 04:43 am Title: Better Than This, and, A New Beginning
A better ending? NOOO! This is so WOW, so delicate, so superreal, so tender and, why not, happy. Happy because it's good to know that there is a place where troubles and pain go away, leaving room just for love. Speaking about love, I envy you for the way you describe them interact, the small details showing so vividly their feelings, I loved that very much! All in all, beautiful! I'll be waiting for the next one!
Author's Response:
-sniffles- thank you.
i'm glad you found it happy too, even though it was a bittersweet kind of happy. and omg....i just realized, i don't know why it took me so freeking long, lol, you've been reviewing on my stories forever, but you've been writing Gods gift, which i absolutly love! and yes i am so sorry about my typing, i'm much to lazy to take my time and make love to the keyboard, my thoughts are much too important! lol. but i think i did rather well for this one ;)
Date: 05/14/09 12:52 am Title: Better Than This, and, A New Beginning
that was beautiful.
amazing.
I'm crying like a baby.
Date: 05/14/09 12:08 am Title: Better Than This, and, A New Beginning
how is tom dead ?
Author's Response: time passed, and Tom, probably died of old age, or perehaps was unable to live on without Bill in the world. I'm not sur ehow he died, i left that sort of thing up to your imagination, but i wanted to imply that Bill and Tiana had no idea how long it was after they hade come to that place before Tom showed up.
Date: 05/13/09 10:23 pm Title: Better Than This, and, A New Beginning
Wow. Took my breath away! BEAUTIFUL! THERE ARE NO OTHER WORDS TO DESCRIBE THE FEELINGS THIS GAVE ME! I feel better, more complete, knowing their story ended rather well. Wow.
Author's Response:
thank u lady
Date: 05/13/09 09:47 pm Title: Better Than This, and, A New Beginning
fixing? really? i'm positive that there was no better way to end this story. soooooooooo beautiful. i cried the whole entire way from the crash, i loved this story, and i hate to see it end, but i know that it ended perfectly. that tom part at the end killed me, it was so overwhelmingly sad and beautiful and cute. i'm glad that you decided to have them die, but also describe what happened after their death. when you said that bill had regret in his eyes, i sobbed, i was so sure that they were going to live happily ever after at the beginning of this chapter, it just took me by surprise. i do like the added bill thought part. it's nice to see what he's thinking while he dies, since we knew what tatiana was thinking. i like the whole say their name, then say wake up, and then say open your eyes. the repetition just made it more, um, poetic (i think that's the word i want). oh, i also love that bill went back to the original him once he died (blond hair, no piercings, etc.), that was so symbolic somehow. not many people can pull off an after death kind of place, but you...? you are just soooooooooo talented at every style of writing you choose to write, whether it be just a chapter, or a story, you pull off every emotion that you wanted to convey, with the reader able to imagine everything. i'm actually glad you took this long to write it (even if you weren't concentrating the whole time just on this one chapter) because i know that i wasn't prepared for this to end. ever. but now? i guess i'll live. i'm just going to have to read more of your stories, i guess. but seriously, though, i think that if anyone tells you to change something about this chapter, i will be very mad, for, in my opinion, this is the PERFECT ENDING!!!!!!! you know, i could go on for days about how perfect this story, this chapter, your writing is, but i think you get the message, so... i guess this is my last review for this story. that's HORRIBLE!!!! NO!!!!! well, i'm going to reread this story over and over and over again, so maybe this won't be the last review, and i'll just keep commenting on how awesome perfect this is... hmmmm... i'll have to see about that... well, for now, at least, this is goodbye to the BEST story i've ever read... i'll miss it dearly.
Author's Response:
oh, wow.
every time you review, you touch my heart. Thank you so much for your support and continued reading, i really did wrie this story for you, oyur reviews are the ones i look forward to everytime i update.
i am planning on editing and reposting this sory in the near future, i am happy with the whole of it, but i think there is a tiny bit, wording and such, thatr i could change that would make it so much better. and there might be more chapters on the way if my plan continues through, yet this one will always be the end.
i'm glad you liked it, i wanted it to be an actually happy ending despite th tears shed to get there, but with a disorder liek Bill's, true happiness in thier firs life would not be possible, so i knew if i wanted ot be somewhat realistic i would have to end it, but give you hope because death is not the end, its a pause a rest before an even bigger longer and more beautiful journey life.
so once again thank you so much! i hope you like some of my other work as much as this, although i have to say this story, its writting, to me, is some of the best i've done, so please don't be too disapointed in my other stories.
thankyou kindly
Thea
Date: 05/13/09 09:36 pm Title: Unconditional
the saddest first chapter ever!
Author's Response: aw!...thank you? lol no really thank you for the review
Date: 04/07/09 03:12 pm Title: Used, Worthless, Unwanted: Part Two
horrible? never!!!! i can't believe you finally got another chapter out!!! yet again, another emotional chapter, beautifully put together by none other than you!!! there was only one thing that i think was a little confusing, and that you should fix: the beginning. i think you need to say that there was some sort of noise downstairs, or something, because when i read it, i was sorta confused, and then i understood. other than that, another perfect chapter. i understand how it would be emotionally draining to write this story, i mean, it's emotionally draining to just read the story!! in a good way of course. there is not one story i've ever read that makes me put all of myself into reading the story, except for this one. you portrayed tom so wonderfully, acting like a big brother to tatiana, not so much to bill, which just seems to fit the story so much better than if he acted more like a big brother to bill. he knows that something's wrong with bill, but doesn't know what (or maybe he does know, and just hasn't told tatiana). tom comforting tatiana made me feel like crying. it's so wonderful to read that she has someone to look out for her, she's not on her own. i can tell that you worked hard on this, with it being almost perfect and all, and i appreciate the work being put into this. this story makes me feel privilaged to read it, with it being as awesome sauce as it is. i really love the end, with bill asking forgiveness, and then tatiana just giving it to him. again, makes me want to cry, just sooooo beautiful. they love each other, they really do, they just have to work out their problems, which i hope they do, but of course, it is up to you to decide what happens, so i'm 100% sure you'll make the perfect choice. your descriptions in this story are amazing, i can't get over them. i gotta say that if i were able to write like this, my english teacher would be in awe, and give me A's, which i get anyways, but without the teacher being in awe. i really don't know how you were able to write this well. i'm soooooo glad that i stumbled upon this story however many months ago it was. oh, and thought that i'd tell you that if this story were a person, i would want to marry it, and have 58 kids with it, that's how much i love this story. oh, and sorry i didn't comment immediatly, i haven't been on the computer for about 48 hours, so i wasn't able to check as often as i normally do for this story. hope very much so that you can post another chapter within the month!!!!!! i've missed commenting on this story, i was even going to go back and comment on the rest of the chapters again, that's how much i missed it. AHHH!!!! just reread that last part of this chapter, and once again (i like repeating myself) I LOVE THIS STORY AND ITS DESCRIPTIONS!!!!!!!! ok, that's all for now.
Author's Response:
AW!!! ur so cuddly and adorable dreamers! i just wanna cuddle ans squish you! you really do leave me the best reviews, out of all the reviews i recieved i enjoy your's the most!
i just wanna give you a little key so you know the chronicological of the chapters.
5 falling, the last chapter (still to come), 3 a Happy memeory, 4 Ill boding blood, 6 and 8 Used, worthless, unwanted part one and two, 7 suicide note, 1 Unconditional AND LASTLY 2Picking up the pieces.
nd yeah i was a little unsir eabou how it all started, this chapter. also i have the last chapter planned, but i'm not sure if i'll actually complete the actual storyline i'll complete the story but i think i'll leave the actual ending to the readers imagination, cause i can't settle on what i want to happen, but i do have th elast chapter planned, and it will be a sweet one, but i'm so busy with AFFSOAHM and GREY and work at the moment, but i promise not to leave this story unfinished!
Date: 04/06/09 09:20 pm Title: Used, Worthless, Unwanted: Part Two
Honestly, if I were her, I would have left him a long time ago...
But the story is great, and I wait with baited breath for more...
Author's Response:
oh i know, most smart people would leave or even people who have normal feelings, Also i'm not writing the good stuff, only the bad, you don't get to see how sweet he is, or was, you miss out on how perfect he was, and basically the entire story is a flashback from before the first two chapters, they are the end. so it kinda works backwards... if that makes sense...which it probably doesn't, so this chapter, is the first time he was harsh, just after the first miscarrage. the chapters in chronicological order are.
5 falling, the last chapter (still to come), 3 a Happy memeory, 4 Ill boding blood, 6 and 8 Used, worthless, unwanted part one and two, 7 suicide note, 1 Unconditional AND LASTLY 2Picking up the pieces.
the reason i wrote it in this order was becasue the first chapter was originally a one shot, then i wrote the others as oneshots as well, and simply posted them when they were done, but each one was planned. so i'm sorry its so confusing...do you think it'd be better if i posted them in order?
thank you so much for your review lady!
Date: 03/31/09 06:24 pm Title: Suicide note
Poor girl, living the way she is because she loves him. It's sad, really...
Date: 03/31/09 06:03 pm Title: Used, Worthless, Unwanted: Part one
So sad, and she could be strong if she wanted. But it's good that Tom understands, cuz even the strong need to bend sometimes...
Author's Response:
she could be, as you se int he first chapter which comes after all htese chapters, lol, but she's been spoiled by bill and tom, they've pampered her and broken down all the walls she'd built around he rheart, thats why it hurts so much more when Bill abuses that trust she finally gave him
thank yo so much for these reviews hunny!
Date: 03/31/09 05:59 pm Title: Falling
Manly Bill is a wonderful thing!
Author's Response: he definatly is! omg lurv him
Date: 03/31/09 05:51 pm Title: Ill boding blood
That was truly horrible. I want to cry. How do you know what it's like to go through that kind of pain and torment and anguish? You nailed it, the feelings of being a failure, because you couldn't do what women were meant to do, the emptiness inside that feels like part of you is gone, the tears, the unheard pleas, the dispair, all of it is displayed here for the world to see. If only I could have captured these things on paper when I felt them, I could have been the author of this fic...
Author's Response:
aw hunny *huggles* i've never had to feel the anguish of these feelings, at least not of losing a child, but i was a councilor to teens who had abortions or miscarrages when i was 17, only for a little while but long enough to grasp the multitude of emotions, anger, bitterness, pain, selfloathing,hatred, sadness, anguish...so i cannot say i KnOW BUt.... *stupid capslock*
thank you so much for your review hun, it means so very much