Date: 08/24/09 04:06 pm Title: Chapter 26
I meant to mention it before in other reviews but I always kept forgetting - I love Cody, Lars and Andreas! I think it's great that instead of having nameless, faceless bullies as guards (and taking the easy way) you gave them all personalities and a more human quality. And as for this chapter's scene...very nice ;) not at all cringey or embarrassing to read, unlike other stories. Also you said before that English was not your first language, which in my opinion makes your fluid and detailed writing style all the more remarkable =)
Author's Response: Thanks you. Your review made me feel better. I love reading smut, but I feel strange writing it. I'm just hoping it turns out hot without overdoing it, although sometimes I can't help it when it comes to the twins XD. rnI have a beta reader, and she fixes lots of my errors. I still make loads. I find writing a very stimulating hobby. My rl profession has nothing at all to do with writing. This is kinda my guilty pleasure. XD
Date: 08/24/09 04:06 pm Title: Chapter 5
“Fuck if I know!” Tom’s voice rose. “I just don’t feel like eating it.” He placed his palms over his face. “I don’t know why I suddenly feel so... miserable,” he said, trying to describe the gloomy feeling that all of a sudden stung him, like a needle prickling his heart. - is it because you aren't around Bill?
Tom took a glass of water and swallowed a couple of pills. Simone stroked Tom’s back lovingly and kissed him on the head. “It had been a while,” she sighed. “What are you feeling?”
“It’s the needle in the heart again,” Tom mentioned. Simone wrapped her son in her arms. - yup no Bill equals pain!
Tom kept making occasional glances at Bill’s table to see if Bill had returned from wherever he was. He knows I start my shift by now. It came as a surprise to him to realize he missed the ugly boy’s constant presence. - awh well it is Bill.
“Well… imagine being with the one you love and them not recognizing you. Not knowing you.”
“Why not?”
“Some kind of memory affliction,” Bill explained. “And so you’re just dying to hug them and to kiss them but you can’t because they won’t allow it, because they don’t know who you are and you’re afraid to scare them away. It’s terribly sad.” - awh Billy *pouts* I'm sorry that must be tough!
A+ good job Bill you taught Tom well!
Date: 08/24/09 03:51 pm Title: Chapter 4
Bill smelled incredible. Enticingly sweet, almost floral - lol Tom you're getting suck into to UglyBill lol
“You can’t keep your attention focused for even a minute,” Bill admonished. “Here I am talking like a dupe and you’re drifting who knows where not slightly interested in the matter.” Tom looked dumbfounded at Bill, who fortunately hadn’t a clue he was the one to blame for his ‘drifting’. - *giggles* poor Tom poor Bill
“Does it bother you the way… the way people treat you because of your--”
“No,” Bill answered coolly, not dismayed in the least.
“But… don’t you feel lonely?”
“Actually, I like being alone,” Bill said. “I stay away from people if I can help it.” - a clue...but I already kind of guessed that one. Can't stay in hidding if you have friends.
But now it's too late Bill has a friend in Tom.
Date: 08/24/09 03:27 pm Title: Chapter 3
“I’ve seen your everyday effort to maintain your scholarship,” he continued, “and since it is rather unusual for you to fail any of my tests, I’m going to give you a second chance.” Tom’s face perked, his eyes gleaming with hope. “I don’t usually do this, except when I think students deserve the chance, so don’t go boasting it around.” - wow nice teacher!
“I have an algebra test on Friday, and—“
“Yes!” Bill’s overzealous assent stunned Tom in place. Did he know I’d ask him for help? “Yes, of course I’ll help you,” Bill answered in a calmer tone as soon as he composed himself. - *snickers* so cute!!!
awh why are you anxious Tomi?
Date: 08/24/09 03:21 pm Title: Chapter 2
I love that Tom is all dissapointed that Bill isn't staring at him like before. lol
LOL I love it Bill isn't even his name is it? lol
“It’s okay,” Bill said. “I can watch you from here.” - lol
Bill is so weird because he is clearly not the Bill we see but what or who is he?
Date: 08/24/09 03:12 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is so unexpeced! I really like it. I love that Bill is ugly! *giggles*
Date: 08/24/09 02:53 pm Title: Prologue
oh my what a lovely start!
Date: 08/24/09 10:21 am Title: Chapter 26
FINALLY! I can't say enough! Ah, finally. And man, was it hot O.O *fans herself* Wheeeeee...
Author's Response: lol thanks. Glad you enjoyed :)
Date: 08/24/09 07:36 am Title: Chapter 26
*starts firework*
I'm so happy to read this chapter. Finally.
*still jumping up and down*
Sorry, just too hyper, a need a minute to calm myself.
Just when I thought tom's vision couldn't get better, I mean, bill in mesh, everyone will so love to see that, then bill give him the real thing. How wonderful.
And the men's reaction to the twin is so funny.
Author's Response: Thank you. Bill in mesh is HOT. I do want him to wear more mesh outfits even though he's going for the robotic, scifi stuff, but I'm sure he can throw some mesh in there D
Date: 08/24/09 01:02 am Title: Chapter 26
I laughed at Cody's reaction SO hard, haha. That was like, the best. My reaction, completely.
And Andreas was so jealous! Hahahahaha
This chapter...was amazing *_* ♥
Author's Response: XD So glad you liked it! I really had fun writing the operator's dialogue. I think we all can relate with Cody's reaction XD
Date: 08/24/09 12:57 am Title: Chapter 26
That was fast. They really got into that. Anyway... They're leaving the base? What does that mean? Are they escaping? or is it some kind of mission? Update soon cause I can't wait to find out :)
Author's Response: LOL yeah, they got into that fast, but after 26 chapters even I couldn't wait. XD I'll try update soon.
Date: 08/23/09 11:41 pm Title: Chapter 26
Nyu?Yay!!!I loved it so very much<3<3Im glad you wrote it this way and zomgness...I see my name!Aww you didnt have to do that but I love you more for it<3<3Im your #1fan now and if you ever wanna chat, Im here!!!Ich liebe dich!!!
Author's Response: Hi. So, happy now? XD I know you insisted on the kiss so much, so I think I gave you plenty of kisses in this chapter, plus more. LOL
Date: 08/23/09 10:50 pm Title: Chapter 26
I heart you. Seriously. Thank you SO MUCH for the wonderful images lol ^_^
And Andreas is just jealous XD
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you liked it. Yeah, he really is jealous. XD
Date: 08/23/09 10:34 pm Title: Chapter 26
OOH FINALLY! that was cute, the whole bill's head then the bathroom bit!!! the dudes' reactions were amazing as well as the blow job... then on top of all that you end it like you did... wow you blow my mind!
Author's Response: XD Thanks! This chapter was fun to write!
Date: 08/23/09 09:48 pm Title: Chapter 26
ooo! This is the chapter I have been waiting on!!!!
Andreas isn't such an ass, he at least managed to give them 'some alone time'.
Now I'm interested to see how Bill is going to get both of them out.
Author's Response: Glad you liked it. :) Yeah, Andreas did gave them some time alone, but truth is, he didn't want to hear anything else. XD
Date: 08/23/09 09:47 pm Title: Chapter 26
Interesting twist at the end there. That was epic, though. This is getting so crazy!
Author's Response: lol thanks! XD Hope it keeps you entertained.
Date: 08/23/09 08:59 pm Title: Chapter 26
plzplzpzplpzlz update sooon..i luvz thiz soso much=]=] thx soso much=]==]
Author's Response: =D
Date: 08/23/09 08:55 pm Title: Chapter 26
No fucking way! Not only the best ending line ever but an unbelievably delicious chapter. It was definitely worth the wait. Keep up the great work- I'm eagerly waiting for more!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the encouragement! :D
Date: 08/23/09 08:46 pm Title: Chapter 26
LOL Oh my god, the part with Cody, Lars and Andreas had me laughing so hard!
I couldn't even fully enjoy the amazing twincest smut I've been waiting forever for!
LOLOLOL. My jaw hurts!!! I seriously can't stop, it's that hilarious. Or maybe I'm just a freak, I dunno.
“And can he do it again?” Cody said enthusiastically.
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Cody said, “I mean if Princess was my brother…”
“Knock it off, Cody,” Lars said. “Damn pervert.”
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He went next to the bed’s railing and feigned a sonorous, pleasure-filled moan.
“Holy crap!” Cody cried.
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OH GOD, lol. Cody is so FUNNY! He's officially my favourite character now. OMG. Thanks so much, I haven;t laughed this hard in a long time.
Author's Response: Hee-hee. Yeah. Between the three operators, Cody has a more laid-back personality. He speaks what he thinks and throws the occasional joke. :D I'm glad you liked it!
Date: 08/23/09 08:40 pm Title: Chapter 26
wah wahhhh wahhhhhhh
that was AMAZING.
just.
fuck.
i need a cold shower xD
and YAY for escaping xD
Author's Response: lol thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it.