Date: 02/28/09 06:28 am Title: Chapter 7
Since they're 13, they should know what being turned on is and stuff xD
I mean, I learned about it in SCHOOL when I was 12 or something. So it's weird that they are still acting so innocent and like they don't know anything. Hell my best friend even had sex when she was 13. It's normal to always think that "They're too young", since you're older than them in your fic, and it might not seem as something you would do when you were that young, but it normal to know about those things when you're that young :P
Author's Response: Nah I think 14 is normal to know. I never learned that stuff in school at the age of 12. Thats sixth grade and yeah todays generation people are having sex at 12 but I don't want my characters to be whore-ish for each other. Also like I said it's not like they're exposed to sex.
Also it's not that they don't know anything they just think it's strange for each other. So it's a little confusing for them.
Date: 02/28/09 05:02 am Title: Chapter 7
You're welcome. Great story by the way. That's why I faved it....
Author's Response: Thank you miriameva ^^! I'm glad you faved it
Date: 02/28/09 03:37 am Title: Chapter 6
oh I see the boys bodies are reacting to eachother but their still innocent and niave to which this means.
I love that you show the slow transition of how their reacting to the change of hormones and their close relationship. you never seem to rush their development and I really appreciate how you make their feelings realistic and confusion understandable.
oh and it's too cute how bill wants an kiss to make his weird feelings in his stomach to go away but it just makes it worst.
both boys have developed a physical need for eachother in this chapter different ways. I love that they both are trying to deal with their confusion of their bodies reactions in niave way. not understanding what's going on but still acknowledging their bodies are longing for somethings they don't understand.
and tom's wet dream was more informative than the feelings in their tummies. tom had fully got aroused by bill's body and scent. his experience was more obvious about his sexual interest in his brother. so I could see tom trying to explain bill what his feelings are.
oh and I see that gordon is introduced and he is a happy influence on them about how love should be by how his relationship with their mom florishes. seeing how he makes their mom happy might enforce the kissing makes sure you never loss the one you love and makes you happy.
at the end this chapter ends with a question that can hurt their closeness or make them closer. depending on how they feel about this being wrong and try to distance themselves to make their feelings disappear or they can try to find were these feelings lead to and try to see what they mean and how to feed into them and do what feels right. but I excited to see where you go from here with that question.
sorry late
Author's Response: I actually wanna explain a few things. Maybe I'll explain it in the next chapter end notes but you take time to write good reviews that I simpley love and theres a few things that maybe I could answer for you ^^.
Well they're still 'innocent', I guess you can say, and naive because they're still so young. Some people say that at age 13 they should know or have learned about such feelings. I know I didn't learn about such things at that age. Also it's not like they're exposed to such intense feelings of love plus they're brothers. I could see if maybe they felt this for a girl but since it's for each other, and they're brothers, they're confused. It's different from when boys and girls fall.
I'm glad you're understanding though ^^. In real life you don't just jump your twin brother and think 'oh well this is normal' and at an age of 13. People who think that aren't very realistic about life.
On another note Tom's wet dream was a little funny but it happens, especially at a young age like that. And it starts to show things are slowly changing even if they're not totally realizing it. Like you said ^^
I'm glad you're noticing the 'hints', so to say, that are key facts to how the twins relationship changes. Jorg and Simone never showed affection so Bill believes thats why he left. Gordon and Simone show lots of affection and they seem happy together, no ones left. So,to Bill, that proves the kissing must work.
I hope you keep reviewing I enjoy reading them very much. Thank you for taking time to write them!!
Date: 02/28/09 12:15 am Title: Chapter 7
first review and it feels so good
xD
well at least tom wasn't a little pervert and didn't beg for bill to help take care of his errr....problem
xD
LOVE IT SO FAR
your amaze me
Author's Response: Should of figured this was you Angelica XD
Aaww you're the best :3
Date: 02/27/09 12:19 pm Title: Chapter 6
I love your story so far .. I hope Tomi's reaction isn't bad ...
Author's Response: Tahnk you. Come by saturday to find out, when the enxt chpater is up ^^
Date: 02/27/09 12:40 am Title: Chapter 6
update soon PPPPPPPLZZZZZZZZZZ
Author's Response: No worries I will on saturday! So be sure to check back, read, and review ;)
Date: 02/26/09 10:52 pm Title: Chapter 6
i did not think the last chapter was boring!!!! i could never think any chapter was boring... this story is just way too good!!!! this chapter was just amazing awesome!!!! the cliff hanger is killing me, though.... PLEASE UPDATE like tomorrow, so it won't absolutely kill me... i LOVE this story!!
Author's Response: Well thank you so much!!! I thought people did cause I didn't have many reviews so it clicked in my head that maybe people didn't care for it ^^
But gosh thanks a lot really ~^^~!! Well I'll think about it but I'll probably just update saturday ;)
But don't die :O! I'll need you to review and let me know how you liked it 8)!
DANKE FOR THE REVIEW!! This story loves you JUST as much :)
Date: 02/26/09 10:50 pm Title: Chapter 6
awww.. cute! You really need to put up the next part! I can't wait for it! I love how the twins are so innocent and naive.
Author's Response: Yeah it makes you want them to stay innocent and little for ever. But with gorwing up comes more of a mind and then they're not so naive anymore T~T. oh well lol
Come back saturday for the next chapter!! Thank you so much for reviewing ^^!!
Date: 02/26/09 09:48 pm Title: Chapter 6
ooo! I loved that last line.
cliffhanger, but a really good one!
I'm itching to read more of this.
Author's Response: Thanks :)!
come back Saturday and I'll have the next chapter up ^^
Date: 02/26/09 08:12 pm Title: Chapter 6
Nooo! Cliff-hanger!
What awesome developments...I so can't wait for another chapter!
Author's Response: I know it's like "Dun-dun-DUN!" lol thanks ^^
Date: 02/26/09 08:11 pm Title: Chapter 6
Very, very good chapter. I enjoyed this segment of ths story very much. It was absolutely excellent. Can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: Why thank you very much 8)! I hope you review the next chapter ^^
Date: 02/26/09 08:01 pm Title: Chapter 5
awe your the first person who dedicated somethings to me without me know it was a total surpise when I read the final notes. I'm so thankful for your dedication and I love that you really appreciate all the effort I put to make sure that I tell you what your story means to me and how it makes me feel. I always analysize everything. it's my little cork.
ok so in the beginning of this chapter I notice that simone has found another way to try to make the boys more independent. first with agreeing to separate them at school then forcing them to have separated rooms.
and speaking of simone she is getting a little suspicious of her boys relationship. this chapter she got a glimpse of their unusual closeness. now I'm afraid she's going to be looking for clues about their behavior and try to stop them if she can try.
I notice that in this chapter they have learn to be more carefully with their PDA. and there is a start of their secret relationship. they're already sneaking around with eachother.
and I love how you have them talk about why are people were always trying to pull bill and Tom apart. their conversation just sumed up what they consider people's perspective of their love as just jealous or not understanding because they don't have their connection. really love that they don't see nothing wrong.
oh and again love the boys little gestures of love and how cute that they are so dependent on eachother and that they don't let outside perspective change how they feel or treat eachother. they won't conform to social standards eventhough I don't think they understand that yet at the age.
ok really love thanks for the dedication again and look forward to more of this story.
Author's Response: You don't have to thank me for the dedication I was just so taken back from your well thought out review on what you thought of my story that I had to thank you somehow. You're a lot like me I just have to express to people what I thought and how I liked it and even some things I maybe didn't like. I'm such a critic on things 8)
And yes it seems Simone is turning into... not such a nice mother. I think here she's not trying to split them up purposely she's just trying to be a mother. And when the seperation at school happened, in a way, she tried to stop it but of course lost. So I guess that all makes her look like a bad mother.
I have plans for this story and I'm already working on the sequel but so I don't ruin things I have to keep my mouth shut and it's so hard!!! lol But for right now I can tell you she isn't too suspicious yet.
Oh and you're got it right!!! It is the start of the sercret relationship but they don't see it that way like you noticed and read. They don't understand why people see it as wrong so thats why they're keeping it a secret. To their small minds they see it as inoccent and just brotherly love.
But once again I wanna thank you for your wonderful reviews I love them so much! I just posted up my next chapter for people ^^. I hope you read and review that one too!
Date: 02/26/09 08:00 pm Title: Chapter 6
I wonder whats going to happen next, first Tom has a wet dream then Bill has a funny feeling around his own brother..I wonder when things will get more intence love it.
Author's Response: Well they're still young so not yet lol. But keep reading and you'll find out ^^
Date: 02/25/09 05:51 pm Title: Chapter 5
ooh i cant wait telll there older=] update soon thx
Author's Response: Me neither lol
Date: 02/25/09 08:11 am Title: Chapter 5
I really liked this chapter! As you said, it really set up their current situation at school and home. I also liked Simone's role in this chapter...the way she got suspicious and uncomfortable. Really liked that development!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I promise the next chapter will be much better though. And danke, no ones said anything about Simone so it's nice someone noticed her role ^^
Date: 02/25/09 08:05 am Title: Chapter 5
Happy Birthday ~ kinda late but oh well, I hope it was a good one. Anyway onto the review. The summary captured my attention but I must admit I was sort of nervous about starting to read this fic because I didn't want to get started with something that uses a tired and over-used storyline. This, on the other hand, has just hugely surpassed my expectations. The way you write shows perfectly the confusion and the innocence of the minds of people so young. It's like each chapter is just another small insight into their minds and the things they are doing to try and keep together. I love how nothing is over exaggerated, you're not rushing things and you're keeping it on a level that matches the ages of the twins. You can really imagine the dialogue actually belonging to them. It's such a sweet and touching story that you're telling and you do it really really well. I'm really looking forward to finding out what happens next. I love how the bond between the twins is gradually growing stronger and stronger at such a realistic pace and I look forward to seeing where you will take it next. :)
Author's Response: Better late than never, thank you! *Hugs for you* lol.
I'm glad you took the time and gave my story a chance that makes me very happy ^^. And I know what you mean with over used story lines they get boring and old. I tried to make something new, something different, someting interesting. But gosh you flatter me ^///^ I don't even know what to say but THANK YOU. Thank you a thousand times!! This review means a lot to me and it gives me a lot of confidents and makes me feel like I'm headed in the right direction. I love such detailed reviews cause it shows me how my readers feel about my writing, I feel thats important for any author to know. So thank you again MysticalMayhem 8)!!
Date: 02/23/09 08:51 pm Title: Chapter 4
Happy Birthday!!
It's not getting boring at all!
please update soon!
xoxo.
Author's Response: I'll update Wednesday!
And thank you very much ^^!!!
It's so wonderful to be told happy birthday by everyone *heart*
Date: 02/23/09 03:25 pm Title: Chapter 4
HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!!!!!!! this was a great update, btw. i felt the twins pain of being seperated and everything. i truly love this story!
Author's Response: DANKE ~^^~. And danke for your review 8) It means a lot to me *smiles*
Date: 02/23/09 03:10 pm Title: Chapter 4
Happy Birthday!!!! Hope you day are filled with happiness!!!!
A very sweet story btw 8) writhe more soon? :D
Author's Response: Thank you ^^!!! And I have it already done now I just update every other day so no worries~
Date: 02/23/09 11:08 am Title: Chapter 4
I loved it as always. I am entincipating the next chappie. Your doing an awesome job as always. I loves it. *Gives you hugs*
Author's Response: *Hugs you back* Thank you very much *smiles*