Date: 04/23/10 05:49 pm Title: Chapter 13
I'm so, so glad you updated. I really liked this story when I read it last year and I kept it on tracked in the hopes that it would be continued, and it was! I really like the way you write; you use lots of imagery and you hvae exemplary diction. Personally, I think Tom should just stick to the dreads. Historically speaking, I highly doubt that cornrows were ever a fashion style, and if any variations did exist somewhere, it must be obscure. Stick with the dreads (in the original color, of course); I kinda miss them on the real Tom, so I need something to compensate for it, lol! :)
Author's Response: Thanks for your opinions. I really don't know what I'm going to do about Tom's hair. On the one hand I've come to like RealTom's new style, but on the other hand it's just like you said: where in history did anybody have cornrows? I'd stick with the dreads just as long as my readers don't think I'm stuck in the past. I'm glad you like the dreads! Thanks so much for your kind comments on my writing style too. You don't think I go overboard with the imagery, do you?
Date: 04/23/10 11:50 am Title: Chapter 2
The capital of Saudi Arabia is Riyadh. Just thought I'd point out the spelling error. Like the story so far though!
Author's Response: Thanks. Yeah, someone else pointed that out to me. Whoops. Glad you like the story!
Date: 04/23/10 10:42 am Title: Chapter 13
I liked this. I think you really addressed what was probably going on with Bill. It would be interesting to know what Tom feels and how e is going ot act based on those feelings.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked the direction I took. If you look, Tom's feelings are hinted at, but in much more subtle ways than Bill's are.
Date: 04/23/10 08:45 am Title: Chapter 13
now everyone, lets all kill tom ^^
Author's Response: No you can't kill Tom, I still need him. But I understand why you must have the urge.
Date: 04/23/10 05:49 am Title: Chapter 13
Glad to see this story hasn't been abandoned! I'll be interested to see where things progress from here...I like the emotions you went for from both Bill and Tom in this chapter.
Author's Response: No it hasn't been abandoned, and I felt like a lying jerk for not posting for so long. I hope pople don't stop reading just because I'm so sporadic. Glad you liked the emotions and the direction I'm taking it. I spent forever in a deadlock over how I should continue.
Date: 02/28/10 08:56 pm Title: Chapter 12
I just read this and I'm basically craving more. Are you going to update soon? Please, if it meant you would I would totally buy you cookies!!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the lovely review. I will try to write some more soon. I've been so lazy about it.
Date: 12/26/09 07:14 pm Title: Chapter 12
please update.... soon would be nice. its been an awfully long time.
Author's Response: Plan to write over break.
Date: 11/15/09 04:20 am Title: Chapter 6
Ty u for coming back
Author's Response: You're welcome.
Date: 11/12/09 06:00 am Title: Chapter 12
That was definitely rape. But, it was well written and your intentions for the characters came through strongly. Great chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks for your opinion. Glad it seemed like rape to you (it was supposed to).
Date: 11/10/09 03:27 pm Title: Chapter 12
It's quite beautiful, you know, for sex.
I think that in real life? Yeah, it's still rape. Somethings you might enjoy, but you still can't want them. But Tom did force one of these things upon Tom.
Look at it like this; if you are a heroin addict, and you're getting clean. You don't want anymore heroin. But if someone forces it upon you anyway, it would probably make you feel so good. But bad, at the same time.
But in ficlife? I would say, not really. Because it was good, they both enjoyed it, Tom was gentle and Bill liked Tom (a little, kind of) beforehand.
Author's Response: You mention real life and ficlife, but I want this story to be realitic. Why on earth wouldn't it still be rape in ficlife? Bill kept saying no, and even thogh he didn't hurt Bill, Tom was pretty forceful. I liked your heroin example, that's really insightful. Thanks for the review!
Date: 11/07/09 12:53 pm Title: Chapter 12
Definitely rape. Very hot, but rape nonetheless. Even if he, and I, liked it, he was forced into it. lol
Anyway, great sex scene. Aggressive Tom is my favorite.
Author's Response: Thanks for your opinion. I agree, it was rape. But I tried to make it the sexiest rape I could. Glad you liked it.
Date: 11/06/09 08:42 am Title: Chapter 12
if this is rape then YAY I LOVE IT XD
Author's Response: Haha. Well it was rape, if you think about it. But I'm glad you still found it sexy. I did too.
Date: 11/05/09 08:39 pm Title: Chapter 12
nah.. you can't rape the willing.. this was a slight hint of sexual harassment but not rape. he wanted it.. it would be rape if Bill cried in the end or bled. and as I've mentioned before he liked it.. so nope!
Author's Response: I have to say I disagree. Crying and bleeding doesn't make it rape, just as pleasure doesn't make it consentual. Did you notice Bill going "no" and "don't" and "stop" throughout the chapter? That's kind of an indication that he didn't want it. Wanting it and feeling pleasure from it are not the same thing.
Although Tom might agree with your viewpoint.
Date: 11/05/09 05:31 pm Title: Chapter 12
On a TECHNICAL level...yes. But, jeez, have you ever read tenth circle by Jodi Piccoult? Sometimes there are things that can be so...grey. I mean, we'll see what happens after, but I think it was technically rape. This was a lovely chapter, as always.
Author's Response: Thanks for your opinion! I think I'm a little more firm on the idea that it was rape, but you're right: to the characters it's kinda grey.
Date: 11/05/09 11:27 am Title: Chapter 12
I think it was still rape, because if Bill had had a choice it would not have happened. However, if you are going to be raped, it was a pretty gentle and pleasure filled experience for Bill, that's for sure. great great chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks for your opinion. I agree. But you're right, if you're gonna be raped, that was the way for it to happen!
Date: 11/05/09 10:39 am Title: Chapter 1
maybe you're a little right xD
I'll be anxiously waiting for the next chapters ;)
Author's Response: Ha. I hope I'm at least a little right. You had some very good points though. Made me think.
Date: 11/04/09 06:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
Bill would still feel used and upset by semi-sex, and then he'd be angry at Tom, and there'd be a void between them
mm depends on how tom would do things; he already has been rude to bill and still he fantasied about him :P
I just felt that they might as well go all the way and get that over with, and have Bill deal with his emotions about it.
yeah, i don't desagree totally but it messes with my mind that bill, in a way, gave in so easely to the fisical part (as you say he's romantic and all sweet)... maybe it was state of survival and a bit of curiosity too ;P
Tom's essentially "had" him, he is going to feel a little "ruined" and be subconsciously wondering if there's any point to resisting from now on
since it was tom who "ruined" him wouldn't it be a bit natural that bill also nurtured bad feelings for tom?because, as we both agreed, although bill gave in, it was still rape and a person doesn't get over it just like that - and there's still the issue of the non conformation of his new role. although I understand what you say about bill getting to the point where he learns that it's not worth fighting against his situation because it's not going to change. but still I think it's logical for him to feel some resentment agains tom ... and that comes way from behind, because bill acused tom for only saving him so he could have him.
i guess i'm just curious as to how you're going deal with all that and make them fall in love :)
Author's Response: I think maybe you're afraid that I'm going to have Bill just suddenly forgive Tom and fall in love with him?
Don't worry. That WONT happen. Bill has to do a lot of forgiving and soul-searchng. The following chapters will probably be quite angst ridden. Tom was in the wrong, and Bill will be upset over it. But eventually he's going to get over it.
Date: 11/04/09 05:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
I actually don't agree with you :P
given what you wrote so far and my interpretation, I would say Bill doesn't agree with his news status (as a concubine and slave) or his new tasks. and also he is not the submissive tipe, he always tries to run and even rebel against what he doens't want. therefore i don't think that force is the way to win his heart; i think compreention, give him space, conquer him little by little was the way - and, in my opinion, this could be done without tom giving up on his principles and morals about slavery and their duties, because, given the context and the little time the boys know each other, it would be out of character if tom just forgot about all that.
but still I think tom should have given bill more time for him to adapt mentally and perhaps fisically (with those "encounters without full-on sex") to his new role.
Author's Response: I get what you're saying, and it's a very valid way to look at it, but I imagine that Bill would still feel used and upset by semi-sex, and then he'd be angry at Tom, and there'd be a void between the two, which would only get bigger every time they did something else. I just felt that they might as well go all the way and get that over with, and have Bill deal with his emotions about it. Also, despite his rebellious nature, I think Bill is a sweetie and a romantic at heart. Now that Tom's essentially "had" him, he is going to feel a little "ruined" and be subconsciously wondering if there's any point to resisting from now on. That (unfortunate) viewpoint will put aside some of his inhibitions long enough for him to grow more attracted to Tom, and maybe develop some feelings for him.
And hey, Tom's not an evil person, but he's not super thoughtful either. He doesn't love Bill, he doesn't even know him that well. He just knows he's beautiful, he's his slave, and he wants to have sex with him. That's about as far as their connection goes at this point.
Thanks for being open and honest with your opinions. It's nice to have readers that aren't afraid to share their true thoughts!
Date: 11/04/09 05:19 pm Title: Chapter 12
great charpter luv it more
Author's Response: Thanks
Date: 11/04/09 04:21 pm Title: Chapter 12
that wasn't rape because Bill liked it and he did want it in the end
will Bill become the prince favorite?
Author's Response: Thanks for your opinion. You're the first one to see it as consentual. I have to say I disagree though. Bill said no (many times), and yet Tom continued. Pleasure doesn't negate rape.