Date: 04/27/10 04:27 am Title: Chapter 16
Okay, that was a quick update, I was just checking in and found that it had already been updated so thanks!
The sex scene was hawt! In a sexy-hexy way. That scene with Bill and Tom was sweet. I still think that Tom is power tripping Bill in a way. It's good that he apologized for what he did to Bill, but I still think that Bill is vulnerable. Naturally instead of forcing Bill, I think that he's going to attempt to seduce him so that he willingly submits to him.
I think that the whole conversation between Bill and Tom was foreshadowing of potential things to come.
Anyways, thanks for updating so soon. i love that Bill's hair is so long by the way, it makes sense that he's so enticing to royalty it makes him seem more feminine and an over beauty.
Author's Response: Well of course Tom will always have power over Bill, since he is his slave and lives in the harem, the question is whether or not Bill minds or not. Right now he still does. I like your predictions, but remember how Tom felt at the beginning of chapter 14; that still hasn't changed.rnrnForeshadowing what?rnrnGlad you like Bill's long hair. Don't get too attached to it.
Date: 04/27/10 03:12 am Title: Chapter 16
THINK OF ENGLAND! XD love you!!!! that was so crazy, do NOT enjoy sex, just lie back and think of england?!?! wtf man...okay so i decided to formulate my review as i go, so i can respond to everything i wish to, as if i wait till the end i forget what i wanted to say when i wanted to say it...yah, hope it's not too choppy :P aww he tried to apologize...and billi let him kissy and it was so cute and then he needed some sex which was pretty damn hot for het, congrats (yes, het is feared in these here slashy parts, aint it? i agree, but i dont hate it as long as its not mary sue magical fangirl...this is totally understandable, and who wouldnt need a fuck after getting to kiss bill like that but nothing else? haha. hope that wasnt way too erratic, cant wait for the next bit!! haha shame on us shirking our academic responsibilities xD
Author's Response: Hey, all great comments. I'm glad you got the England thing. My roommate said a lot of people are history dumb and wouldn't get it.rnrnI'm so glad you like the het. When I was writing it, I hated it until it started getting rough. Rough and kinky sex is super fun to write.
Date: 04/27/10 01:13 am Title: Chapter 15
OMG i do review percentages too xD! i love you, you write such natural and effortless seeming interaction and relaxing. i love love the way the girls (including bill) laze about together, somehow so interesting even when they're doing barely anything. btw, the punishments dont seem that harsh, pretty normal in some areas...specially in the past, tho this AU is like a perfect blend of past romanticism and present cleanliness and medical ability :) tom totally did that cuz he feels like a rapist...tho it wont help anything to give rapists easy punishments loll
Author's Response: Oh my gosh, your words were just what I wanted to hear. I usually feel pretty good about my writing, but now I'm getting into deep emotional territory (something I've never done before) and I'm worried that it's going to start feeling forced.rnrnI'm glad you like reading about the concubines' time in the harem. I have a word document saved with all the activities that they can do, so I just pull that up when I feel like I've been making them play chess too much or something.rnrnHa, yeah. I pick and choose which parts of the past I want to include in this reality. Did people brush their teeth in historical arabia? Maybe, doesn't matter though. Mine do.rnrnYou're right about Tom. Letting the man off easy (which was not the morally right decision) showed that he realized the hypocrisy of the situation, which showed that he felt guilty.rnrnThanks!
Date: 04/27/10 12:48 am Title: Chapter 16
Fucking HOT! Like, sweat dripping hot! So extra good job, since describing vaginas is not your forte ;)
Author's Response: Wow, was it that good? Thanks.
Date: 04/26/10 08:29 pm Title: Chapter 16
I'm starting to favor Tom x Deena over Tom x Bill. lol Bill is so cold in this, like he's straight, or too young to love. Oh well, thanks for a very fast update. You've made it to over 3000 words again ;)
Author's Response: Oh no! Thant's not what I'm trying to convey at all. I hope I can make you like BillxTom again.rnrnDo you think gay guys just automatically like all other guys? Nope. Bill has been KIDNAPPED, FORCIBLY STERILIZED, TORTURED, RAPED, and TATTOOED. He's entitled to be upset and standoffish, especially since Tom is not exacly apologizing for the situation or offereng to let him go. Can you imagine someone treating you like that? It'd be very hard to forgive.rnrnBill is only seventeen in this fic, but in this AU world many people get married younger than that. He is(except for what he's done with Tom) quite sexually inexperienced. He may be naiive, but he's not stupid, and his experiences in the harem are quickly causing him to become disillusioned with any sunny views he may have had on life.rnrnI hope I can change your opinions with future chapters. Thanks for your review.
Date: 04/26/10 08:10 pm Title: Chapter 16
awww him and bill kissed
i love this more soon please!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Glad you like it.
Date: 04/26/10 08:04 pm Title: Chapter 14
im a little worried abt the opium, i read the good earth and its terribly crippling to get addicted. i hope it isnt indulged in too often...the tom part worked for me, yep yep, cleared up why he was acting so differently towards bill, than the other girls. woo slave tattoo, where exactly was it put? im glad bill thought of his family, i was beginning to wonder. should he maybe ask to see his mother? she really loved him and he seemed to love her, apart from exasperation...and now he must see she had a point all that time. maybe she could be brought to see him and he could explain a bit, leaving out the bad parts, so that she doesnt worry or isnt like mourning for him...just a thought :) im sure she would be happier that her baby is living in the palace than thinking he's dead or something. damn, im supposed to be studying!!! if I fail I'm going to blame your awesomeness xD *jk, i wont fail...lets hope i dont get a C!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the awesome review!rnrnI don't plan on Making Bill or anyone else get addicted to opium. I think of it as an infrequent indulgence that some of the concubines do. Remember, Bill was just getting high because of the tattoo, and even still: at the coercion of his friends (say no to peer pressure Bill!)rnrnI'm glad you liked the Tom part. I kind of felt that it was revealing too much too bluntly, but I didn't want you guys to keep thinking that Tom's inconsistent behavior made absolutely no sense.rnrnThe tattoo is high on his left hip, kind of back so that the edge of it almost touches the very side of his butt, but not quite. If you imagine a woman's one piece bathing suit, it would be in the curve of fabric at the top of the hip.rnrnBill thinks of his family alot, but I don't want to write about that yet because I'm not planning on letting Bill see them again. Sorry, no visits from Mommy. besides, even if he left the bad parts out, what would he say "I just decided to randomly leave late one night and audition to be the Prince's concubine?" rnrnTHF.com is a bad website. It causes normally bright, industrious young college girls to become distracted, class-skipping donothings! I skipped english this evening to write more.rnOh well, I hope you do well on your exam!rn
Date: 04/26/10 04:48 pm Title: Chapter 13
i love your use of language :) and i like the almost confusion of both of them following...well, yah. I shall continue onward in this amazing story after my test this evening that I still have to study for...
Author's Response: Glad you liked the language, I tried to make the words extra pretty in this chapter. And yeah, Bill and Tom each have issues they're working out in their heads right now. rnrnThanks for reviewing on each chapter as you go, that's so nice.
Date: 04/26/10 04:32 pm Title: Chapter 12
okay, well technically it was rape since bill was determined not to, but...i guess it was the best kind, since if you are going to be raped the best scenario would be to enjoy it, and he did. idk, hot tho, really really hot xD
Author's Response: Yeah, I tried to make it the nicest rape I could, but still have it be rape. Glad that came through alright.
Date: 04/26/10 04:11 pm Title: Chapter 11
nooo tomi! wass he gonna do?? i wanna kno...its too bad he's being this way, a little romance would have gone a long way, methinks, but now bill is turned off lol
Author's Response: Even though it would be easier to write and more fun to read, I think that it would be unrealistic to have Bill in Tom be all romantic so soon.
Date: 04/26/10 03:56 pm Title: Chapter 10
yeess, so good! im glad they somewhat understand each other now...of course bill didnt want to be a concubine! lol, he was freakin kidnapped. cant wait for baby's back to be better :)
Author's Response: They don't understand each other. That'll become clear later on.
Date: 04/26/10 03:49 pm Title: Chapter 16
Lol, I don't mind het at all, if the story is still Bill/Tom centric. And yeah, you wrote that well.
Plus I can't dislike Deena. She's nice and I like the women's characters :)
LOL @ Tom wanting to have sex in order to celebrate Bill simply kissing him :D Lol, so suß. Shows the importance he gives to that kiss :D
Author's Response: Don't worry, Tom may still have sex wih his female concubines at different points in the story, but it is a story about BillxTom.rnrnDeena isn't so bad. I try to write her as less sweet and likable as Mahtob though. I've tried to insert seperate personalities for Deena, Mahtob, and Nepthys, even though they're not the main characters. Glad you enjoy them.rnrnYeah, Tom keeps telling himself that he isn't going to become attached to Bill, but his inner thoughts and actions kind of speak differently don't they? His resolve is slipping and he doesn't even notice it. rnrnThanks for the review.
Date: 04/26/10 02:15 pm Title: Chapter 16
for someone who doesn't like to write het you did the job pretty well ;)
Author's Response: Hey, thanks!
Date: 04/26/10 01:47 pm Title: Chapter 16
Well you did well describng that vagina.
Author's Response: Haha, thanks. You'd think writing about them wouldn't weird me out so much seing as I have one.
Date: 04/26/10 01:29 pm Title: Chapter 15
That is quite a pretty tattoo.
Author's Response: Thanks. Some reviewer who's arabic told me it says "In the name of god who's merciful..." and somthing else she coulfn't translate. I just chose it because it was pretty and Google said it was a symbol of the ottoman empire.
Date: 04/26/10 12:56 pm Title: Chapter 16
OMG, she's going to get pregnant, I just know it, I have that feeling, She's Going To Get Pregnant *_*, '--gets panick attack and faints--'
Author's Response: Hey, that's a thought... Because they didn't use protection did they? Good observation, But I'm not telling.
Date: 04/26/10 11:48 am Title: Chapter 1
For disliking het, I think you handled the writing well. I personally find it hard to write it too, but then again it seems that I am always writing that way! But seriously, it was very good. I will find it interesting to see what happens next! You have a talent for writing.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you thought it was good.
Date: 04/26/10 07:59 am Title: Chapter 16
that was hot het but u know what i want
hot slash
the kiss was sweet
i like Tom's attitude
Author's Response: I know it's not the sex you guys wanted, but hey, I'm glad you at least thought it was hot het sex.rnrnI hate writing kisses; I find it very difficult to not start repeating the same three words: mouth, tongue, and lips. rnrnTom's attitude is gong to probably seem pretty inconsistent in the future, but that's only because he's employing so many defense mechanisms. He'll be switching between what he wants and what he thinks he should do.rnrn
Date: 04/26/10 06:44 am Title: Chapter 16
She won't get pregnant, will she?:O
Author's Response: I can't tell...
Date: 04/26/10 06:24 am Title: Chapter 15
The marking says: In the name of God the merciful, something like that, I can't translate it fully. I'm an arab :)
Author's Response: Hey, Thanks! It could have said "Tom's Property" and I wouldn't have known. That's so cool that you can read it.