Date: 04/29/10 07:39 pm Title: Chapter 17
Wow you update fast!
Sweet chapter. It seems as though Bill is assimilating into the Harlem now and is more accepting of his role. I really enjoyed this chapter. Though it wasn't full of drama or anything, it let me as a reader get to know the characters a little more.
Author's Response: Yes, I wanted to convey that Bill is becoming accustomed to harem life. Glad it seemed that way to you.rnrnAnd I'm glad you feel like the characters each stand out with their own personality. I've tried to make them important, not just fillers.
Date: 04/29/10 06:35 pm Title: Chapter 17
Hehe, I'm glad you want them to be closer without Bill "giving in". I don't want that, either.
And gah! I instanly feared for Bill with that shady exchange in the courtyard. Probably has nothing to do with him being kidnapped, but SOMETHING'S gonna go down... O.o
Author's Response: It's going to be a real struggle for me to get Bill and Tom closer without making it seem unrealistic. Tom did rape (subjective) him after all.rnrnYou're one of the few who's commented on that last bit. I can't tell what that's about yet, but you're right; something big will end up happening. I'll just let you speculate on what it might be.
Date: 04/29/10 01:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
I kinda of sensed a very small change in the style of your writing for chapter 17... I don't know what it is, it's just... slightly different... in a good way though. It was almost imperceptible. I don't know, the atmosphere just seemed to be slightly changed from other chapters. Maybe it's because you're starting to characterise different people with different traits. In any case, I like it. It's good! :)
Author's Response: Ok, well as long as you like it and it was a good thing. If I start getting lazy and the quality of the writing starts going down, I want people to tell me.
Date: 04/29/10 02:07 am Title: Chapter 1
I just wanted to convey how much I love the name Nephthys, since you mentioned her in the most recent chapter. I also liked the style change you're working with, nice to have a fresh take on things. Either way, your writing is so beautiful.
Author's Response: I think Nephthys is Egyptian? I was googling middle eastern names and that one popped up. Glad you like it.rnrnWhat style change? Does my writing feel different now? I'd like to know what you meant by that. I'm flattered that you think my writing is "so beautiful."rnrnThanks!
Date: 04/28/10 07:45 pm Title: Chapter 17
OMFG mroe plz :))))
Author's Response: I'm going to post another chapter soon, but then I won't post for about a week and a half, since I have a bunch of end of semester stuff to do.
Date: 04/28/10 11:43 am Title: Chapter 17
I totally lost track of this story, but I'm glad I started reading again!
The whole Tom/Bill thing is cute. :)
Can't wait for an update! :D
Author's Response: Glad you found it again!
Date: 04/28/10 03:20 am Title: Chapter 17
hey hun! loving the story!
I just wanted to clarify, a Chelow Kebab does not have the rice skewered onto it, its just served with the kebab :D lol cause to skewer rice u'd either need big rice or a very tiny skewer :D
Author's Response: Ooooh. Thanks, that makes more sense.
Date: 04/28/10 12:43 am Title: Chapter 1
No I dont think you are making Bill like Tom too fast. I thought it was perfect. The small kisses and Bill acutally kissing Tom first. It's progress to me. I know that there might take a little more time for Bill to like Tom but this was great!
:)
Author's Response: Oh great I'm glad you thought so.
Date: 04/27/10 11:49 pm Title: Chapter 17
very good, of course it leaves me wanting more, but nothing you write could leave me feeling any different :) i loved the little overview of bill and tom's interactions over the time passed~ooh money changing hands suspiciously!!! i wonder what bad things are brewing! i remember you said that more horrible things would happen to bill, so i suppose it could have something to do with that...or not :) *abt ch16, yesss I liked it when it got rough too xD* aaw, bill will never see his mommy again? thats a bit depressing...but i didnt realize that the sultan wasnt open about his methods of finding playthings...im happy that bill kissed tom, thats a good sign :) i will be waiting eagerly!
Author's Response: ...nothing you could write could leave me feeling any differentrnrnAw, what a sweet compliment!rnrnYes, bad things ARE brewing. You'll see more about that in future chapters.rnrnGlad you like the rough het sex.rnrnNo the sultan doesn't advertise the fact that he has people kidnapped to be his slaves. It's probably something that the people of Bagrah wouldn't be too surprised to hear, but it's just one of those things that's fine to imply, but the minute that you actually definitively tell people about it, the get mad and won't put up with it.
Date: 04/27/10 08:08 pm Title: Chapter 16
yeah...not too keen on het sex so I kinda skimmed over it :)
I love this story, please write more soon!!!
Author's Response: You skimmed over it! Gosh, is it really that big of a squick for you? I tried to at least make it interesting.
Date: 04/27/10 07:27 pm Title: Chapter 17
I love all the historical accuracy in this. It makes it all the more enjoyable. :D
Author's Response: I try to insert a lot of culture so it seems like a very different time and place.
Date: 04/27/10 07:26 pm Title: Chapter 17
i liked the skipping a head a little. i very much enjoyed reading all about tom and bill's interactions. tom describes bill as just being so adorable, i love it!!
Author's Response: Oh good. I'm glad you like the direction it's going in.
Date: 04/27/10 06:51 pm Title: Chapter 17
I'm loving the bill and Tom interaction! More of THAT please! I'm Also loving the fast updates! Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Glad you like the interaction. I hope I'm not making Bill like Tom too fast.
Date: 04/27/10 06:30 pm Title: Chapter 17
this is good i loved it
looks like tom and bill are getting used to each other ;)
more please soon
Author's Response: Thanks.
Date: 04/27/10 06:05 pm Title: Chapter 1
I forgot to mention - it just makes me chuckle, the way you made Bushido a eunuch.
Author's Response: Haha, yeah. Well I wanted him to be a guard in the harem, but then I learned that the men who guarded the harenm were all eunuchs. So I castrated him.
Date: 04/27/10 05:49 pm Title: Chapter 17
I love this little bit of mystery. I can't wait. And I like the Bill/Tom interaction. I'm interested to see how Bill feels about the kiss he started.
Author's Response: Glad you like it, thanks!
Date: 04/27/10 05:16 pm Title: Chapter 17
oooh, I wanna see Bill dance :D
and it's so cute that Bill and Tom are getting along better and better :)
Author's Response: Oh, he'll dance.rnrnrnI'm having trouble making Tom and Bill grow closer without making it seem like Bill's just giving in. Maybe some more internal dialog from Bill will fix that.
Date: 04/27/10 03:58 pm Title: Chapter 16
Okay, so I went back to chapter 14 and read how Tom felt after the act. It seems as though had guilt but at the same time he feels justified in his behavior. It's almost as though he thinks that the guilt is just something he has to get over rather then something that he should face and deal with.
" 'It’s better this way.'
The words sounded hollow, but Tom knew they had to be true."
This particular statements makes me rethink the dynamics of the their relationship. Tom just want it to be sexual at this point and he wants to resist becoming romantically attached to Bill.
Does this even mean that Tom will keep his promise or will he manipulate Bill into thinking that the next time they have sex it was consensual, even if it isn't?
Wow, now I really want to know what happens, but I'll wait patiently for it.
Author's Response: You're right. Tom is very resistant to becoming romantically attracted to Bill. rnrnBut you can't fight love.rnrnBut Tom will try.
Date: 04/27/10 02:39 pm Title: Chapter 16
uhm.. no.. you got me wrong. I think he was much kinder to her than the other time weīve "seen" him with one of his concubines (although I think it was Mahtop the other time)... That other time he uses quite sharp words as soon as she does / says something he does not approve of.
But now he lets her wriggle out of his embrace while fucking and stuff like that. I think he let her "lead" their intercourse much more than he used to... He also cares very much about her pleasure.
Author's Response: Hey yeah, you're right. Let's pretend I planned that and it's s sign that Bill's having a good effect on him, mkay?rnrnThank for explaining further!
Date: 04/27/10 04:54 am Title: Chapter 16
itīs soo cool you continue writing this! THANK YOU VERY MUCH!! I like this course - Tom being reminded of what he did when doing justice and then feeling guilty.
Oh, guilt is such a powerful emotion, letīs hope Bill knows how to play it. But I really like Tom is now trying to seduce him slowly... heīs already treating his other slave a tiny bit different, isnīt he?
Author's Response: I'm glad you like the direction I'm taking it.rnrnWell, no. Tom and Deena were just having rough kinky sex. It wasn't meant to be a reflection on his regular attitude towards her. I started writing a vanilla het scene and got bored, so I decided to change things up.