Date: 09/11/10 10:32 pm Title: Chapter 28
i am so happy you've updated! thank you!
Author's Response: You're welcome. I'm back at school now and very, very busy, so we'll see how updating goes.
Date: 09/11/10 08:51 pm Title: Chapter 28
OOOHHH pleaseeeeeeee moreeeeeeeeee. like NOWWWWWW thanks uuuu
Author's Response: Thanks for your amazing insight and opinions into the story.
Date: 09/11/10 08:07 pm Title: Chapter 28
I wish this one had been less sad and depressing and more developing towards mending the tear in Bill and Tom's relationship. i hope the next part comes out soon~
Author's Response: Well I don't want them to have an epic fight, break up, and then get back together in happyland the very next day. That wouldn't be very good writing. But don't worry, lots of things still to come!
Date: 09/11/10 06:22 pm Title: Chapter 28
Tom is an ass, and he deserves to get a little jealous ;D
Author's Response: He sure does. I just recently thought of a few things I may do to accomplish this.
Date: 09/11/10 06:19 pm Title: Chapter 28
great chapter. update soon??
Author's Response: I'll try, but probably not for at least a week. I'm back at school now and it's my senior year,which means I have very little spare time.
Date: 09/11/10 06:14 pm Title: Chapter 28
Damn, now I reaaallllyyyy want to know what Aaron did to Tom!!
Author's Response: I'll tell eventually. Thanks for the review.
Date: 09/07/10 08:30 pm Title: Chapter 13
you have a special place in my heart for writing this.
Author's Response: Aww, thanks.
Date: 09/07/10 05:50 pm Title: Chapter 3
wow. i am riveted
Author's Response: great.
Date: 08/26/10 12:06 am Title: Chapter 27
I'm so confused..WHAT IN DEAR CANDYLAND IS GOING ON?!?
Author's Response: Don't worry, you're not really supposed to know the whole story yet.
Date: 08/17/10 02:19 am Title: Chapter 27
well, i dont know why tom did that, and im not sure if it's because you just havent clarified yet or if i have forgotten, but it definitely happened...i guess i like bill's fire. that he pushed for an answer, and tho it wasn't what he wanted to hear, he stayed true to himself and didn't back down at tom's power display. no matter how much he likes tom, he just cut him off because he was told he is being used for nothing more than pleasure and im glad that bill is still the same bill as he was when he was captured. i found it sad and touching yet confusing when tom sank to the floor and had his mini episode afterward. looking forward to getting to the bottom of this aaron mess
Author's Response: Your review makes me happy because you seem to understand what I want you to understand, and to be confused about what I still haven't given away yet. Yay!
Date: 08/13/10 02:44 pm Title: Chapter 27
I'm not gonna kill you, I'm gonna kill Tom.
It's something about slavery and stuff in fics, it just gets me so angry, even though I know it's just fiction.
Oh well, I guess me being angry here means you are a great writer XD
More?
Author's Response: I would hope that's what it means. I always try not to be boring.rnrnThanks!
Date: 08/11/10 06:23 pm Title: Chapter 27
*sigh* I wanna cry... The part when they were saying their goodbyes by the harem, it made me sick! No long time ago I did the same that Tom did, and it's the most stupid thing u can do... The end it not a happy one, never -.-
I like your story
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
Date: 08/08/10 09:51 am Title: Chapter 27
this one made me cry really hard. i wish that Tom could've explained why he was so mean to Bill... Bill didn't deserve that, it was hard enough for Tom to get Bill to love him in the first place, he might not get a second chance....
Author's Response: Yeah, Tom's pretty stupid.
Date: 08/07/10 06:56 pm Title: Chapter 27
I'm devastated/I want to kill you.
No seriously, this chapter was epic. I very very rarely cry when I read fics and you managed to bring tears to my eyes. I could feel the hurt Bill was feeling, how confusing Tom's indifference or feigned indifference was to him.
I liked how Bill pressed the matter, didn't let Tom get away with avoiding him, and how he stands for himself in the end.
I can't wait till the next chapter and I want to learn more about Aaron. Did we know anything about him except for what is said in the last 3 chapters? I don't remember since I read the story while ago.
Anyway keep going, this story is amazing!
Author's Response: Glad I could evoke some tears, that gives me hope that maybe the last scene wasn't complete crap. rnrnHm, Aaron was first explicitly mentioned in chapter 23 , but there were allusions to him long before that. Some are EXTREMELY vague.rnrnThanks for the review!
Date: 08/07/10 03:05 pm Title: Chapter 27
I liked how Bill turned it all back around on Tom, and was yelling at him and let him know how it feels to be rejected like that. I think Tom probably already knows that, but somebody spunky like Bill is a good one to give him a reminder, rather than letting Tom keep the upper hand. At least Tom's reaction at the end was appropriate. The real question now is why did Tom feel like he needed to say that to Bill rather than letting him (and us) in on what's going on with other situations in his life?
Author's Response: That is the question isn't it. Well, It'll be answered...eventually. Thanks for your comments.
Date: 08/07/10 01:25 pm Title: Chapter 27
"Umhind" You know that it means mother of Hind, right? We use that a lot in arabic. Um and Hind is two different words. Um is mother and Hind is her oldest child :) It's a more of a respect term to call women with childs like that. They call you Um or Om( it sounds with O )that means Mother And put it with her oldest child, "OM Hind" . That is if you only have girls. If you have of both genders you put Om with yor oldest son. If only gys, well the same, with the oldest child :) And you should seperate Om with Hind, don't write it this way: "Omhind". Write it in this way: 1."Om Hind" or 2."Om-Hind". Number 2 is better thouh with a hyphen :) This way is more understandable :)
PS. I Love This Story :D
Author's Response: I didn't know that, so interesting. Umhind is just her name, I'm not trying to use it as a term of respect. I stole it from this girl I work with, it's her first name.
Date: 08/07/10 12:53 pm Title: Chapter 27
(reply) I'm saying he should have been a little more antagonized during the 3-week Tom hiatus (lol) but I realize now I might be mixing his personality with other Bills in other fics. So now I'm not sure.
And since you like technical corrections (I usually try to hold back on those since with my experience ppl tend to get offended) could you fix the large gap of space at the top and bottom of the chapter? XD It's kinda weird. And maybe even out the separations between sections. As in, right now the lines are closer to one section than another. But that's my OCD talking.
Author's Response: Oh, ok.rnrnI did the lines like that on purpose, but I'll change the ones at top and bottom
Date: 08/07/10 12:49 pm Title: Chapter 27
I actually feel like crying now D: They WILL make up soon right?
Author's Response: ...They'll make up.
Date: 08/07/10 10:33 am Title: Chapter 27
I read you response. I don't care if he forced him self to tell Bill all that shit. He was mean.
After the dark-haired boy had left, Tom realized that he felt very warm. He propped arms against the bookcase and bowed his head, thinking he might be sick. Nothing happened and the wave of nausea passed. Feeling dizzy, he turned and sank to the floor, burying his face in his hands. He sat, taking deep, steady breaths to calm down. The only conciliation that he could find—and it was a very small one—was that it was done; he had finally said what he needed to say to Bill, and the whole horrible scene was over.
I sounds like he forced him self BUT STILL!!! GAH!!!
Love your fics! Hope you give me more soon.
Author's Response: Ok, thanks. I'll post again either late tonight or tomorrow.
Date: 08/07/10 10:27 am Title: Chapter 27
The fight scene was definitely edgey i like it a lot and can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Edgy? Ok, I can take that. Thanks.