Date: 10/18/10 10:40 pm Title: Chapter 30
hmmm..... VAGUENESS IS ANNOYING!!!!!!!!!!! XD
Author's Response: Haha, yeah I get your frustration. But that's the whole point! If I told you everything, how boring would that be?!
Date: 10/18/10 10:02 pm Title: Chapter 27
i liked it.... it was original, not cliche'd at all..... and it was very convincing..... XD great job!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Oh so you like how I handled that? Thanks! I wasn't exactly fully happy with it when I wrote it. And "not cliched at all" is always a geat compliment to hear.
Date: 10/18/10 09:26 pm Title: Chapter 23
poor bill..... can't believe tom forgot him.....XD ah, well, he had his reasons.....
Author's Response: You think?
Date: 10/18/10 09:24 pm Title: Epilogue
okay okay, as of this piece of review i have not completed the whole epilogue, but i just had to stop and cry over the beauty of " He may have held no title, not even officially recognized as concubine, but all present in the temple, and indeed even throughout the palace, knew that the man standing behind the Princess Manar was the Emperor’s everything. And always would be." oh no, just read it again after pasting and im crying agian. seriously. if there was a hall of fame for sentences, that would be in it. another quick pause, im at about the part where you talk about how bill became health inspector to guard and protect the time tom has left, and god, i think every sentence is a work of art. i cant pick one out because they all run together so smoothly and everything's unfolding so beautifully and im crying...again. or still. okay im almost done now, but as i always carried a lingering thought for bill's family, i really liked that tom said he could go, if he was so inclined. best part of that : "And, despite the hour, after that Tom had had no choice but to make love to him for the second time that night." xD OOH! awesome!! he saw his mother! yesss thank you!!! ive been wanting that all along, oh yes! lovely. aaaaaaaaaaaw Prince Bill!!! soooo cute, I love you forever :3 *adds to favorites*
Author's Response: Did you really cry? I'm always doubtful when people tell me that they tear up or cry, because I just can't see how my writing is THAT good or touching or whatever. But it's still uber flattering. It's always nice to hear what people's favorite sentences and specific details were, so thanks for reporting on that. And thanks for favoriting! Hopefully you'll like other stories I write in the future, though I'm currently wanting to write something really disturbing Q_____Q
Date: 10/18/10 09:21 pm Title: Chapter 22
that was.... oddly cute smut...... did that make any sense????
Author's Response: Yeah, it did. Because thy were having intimate sex, but it was more smutty and less making love.
Date: 10/18/10 09:03 pm Title: Epilogue
I hope you know that you should be trialed after you just broke my heart... *sniffle* I think I litterally sobbed my eyes out when I found out Tom was married ;-; But the last paragraph made up for it. This was truely a wonderful story and I can't wait to read more of your work!
Author's Response: I know it's sad. Sorry, but life isn't perfect. At least Bill and Tom get to be in love and together right? Glad you liked the story and are excited for more.
Date: 10/18/10 07:39 pm Title: Chapter 36
the scene at the beginning of the chapter, when Bill is frantically searching for Deena, is so...vibrant and detailed--it really brought me into the moment. it wasn't filled only with cursory details that the reader needs to frame the scene, but with enough to make it like a movie reel. i especially liked the mention of how his feet felt ready to run with without direction. that's exactly how one feels in a moment of terror and haste, but most don't mention it...it gave such reality. :) i also really enjoyed Bill's role in the fight in the throne room, it's like he earned some honor...some bit of his dignity as a man back by being so helpful in the fight, even instrumental to their victory. loved the use of the knife hidden in his hair, it was so perfectly unexpected by the guards for a concubine to do real damage--they truly underestimated him. this chapter in general was amazing, fast paced, heart pounding, and gratifying. i liked that tom isnt rashly changing things now, yet they both know he will eventually. beautiful altogether...i'm sorely tempted to go back to the beginning again. i suppose ill wait a bit :3
Author's Response: What a nice review! I'm glad you really felt the urgency and terror of the different moments that I was trying to convey, and that you thought it was realistic. And I really made a point to have Bill be instrumental in the fight, standing up for himself and others. I did NOT want him to be a helpless little damsel in distress, ew. Thanks for sharing your thoughts, I appreciate it.
Date: 10/18/10 06:33 pm Title: Epilogue
This story was epic and I loved every chapters of it.
I think you're very talented and I will submit your story to the featured fics once again, I think you really deserve it!
Author's Response: Aww, thank you! You're so nice.
Date: 10/18/10 09:42 am Title: Chapter 1
Mhm - of course I like it ^^ This story was very good and with great ideas. I like it, so.. propably I'll return here ;)
Author's Response: Oh, even though I was a scathing bitch in my reply? That's nice, thanks.
Date: 10/18/10 08:06 am Title: Chapter 1
oh yeah, right, I'd forgotten.
yes, Bill was kidnapped, that's how he ended up in the harem, right?
Author's Response: Yes, but he was not "altered" until he got to the harem.
Date: 10/18/10 04:17 am Title: Chapter 1
yeah, I don't like rape, it's a horrible thing even if just imaginary, I find it hard to read.
so they knew Bill was sterile when they kidnaped him?
once I have a bit of time I'll check out your other stories :)
Author's Response: Wait, what? No. Bill was forced to have a vasectomy in like, chapter 4. Remember? I was just explaining that I did that because men were not allowed to live or work in the harem unless they were "fixed" so to speak. I didn't make it happen with the intention that many chapters down the road Bill would want children and be offered a concubine of his own. Where does the kidnapping thing come in?rnrnAnd please do, check out my other stories, that is =)
Date: 10/18/10 04:00 am Title: Epilogue
i really love this story, i have read it from the beginning. i was sad with bill almosst being killed but happy with the way the story ended. i was happy that bill got to see atleast some of his family after being taken to the harlem in the beginning
Author's Response: Glad you liked it. As he said in chapter 21, Bill was only really close with his mother.
Date: 10/18/10 02:36 am Title: Epilogue
This epilogue was perfect. It covered everything I wanted to know about! Thank you so much for doing such a great job with the epilogue, and with the entire story. You are an amazing writer. I look forward to seeing what you do next.
Author's Response: Thanks for your kind words. I tried to hit on all the unresolved points while still giving it some structure. But as I said, it's not exactly another chapter, just an info session basically. I'm glad you like it. I'll be writing lots more in the future so look out for that.
Date: 10/18/10 02:13 am Title: Chapter 1
Hey! Clame down ;) Me English is really poor so I have to use a diconary ;)
U have right - Ur story is realistyc one - and this is for the plus for me ;) But I just don't like not happy ending ;) Beside I don't read and watch het story, movies, books from 2 years? (or more o.o) I just don't like it ;)
So, I just expressed my opinion and I'm sorry that in some way U reaced sharply.
More good ideas and time to write ;)
Author's Response: Ok, your English was probably the problem. Your reaction seemed really shallow last time. Glad you still liked it even thought the ending wasn't all happy.
Date: 10/18/10 12:22 am Title: Epilogue
Beautifully written. I loved it
Author's Response: Thank you.
Date: 10/17/10 10:33 pm Title: Epilogue
:O Loved this story. :3 Beautiful!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: 10/17/10 10:18 pm Title: Chapter 21
me like..... me, me like!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Okay.
Date: 10/17/10 08:41 pm Title: Epilogue
I'm in shock. I think U did something... Bill had to be Tom's. But Tom married Mahtob, and have a son with her! Tom sleeped with Mahtob 4 years when he became a King! o.o And Bill is okay with it?! It's... impossible for me. Let the person you had sex and trash child with OTHER?!
o.o
I have to think abt this fic o.o
Greetings ;)
Author's Response: It seems to me, from what you said here, that you're looking for a story where the characters fall in love and have a perfect happily ever after. This story is realistc and, to be honest, much more mature than that. (seriously, referring to the kid as a "trash" child?)rnrnIf you want to read something with a perfect ending and unrealistic outcomes, there are plenty of poorly-written het fics for you on this site. They even come with silly self-insertion banners! Go enjoy one of them.
Date: 10/17/10 08:23 pm Title: Chapter 36
I enjoyed reading your story, it kept me captivated from beginning to end. I couldn't get enough of it.
I'm considering doing a re-read once the epilogue is posted.
Author's Response: I'm so tickeled to hear that people want to reread my story. And the epilogue is posted.
Date: 10/17/10 08:11 pm Title: Epilogue
Fantastic story. It was really entertaining.
Author's Response: Thank you.