Date: 03/16/09 09:52 am Title: Chapter 8
oh it's so cute! update sooon!
Date: 03/14/09 09:01 pm Title: Chapter 7
this was a great chapter no i dont think it was to long too short is more like it and about how bill and tom should seperate next i think should be anything but cheating you have done it so much already
Date: 03/12/09 01:19 am Title: Chapter 1
I guess I just want to learn more about how Tom was when he was a teenager as well. I know that he was best friends with Lorraine, but did he have a girlfriend or a person he loved before Bill and before he marriage Lorraine?
Author's Response: he never married Lorraine. Serenity just has his last name. They were best friends. I believe in the chapter were Bll and him went to palm beach flordia there is a flash back showing when she became pregnant and shows about the real father of serenity. Read that. I will think of something for Tom. Thanks for reading.
Date: 03/11/09 10:05 pm Title: Chapter 7
I don't want anything to happen please I always loved happy endings.
Author's Response: i dont think i am going to ruin anything right now. Thanks!
Date: 03/11/09 09:09 pm Title: Chapter 7
really i dont think they should seperate at all. it become so tiresome to read about them breaking up and getting back together...then breaking up agin. What i think you should do is have a way of tyler becoming really psycho and trying to harm tom and bill and the kids... add a little more drama besides our guys breaking up or cheating on one another
Author's Response: ok. i will try not to make them break up! Thanks!
Date: 03/11/09 09:07 pm Title: Chapter 7
love the long chappies!! and tom should have like a big Dramatic near-death accident..lol cuz of like tyler or Bishido
Author's Response: OK...i will try to think of something! Thank you!
Date: 03/11/09 08:28 pm Title: Chapter 7
I don't want them to separate but a little accident, maybe one of the children gets sick, I don't know :S
I love long chapters! They're perfect! xD
Author's Response: Thank you! I will think of something!
Author's Response: Thank you! I will think of something!
Date: 03/11/09 08:05 pm Title: Chapter 7
Uhh comeon I thought they were going to work out there problems but if anything than probably accident
Author's Response: They are. Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 03/11/09 07:33 pm Title: Chapter 7
Oh by the way...chapters should be long to get you into the story and give you something to think about while you wait for the next chapter to be posted.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Date: 03/11/09 07:30 pm Title: Chapter 7
PLEASE do not seperate them anymore! No real couple goes through this much infidelity drama!
OK..I could see a minor accident or something whereby one finally realizes how much they really love the other and that by almost losing the one, they pledge their undying love to each other. But PLEASE no more cheating.
Tyler needs to be dealt with but just to have him attempt and have Bill shoot him down and declare his love for Tom.
Bushido is boring now. Bill already told him no. I'd love to see what happens with the marriage counselor and the vacation in Mexico. And don't forget all the lemony goodness opportunity that Mexico gives you as an author.
This is a really good series. Please continue!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Bushido is boring at the moment. He will get fired up again. Give him time. Tyler will get delt with by Bill then if that doesn't work Tom will handle it. But that's later on down the line. Thanks for the ideas!
Date: 03/11/09 07:09 pm Title: Chapter 7
1. no more seperation period!
2. no they are perfect
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: 03/11/09 06:32 pm Title: Chapter 7
Everything 's perfect don't change it
Poor Bushido
I feel kind of sad for him
Author's Response: Me too. He's in love. Your the first to pick that up. Thanks for reading.
Date: 03/11/09 06:24 pm Title: Chapter 7
NO. On both questions. The chapters are perfect. Bill and Tom cant seperate. They just got back together. (In a sappy soap opera voice) Dont have us all go through that anguish again. It was hard enough the first time. (Now include the big crocodile tears)I was so happy for this chap because they finally got back together. Dont do that again. LOL. Ok so really dont have them spilt up. Then it doesnt really seem realistic. Kind of keep it simple for awhile on Billa and Tomi. That doesnt mean you cant have drama with the kids though. Maybe one of the twins could fall and break a arm and then you could play the whole "I want to break my arm too" card with the other twin or something. IDk. Just some ideas.
Author's Response: Thank you! You kinda gusssed what was going to happen to one of the twins. Nice. I dont think I am going to make then slipt again. Just fight and stuff. I have to focus on the kids for a while with the promblems they face. I'm still thinking about ideas. Have any for Serenity, Maddie, Grace, and Chis? I need to think of kid problems. But thanks for reviewing!
Date: 03/11/09 05:28 pm Title: Chapter 7
1. I think they should get in a really big fight about something that is not cheating xD
2. No the chapters are not too long!!! I would say they should be longer but that would be rude of me. ^^
Author's Response: Thank you! What should they fight about? Thats where i'm stumped at completely. HAve any ideas? I would glad to here them. rn:)rnrnI try to make the chapters long but not too long.
Date: 03/11/09 04:48 pm Title: Chapter 7
GODDAMMIT, whatever else but NOT cheating and NO dying either. Pleaze? *puppyeyes*
And chapters are WONDERFUL being this long ^^ Oh, and I love it all, I do :)
Author's Response: Thank You!
Date: 03/11/09 04:28 pm Title: Chapter 7
I'm really glad they are back together! Yay!
But to answer your questions, I don't think they should seperate by cheating yet again. It would seem to be unforgivable at this point after so many times. I think you have them in a good place right now with the forgiveness. That would IRL be the nail in the coffin. I thought you were aiming toward an accident involving Tom? That would add drama but not break apart their relationship yet again. Plus, if you added that in, you could also cause problems with Bill's pregnancy through the stress of that which would add even more drama. But I really am not for the cheating and seperation in that sense again. Make sense? :D
And there is no such thing as too long of a chapter in my book, so the answer to that is a resounding NO! LOL.
Author's Response: I like the way you think! I don't think i will make them cheat...i'm working something out! Thanks you!
Date: 03/11/09 03:40 pm Title: Chapter 7
I DEFENETLY BELIEVE THEY SHOULD SEPERATE BY CHEATIN I DUNNO IT MAKES IT MORE INTRESTING AN DEFENETLY MORE DRAMA! BUT IT SHOULD BE WITH THE FACT DAT BILL HAS SOME KIND OS FEELINS FOR BUSHIDO YOU KNOE BUT UMM LOVED DA CHAPTER!
Date: 03/11/09 03:39 pm Title: Chapter 7
1. They are going to seperate again? GOOD! That fix was way to easy. I think it should be Tom cheating on Bill again. Because the time with Kelly wasn't the first time he did it, so I don't see why Bill forgiving him so easily should teach him a lesson. If Bill forgave him the minute he apologized, he would assume he could get away with it again.
2. NO!!! DON'T YOU DARE SHORTEN THEM!
Author's Response: I want something to happen, but not sure yet. Everybody saw no, but you want it...lol...we'll see
Date: 03/11/09 02:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
I dont think they should separate.
The chapters are a good length. They aren't too long and not too short!
Author's Response: Thank You! I dont think i will make them, but there will be drama ahead!
Date: 03/11/09 01:46 pm Title: Chapter 7
In what way are you thinking seperate?
Author's Response: I don't even know anymore. It's getting too diffcult now so I may not do it anymore. We'll see.