Oh I hate cliffhangers XD What fast updates, I thought I'd have to wait a couple more months for a next chapter ;)

Well I'm definitely not complaining cause this story is keeping me on my feet! I want to know more about "The Beloved" and Bushido, why does he want Bill dead? How was Bill the child of the beloved? If he supposed to be innocent forever, how can there be another king?

I'm so full of questions, you don't have to answer them, I'm just rambling XD

Author's Response: lool i can't always promise fast updates, but i'm going to try :) I love all your questions (they're all very good), and they'll gradually be answered along the way. Thank you!

This is the first time I've ever reviewed but I loved the prologue so much I felt I had to. I know it's been a long time since you updated this but I hope that we will be able to read more of the story sometime. It's absolutely wonderful so far!

Author's Response: Thank you for such a sweet prompt to write more, and sorry for not getting back to you sooner. I have the whole fic planned out in my head and am still in love with it, but I suffered a computer mishap and just haven't found the time or resolve to rewrite what I lost yet. I do want to continue, and reviews such as this are such a huge motivator to do so that it's difficult to put into words. Just know that this fic is in the foreground of my mind again, and although I can't promise it will be continued soon, I am definitely thinking about it :) xoxo Clare

I favourited this story when you started it and have been patiently waiting for more. But I know I never reviewed, so here I am.

I'm not going to sit here and whine to you about updating it, you take your time, this seems like a very interesting and complicated story which you need as much time as you can to perfect chapters for it.

So, I just wanted to tell you I greatly enjoyed the first chapter in all it's secretiveness and I am eagerly waiting for you to continue.

You are a really good writer! I have the attention span of .....well something that has a really miniscule attention span so the fact that you have caught my interest and not let go with one chapter of your story for so long means something ;-)

Author's Response: You don't know how flattered I am that you are still looking forward to the next chapter after all this time - it makes me feel so happy. I love this story very much and have it planned out to the end (actually, at one point the second half was written but then my hard drive died and I lost everything.) But I love it too much to not rewrite it, and once I post the next chapter I will be able to post much more regularily (I should hope so - it's been months since I posted the prologue). Anyway, the fact that you cared enough to review is such a huge motivation, and I so appreciate how understanding and patient you've been about my slowness in updating. Your review really meant a lot to me, so thank you. And when I finally do post the next chapter, I really hope you like it :)

I need another chapter of this :( It won't leave me alone - I keep thinking of it!

Author's Response: I'm sorry, but I promise you that I absolutely love this story and have it planned out until the very end. The next chapter is by far the most difficult to write (it has something written in it that is very important to the rest of the story) so the chapter has to be perfect before I post. Ok, that probably makes no sense, but basically just know that I plan on updating, I just can't promise when. It makes me happy that you are looking forward to more, though, so thank you :)

Need... more... -weak grabby hands- ;_;

Author's Response: I'mmmm sooooo sloooooooow - I'm sorry! I have learned a valuable lesson, which is that I am incapable of multitasking and certainly unable to work on two stories at once without making one feel like my ugly abandoned child. But even though I'm currently ignoring it, I still love it very much (*gives it a distracted yet fond, reassuring pat on its mal-nurtured head*)and I promise I will update eventually. But your prodding absolutely rekindles my desire to post the next chapter, so thank you :)

Uhmmm...there's only one thing i can say-MORE!

Author's Response: Your encouragement is so helpful - thank you! There is definitely more coming (but really slowly, obviously) and hearing that people are interested completely rekindles my desire to work on Chapter 1 (rather than the parts of the fic that come later on). Thank you!

So, children, what have we gathered from this chapter? Bill is a giant dick? That's right, very good! What else? Tom better kick his ass? That too. This is obviously going to lead into a scorching Tom/Bill/Bushido threesome? ...I think we might be getting a little bit ahead of ourselves here.

Regardless, apart from that, I scoff at your nerves. This has all the potential of a brilliant AU, and actually I'm kind of awed at how much information you managed to give away in such a (relatively) short chapter, especially since you took care to show, not tell. The hardest part of imparting information through dialogue is trying to make it sound natural; more often than not it comes across like a recitation, but you followed the golden rule and sprinkled information throughout the chapter instead of grouping it into several paragraphs, which, when concerning AUs especially, I really, really appreciate.

I also loved how you made it obvious that it was Bill without ever taking his name or devoting a few hundred words to his physical appearance. Speaking of Bill, I've always liked the spoiled versions of his character and this seems far more extensive than most - but it makes sense, because the power he has magnifies his selfishness. I loved how much of him you managed to show through things like the plum and his inability to focus on the interrogation and the conflicting light you painted him in - how his attributes (selfishness, vanity, etc.) were completely opposite to the ones a good ruler should posses. It helped play up Jost too, and I imagine you'll be bringing Tom in as the perfect foil.

Speaking of Tom (and Bushido eeeee) from the mention of pets (which I wasn't expecting at all, btw, when I first read it I visualized a big cat or something, but then I wondered why the hell he'd be feeding it a plum) it seems like you're foreshadowing that the plot would have something to do with them. And Tom? Perhaps? -taps chin-

This is why I should take notes while reading; I was totally going to say something and now I've forgotten. :( Um... was it... Bill is a dick? Did I say that already? Damnit.

Either way, I'm so so eager to read more. You're doing awesome at this AU thing, don't even worry about it. Write, instead. :D

-Ella

Author's Response: First of all, you should know that your review brought me back to sixth grade geography class when one of the cool kids told me that she liked my Lisa Frank folder with the frolicking unicorns on it – I have never been so proud in my life lol. Seriously though, I have absolutely no clue how to write fiction (especially AUs) and the fact that you think that I’m doing okay makes me feel so much less insecure. Stuff like foreshadowing and giving background info is completely new to me (I’ve always kind of written down random stories to entertain myself, but trying to make them so an audience not only understands what’s going on, but actually finds the plot interesting is really foreign and intimidating).

You have no idea how happy it makes me that you caught almost everything that I tried to get across in the prologue – I’m STILL grinning huge to myself right now, and I read your review for the first time hours ago. I also am a huge fan of spoiled Bill (obviously xD), and your intuition about Tom is spot on. Don’t even get me started on the topic of a Tom/Bill/Bushido threesome – I don’t even think that I’d be able to write it because 1) I’d probably die of cardiac arrest, and 2) it’s such a beautiful possibility that I’d prefer someone with talent to tackle it (ahem *elbows you discreetly but painfully in the side*)

I can’t thank you enough for your detailed review and for your vote of confidence – I am so obsessed with your writing that it really is like being told that I have nice hair from Giselle or that I’m very charitable from Mother Theresa…it makes me so happy :) Thank you!

LOVE IT!! I can't wait to see where this leads. :3

Author's Response: Thank you!

This looks good. Bill seems evil.

Author's Response: Just a little bit xD

it sounds lovely.
this king's a bitch, but I like it.
very well written :]

Author's Response: aww, thank you so much!