Date: 08/20/09 03:18 pm Title: Liability
old ladies are amazing.
them and theyre flowery dresses
Date: 08/20/09 03:17 pm Title: Chromosome
is the beast like some kind of other bill (bipolar disorder maybe)
Date: 08/20/09 03:16 pm Title: Plaything
carly and billlllaaaaaa.
are sex. i mean, they should have sex. ;)
Date: 08/20/09 03:14 pm Title: Inconveniences
honestly.... the bug?
come 'on why?
Date: 08/20/09 03:12 pm Title: Volunteer
review? how?
this is too good.
Date: 08/20/09 02:43 pm Title: Hesitation
wow i love this story it's so vivid and intriguing please write more (:
and another amazing chapter :D
Author's Response: thank you, hun. :)
Date: 08/20/09 01:32 pm Title: Hesitation
Iamsodamninlovewiththisstorybecauseiamaalittlefreak.Canyouupdateassoonasyoucan? (: Iloveyou!
Author's Response: Iamsoinlovewithyoubecauseyou'reamazing. :) i'll update asap.
Date: 08/20/09 01:16 pm Title: Hesitation
okay, so this ending was amazingly amazing.
and i kind of think i need to marry you. ;)
oh, and i love you too. :D
Author's Response: we already are married. ;3 thanks. :)
Date: 08/19/09 05:30 pm Title: Hesitation
Yes, I love this, still.
Keep going, lovely :)
Author's Response: shaaaank youuuu. :)
Date: 08/19/09 05:17 pm Title: Hesitation
I just read everything you have so far and it's great! A few grammatical errors and wrong use of words, (ie: weather should have been whether) but other than that everything is flowing nicely dear. I hope you update this soon! =D
Author's Response: thank you. aha, yes, me and my errors. '-________-
Date: 08/19/09 04:50 pm Title: Hesitation
okay so, just to clear things out.
i DO LOVE YOU. to like, no end. believe me when i say this, i love you. and so do a lot of other people.
and you do not fail at updating, i've waited for longer with some other people. so it's no biggie. :]
and this chapter gave me mixed emotions. i felt pissed off at bill for being suck a total twat to carly. i felt sadness, for all bill's been through. i felt confused at why he loves his brother so much when all his brothers ever done to him was sadness. and i felt happy, knowing that you updated and i could read another one of your amazing chapters.
Author's Response: thank you, hun. i love you tooo, boo. :) :3
Date: 08/19/09 04:23 pm Title: Hesitation
lol, love you too n_n I like this, it's sick and twisted, and the very thing I need at this moment too. Didn't need to be crying, but it works I guess. Even though you never mentioned Bernie before, I pretty much fell in love with his character in the first few sentences, but now, he's not there... But I love Bill here, he's such an interesting character. :D I found a few typos, but nothing bad. :)
I'm rereading that part with Bernie, and I feel even sadder...but I still love it :) I love you, in all your sick and twistedness (which has to be something, considering you are writing this) it's great :) One thing I noticed, in this chapter you used "And" as a sentence starter a lot. I don't have anything against it, rather I think it adds to the story somehow. It's like your style for writing, and it just seems to make Bill and his thoughts/actions flow better. Do you realize you're doing it?
Author's Response: Yeah, I usually don't give background information about most of the characters I kill off because I don't really think it has much significance to the story line. But I may do on occasion. And yes, I have many errors. I completely forogot to spell check this one. :S And yes, I do realize that I start most of my sentences with the word "and" because - like you said - it's part of my writing style. Thanks for your review. :D
Date: 08/14/09 02:53 pm Title: Prologue
mars, i swear, we need to co-write soon!
Date: 08/03/09 02:46 pm Title: Prologue
but seriously, i think i know someone who can get you somewhere in the publishing world with this story.
Date: 08/03/09 02:43 pm Title: Juvenile
TWISTS and TURNS just make this story better and better.
i don't even know how thats fucking possible anymore.
Author's Response: ahhha, thanks. ;)
Date: 08/03/09 02:43 pm Title: Liability
i think if you really tired, you could get this story published, or something.
it's really that good.
Date: 08/03/09 02:21 pm Title: Juvenile
sick, but amazing.
poor bill. tomi = mean.
but anyway, post soon.
Author's Response: i knowww. :( thanks!
Date: 08/03/09 02:20 pm Title: Liability
aha, i love little old ladies.
they rock. wrinkles and all!