Reviewer: Hekki Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/22/09 05:58 pm Title: Dark Wings They Are Descending

The ending felt a little choppy, like you didn't know how to end it. So did the beginning too actually. Any part where you had to explain something was choppy. It flowed when you talked about Tom and how he was fading away and how Bill was trying the stop him. That part (meaning most of it) was good. Just the explanation parts about heaven and the wings and all that. It was just.. meh.

I was happy they were together in the end though. And you did a good job w/ the timing of the whole thing. The time skips were good.

good job.