Date: 02/08/09 01:56 am Title: Chapter 8
well, if you didnt say that you werent good at writing fighting scenes i dont think anyone would have really noticed, it was pretty good i have to say! i like how it was different and that it shows how relationships are never always perfect and nothing ever goes as planned, and then how they apologized to each other was nice too! i wanna see what happens at homecoming, this should be very interesting...
Date: 02/07/09 11:53 pm Title: Chapter 8
loved it, cant wait to read more!!
Date: 02/07/09 11:38 pm Title: Chapter 8
this is really cool. i like it.
Date: 02/07/09 09:39 pm Title: Chapter 8
that was good for a first attempt! it wasn't really a fight, as much as misunderstanding causing hurt feelings...
a fight would be more like a disagreement that causes anger...
but in my opinion it's harder to write the misunderstandings like that, so...KUDOS!!!
okay...rambling...great chapter!!!
Date: 02/07/09 09:10 pm Title: Chapter 8
for a first time that was really good. alhtough the tongue biting thing must have hurt... ow.... anyway greatchapter.
Date: 02/07/09 08:55 pm Title: Chapter 8
oh love your end notes I'm glad I'm one of your favorite reviewer's. it means a lot I always try to tell authors what I appreciate about their stories and writing. it nice that you want to reward little old me. well my e-mail address is the same as my username I'm so not orignal it just easier for me to remember if I use something I took forever just to create and that has meaning. so e-mail is mon1652@yahoo.com
well about your chapter I so thought you were going to have bill or tom beat up. since your chapter's notes in your intro said it was hard to write I expected a brutal fight. I'm so estatic that I was wrong for once. I should have seen that a romantic lovey dovey person like you would think that a little relationship fight would be hard to write. hey this is the first time since I have been reading your stories that the couple don't have a fairtale love. it great that you put some doubt in your character's mind about their relationship being perfect and even your readers. it makes them a better couple for being able to weather out the storm. they can learn and grow from mistakes not from being picture perfect couple.
I like that they had a misunderstanding. I felt sorry for them both thinking their relationship was over. it was a little fight nothing to breakup over.
I really like that you put a little more diamention in your story. it keeps the reader's on their toes and intrested with more drama and uncertainty.
so you did really well with your first fight scene...
Date: 02/07/09 08:54 pm Title: Chapter 8
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Date: 02/07/09 06:53 pm Title: Chapter 8
AWWWWWWWWWWWWWE!!!!!!
Date: 02/07/09 06:43 pm Title: Chapter 8
wow i mean is there any reason why he wuld but his tounge lol i liked it it was cute and sweet but yet sad with the crying :)
Date: 02/07/09 06:32 pm Title: Chapter 8
I was a litle suprised when
1. Tom hold Bill enought to hurt him withou realize
2.Bill bitted tom's tongue hard...didn't a little bite do the service?
Date: 02/07/09 04:02 pm Title: Chapter 8
sad. love it. ugh, i feel like i'm dyin...sry, i sick. ^_^ LOVE IT!!!!
d:)!!!
Date: 02/06/09 06:48 pm Title: Chapter 7
somethin bad is gonna happen, i can feel it.....but then it will end good! or they'll all die....i really hope they dont all die. that would be sad. one of my friends did that to me. they were mad that i guessed how they was gonna end this one story so they changed it to where every1 died...O_o
LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Date: 02/06/09 06:44 pm Title: Chapter 6
wooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!! d:)
Date: 02/06/09 06:38 pm Title: Chapter 5
Tom thrusts were becoming a little more lust filled as he chased his climax, he wanted it so bad, he could feel Bill swell against him and as he looked into those yes he felt Bill cum. ~there is a typo. u said yes instead of eyes. other then that it was good.
sexy hexy!!!!! d:)
Date: 02/06/09 11:38 am Title: Chapter 7
I say take up until homecoming, and then end it at homecoming night. But have Tom doing some romantic and special for Bill for Valentines Day ...
Date: 02/06/09 10:14 am Title: Chapter 7
wow that was a sweet chapter! please update again!
Date: 02/06/09 04:38 am Title: Chapter 7
Awwwwwwwe. Tomi comforting his baby. Fucking ADORABLE!!
I sure hope you've a method for your madness.
Date: 02/06/09 03:26 am Title: Chapter 7
so answer to question #1:
well since I'm one of the reviewer's who wanted homecoming I would be happy for the 5 chapters. and I would be ok with after valentine's day because the story won't be rushed and it will have added scenes I would appreciate.
and question #2:
so I think that georg is going to try and humiliate bill at the homecoming dance because he's a total homophobe and he will blame bill for turning his friend into one. then tom will protect bill. so then georg will turn on him and then beat up tom and bill or tom will beat up georg for everything he's done. I don't know just that georg's going to do something bad to the couple.
this short intermission gave me the idea of georg being a bad guy and trying to mess with the boys relationship. and that georg is not going to be friends with tom after all that's happen so far. bill needs to have more faith in tom and their relationship so I think in the following chapter's tom will prove his dedication to bill.
I really love this story and I guess drama is about to be unleashed because it's about time something really bad happens to the blissfully happy couple which I don't want to be thinking is going to happen but feel should to test the strength of their tie. my opinion and more see if I'm right I guess on saturday.
it nice that you would dedicated a story to you 100th review. you seem to respect your reader's perspective of your stories and their opinion's on your writing and stories. you are great at understanding your audience by observing their views. keep it up.