Date: 02/04/09 03:04 pm Title: Chapter 6
hella good sex scene ok weird ass shit here so theres to lesbos at my school names Amy and Brianna they go out tooo haha it so weird stuff thats all im good friends with them
Date: 02/04/09 01:29 pm Title: Chapter 6
awww i cried at the song part, that was sooo beautiful!! i absolutely loved this chapter, i cant wait read more!!
Date: 02/04/09 07:33 am Title: Chapter 6
Awwww, this was so sweet!! Them singing and playing together on the field made me smile hard!! I love it!! And the sex scene...HAWT!! *drools*
Date: 02/04/09 01:45 am Title: Chapter 6
0_0 Wait a minute please I need to calm down!
Oki I LOVE THIS!!! Bill and Tom are so cute. Give me more plese.
Date: 02/04/09 12:37 am Title: Chapter 6
I thought the song in the middle of the field was so creative and then they professed their love it was like only the two existed.
the love scene was good.
oh sad almost over well next is homecoming I guess.
Date: 02/03/09 11:55 pm Title: Chapter 6
well first off, hiya i'm Amber and i just read all of the chapters so far in a row and i loved those they were stellar (give or take a few spelling mistakes) and now to the sex scene. i loved it, you are great at writing it! whenever i read a really good sex scene i get good turns in my stomach and i got that now xD so i liked it, and i love how they were performing on the stage und everyone supports them! your story is different but being different is a good thing so yay for you i cannot wait until next time!
Date: 02/03/09 10:45 pm Title: Chapter 6
Awww that was sooo sweet.. i awwed out loud like a million times! Oh i love you for this and I'll be so sad to see it go!
Date: 02/03/09 10:28 pm Title: Chapter 6
FUCKIN' HELL!! First off, those two are so sweet together it makes me just want to SQUEE. :3 And the sex was - HAWT!!
Date: 02/03/09 09:46 pm Title: Chapter 1
AMAZING STORY!
I LOVE IT ALOT!
And I live in Florida too and I went to the concert too (:
Date: 02/03/09 09:31 pm Title: Chapter 6
oh my gosh. dude that was so cute. cried during the whole song part. that was so sweet and cute. god do they seel people like tom who do that? if so where can i get one? god i would cry everyday at that. oh my gosh that was so cute.
Date: 02/03/09 09:29 pm Title: Chapter 6
O.O that was amazing.
Date: 02/03/09 03:41 pm Title: Chapter 5
aww this is a really cute story, i cant wait to read more!!
Date: 02/01/09 08:32 pm Title: Chapter 5
O.o... that was something. Update soon
Date: 02/01/09 12:22 pm Title: Chapter 5
it's good. the relationship shure if moving fast. and i keep seeing typos and such. if you know what you want it to say, sometimes you totialy miss it, try to get a few proof readers to check your work, just so you don't miss these typos. it's easy to understand. and don't forget tenses. Try switching up your wording too, like "quickly realizing the boy under him was wearing no under wear." try "they boy writhing beneath him was lacking underwear. This made Tom all the more excited, as he stared down into those beautiful, lust filled chocolate eyes." the story line is good, but your writing can use a FEW tweaks, don't forget regular, preferably weekly updates to keep the reader interested! good luck and keep going!
Date: 02/01/09 11:10 am Title: Chapter 5
I loved it! The smexy, smexy scene at the end had me drooling! Bill have my mouth-watering at the beginning when you were describing him! Much luv! Plz update!!!
Date: 02/01/09 04:47 am Title: Chapter 5
i think it was quite good actually, i really love this story :D
Date: 02/01/09 12:12 am Title: Chapter 5
omg that was so hot!
...i might have a lady-boner.....uh-oh =O
*cold shower*
that was great! pleasey update soooooooooonzorz!!!
Date: 01/31/09 08:25 pm Title: Chapter 5
ooooooooooooo me likie please dont die if u die then who is going to updte
Date: 01/31/09 07:08 pm Title: Chapter 5
Sooooo hawt. FUCK!! *drool*
How could he not fall in love with Billa.