Date: 01/29/11 09:41 pm Title: The Secret Rules
i think this is a really good story, please update soon!!!!!!!!!!!! what does being one of 'them' mean? update soon!
Date: 10/31/10 10:00 am Title: The Secret Rules
please update soon!!!!!!!!! i really like this story. will tom/bill try to force her to become his girlfriend for a reason to have her in their group? UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Date: 12/11/09 05:36 pm Title: The Secret Rules
holy shit *GASPS AND FALLS OFF BED * this is fucking amazing pls update again *LOOKS WITH PUPPY DOG EYES THAT PROBABLY MAKE ME LOOK RETARDED XD*
Date: 12/11/09 05:35 pm Title: The Secret Rules
holy shit *GASPS AND FALLS OFF BED * this is fucking amazing pls update again *LOOKS WITH PUPPY DOG EYES THAT PROBABLY MAKE ME LOOK RETARDED XD*
Date: 12/11/09 05:33 pm Title: The Secret Rules
holy shit *GASPS AND FALLS OFF BED * this is fucking amazing pls update again *LOOKS WITH PUPPY DOG EYES THAT PROBABLY MAKE ME LOOK RETARDED XD*
Date: 07/30/09 07:34 pm Title: The Secret Rules
I'm actually kind of glad you said that because after I asked I got inspiration for a new story and I was freaking out what with my other stories plus this new one, I don't think I could have handled it while trying to finish your story, ha!
Date: 07/28/09 07:23 pm Title: The Secret Rules
Hey! I'm sorry to hear you're discontinuing your stories...I just have one question...I really like this story, and do you think it would be possible for me to finish the story for you? I could put you as a coauthor and give you cred for the idea and stuff...and I'll understand if you say no but I just thought I would ask.. Hope to hear from you soon!:)
Author's Response: Thanks for the offer, but I feel it's best to leave this story unfinished. Yes, a lot of people will want to know what's going to happen. I had the entire thing mapped out and it had a central spinal cord of events, but this story wouldn't actually be "I Don't Believe" unless I finished it. I'd neglected to work out the little parts, though, which is why I discontinued the story in the first place. If I felt that I couldn't do it justice even though I'm the creator, I doubt that anyone else could either. I'm sorry, but that's just the way it's going to be.
Date: 07/21/09 04:36 pm Title: The Secret Rules
Very good! 10 out of 10! haha keep going! I love the intro! It really catches your attention! XD
Date: 07/13/09 02:30 pm Title: The Secret Rules
Wow, I love it! This is well written and really interesting. The twist at the end is wonderful, and I can't wait to see what happens next!
Date: 07/12/09 11:20 am Title: The Secret Rules
woah! omg this was so good! i couldnt stop reading! please please please times a million can you upate soon? is there anyway you could let me know when you update, because i cant WAIT to read it! thanks a bunch and goood job on this chapter!
~cookie dough ^.^
Date: 06/18/09 09:05 pm Title: The Secret Rules
Hey...I really wanna know why you said on your profile that you would update this one most but you haven't updated in a really long time:( It makes me sad cuz this chapter had such a cliffhanger and this story is really good and it makes me wanna know what happens...
Date: 05/05/09 11:02 am Title: The Secret Rules
it was good!!
Date: 05/04/09 10:10 pm Title: The Secret Rules
OMFG!!!!! UPDATE, LIKE REALLY SOON!!! I'm in love with this story, i'm adding it to my favorites.
Date: 03/23/09 03:57 pm Title: The Secret Rules
i don't think i made it very clear how good your discripton at the beginning was, so i'm gonna say it again: it was VERY well done! and i do this because i think it's good to point when there's something bad, but also when there's something good. and after reading your response i also would like to say that if your purpose on this chapter was to let show how much eli was confused you also did very good at that - i guess i'm not just used to this kind of writing.
i don't expect you to be as good as some authors here; when i "critisise" i don't expect you to change the story or make you feel bad about your writting (and i'm sorry if i made you feel that way); i only expect you to explain the parts i didn't understand and you did that, so thank you,because now i understand some things better.
and i'm not gonna get pissed at you: this is your story after all! if you like the way things are going i think that should be enough for you to keep writting the way you do. but i can't help to express myself when something doesn't seem right to me :S especially because, like i said, i think this story has great potential; but, like you also said, you are not trying to win a prize and some things get in the way, like pressure and personal life - and i understand.
i'm very sorry for your lost and the thing about your dad (he's being a dick); i just hope things will get better for you :)
and don't take my criticism too serious! :3
you should do what feels good to you :P
Author's Response:
Whoo. *releases breath* I'm sorry for before; I really am not usually like that. I'm generally a nice person who gets her happy mood ruined easily, which is happening more frequently these days. But seriously, I'm always happy to get a constructive review. They're my personal favorites because they get me thinking. So as of right now, you're one of my favorite reviewers. ^_^
An "I LOVE THIS STORY!" can sometimes get old, but I appreciate all reviews. And thank you for complimenting the first part of the chapter; I was inspired by a new CD I just bought. Hehe.
Date: 03/23/09 02:59 pm Title: The Secret Rules
Aww, Bill's all frustrated and confused, how cute LOL! Surprised the main character isn't more confused and irrate due to Bill being, well Bill's char in this story. So now she's one of their little group? Oh-Hoo! what could this mean? Keep writing dear!
Date: 03/23/09 07:53 am Title: The Secret Rules
honestly, i didn't like this chapter too much :S
you began very well, describing eli's mother very thoroughly but when it came to bill's gang... i found some things very contradictory like when first you say that the third floor is forbiden and then you say the place is supposed to be secret; then bill drags eli there when he could just (if he has as much power and influence over school as you say) drag her into some random room and kick out whoever might have been there - and i'm saying this because to me it doesn't make much sence that eli enters bill's very strict gang just like that; and he doesn't seem the type to do someting so fool as reveal his secret place over just a talk. i think what you trying to do is put eli in bill's life somehow but this just seems forced and unlogic to me :S
then, when they were speaking about the thing that wasn't supposed to happen: first the gang has some morals - and that's why they have different punishements for girls - but then you say they hurt just students and not their family because they are afraid of getting in trouble with the police. i don't thing this last one counts much as morals.
maybe you were trying to say that they had morals but then wanted to reveal that it wasn't just morals behind the way they acted; i'm confused :S
Author's Response:
Well, thanks to the critique, and I appreciate you helping me. Just remember; unlike the extremely good authors on this site, I haven't had several years of experience with writing. I've only had a couple short months. I'm pretty much doing it for fun. My goal isn't to do amazingly well. Understand that I feel pressured to update, okay? I've got this little brother who rarely ever gives me any time to write since he's spoiled and always gets the computer when he wants. I'm not rich so my house only has one cmoputer. And I haven't exactly had much experience with morals or whatever.
I rewrote most of the story for YOU, alright? If you're not happy with the direction, then fine. It doesn't take me like, ONE hour to write a chapter like it does for most people. Each time I write something, I rewrite it so many times that it's never good. I realize that my stories aren't that great. I made Bill act like that on purpose. Maybe if this story was third person, you wouldn't be so confused since you'd see just how home life for Bill would be. But right now, Elizabeth is confused, therefore making the reader somewhat confused, too. Everything's got a reason behind it. And if I didn't plan things out too well since I can never get enough damn time, oh well. I'm not trying to win some award.
Before you get all pissed, listen to one thing; a person that inspired me to be involved in music has just died. This wasn't some celebrity, but a person that I actually knew. I'm kind of not happy right now and my fuse is pretty short. My brain can't think straight since I'm being forced to QUIT MUSIC the same week that MY INSPIRATION DIED. I'm depressed, okay? I've been really sad for the past week. I'm also really upset since my dad wants me to quit orchestra just 'cause he's too lazy to drive me to school most days of the week. So yeah, right now, my personal life just isn't so good. And that reflects on my sloppy writing. Now do you get it?
Date: 03/22/09 04:29 pm Title: The Secret Rules
I love your story, it totally kept me on the edge of my seat! i love the direction this story is going in. cliffhangers are torture.
Date: 03/22/09 03:03 pm Title: Introduction
LOL no prob. whenever i read something really good, i think my inner ADHD person comes out and i go all hyper!review :) lol
i hope you update soon. :) i'm reading Exchange Nightmare ATM. it's awsome! :D
jess xx.