Date: 02/24/09 08:45 pm Title: Lovesick Lavender
it's just like repo (:
very greusome. i like it.
i'm having a little trouble figuring out how bill is sick, though. maybe a little more of a background to your characters. (:
Author's Response: Thank you. Oh, and I didn't put MUCH information in this story because I tried to keep it sorta... mysterious? ._. But there's a sequel called 2 P.M I wrote that gives more background, if you'd like to read it :)
Date: 02/22/09 09:07 pm Title: Lovesick Lavender
that was different... it kind of felt like two separate ideas squashed into one yet somehow it works.
Author's Response: Thank you- I think? xD
Date: 02/12/09 09:37 pm Title: Lovesick Lavender
Neato! I liked this a lot! It's a little creepy, but in a good way! I can totally see Tom doing such things to keep his Billa, no matter how immoral or unethical. Loverly!
Author's Response: Haha, it's weird if you can picture him actually DOING it xD Don't worry, I can too! It feels sorta natural, in a strange way... :)
Date: 01/31/09 10:54 am Title: Lovesick Lavender
weird, and great :) ..and you can keep the cd since it's not that expensive in Denmark ;D
Author's Response: Ahh, you just made me want to go on a dangerous adventure to get to Denmark and retrieve a Zimmer483 CD xD It costs so much in the US since it's imported. Arghh. like 60 Dollars.
Date: 01/25/09 04:58 pm Title: Lovesick Lavender
*applauds* It's great to have more authors like you, freaky ideas, perfection.
It was lovely @_@
Author's Response: What can I say? Freaky is my specialty xD
Date: 01/22/09 09:04 pm Title: Lovesick Lavender
i love it i like how hes(aka tomi boy) is trying to keep billa boy alive
Author's Response: Tom's a keeper :) thanks for reviewing~
Date: 01/22/09 09:41 am Title: Lovesick Lavender
daww thats cute!
Author's Response: Thanks~ :)
Date: 01/22/09 01:00 am Title: Lovesick Lavender
hmmmmmm......
okay so i have some things to say
if it ends up being really long sorry
hehe that's just how i roll XD
I think it's very...different from anything people dare to write which makes it special to me =]
i secretly(not really a secret anymore since i'm telling it) have a mind that can take this in and exhale saying something like "that was an amazing read, more people should write like that"
so descriptive making the story much stronger than it would already be
it just makes me think of people that live lives in a sick or twisted way because that's what it takes
It's such an original plot that I'm almost literally jumping for joy
I think it kind of shows the simplicity of Bill's mind, reminding me of how I think Bill is like a little kid
The shopping was great especially how Bill recited the list at ease like he was just asking for a sandwich at a little resturant
The " I wasn't kidding about the payment part." was hilarious, and it was honestly hard not to crack a smile every few minutes while reading this
But I think I love it so much because it's sort of non-real reality if that makes any sense whatsoever, which it probably doesn't.
A bit OC.....okay honestly really OC but it's called FANFICTION NOT FANREALITY, real can be boring.
The thing that I think is sad is that peoples' minds won't always notice how good of a story it is because it's kind of twisted, but I'm glad I do!!!
I'm soooooo happy I stood up online and found this story, it was well worth my time!!!!
DON"T EVER STOP WRITING!!!
You're too good at it to just, let all that talent go to waste!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: You're right, reality is too boring, therefore I like to live in a world where Bill and Tom are completely in love with each other :) Don't you think Tomi looks really hot in a gask mask and a super tight white wifebeater? Yumm xD Thanks for the review darling, I love you!
Date: 01/21/09 06:56 pm Title: Lovesick Lavender
o.o
i wonder what was wrong with billa. it'd be cool if you could do a story explaining why they did this. like a prequel. it was really good too. :)
Author's Response: Haha, the sequel will actually explain things clearer :) It's not as horror filled though xD
Date: 01/21/09 04:28 pm Title: Lovesick Lavender
Amayzing, absolutly amayzing! im speech less
Author's Response: Thank you so much :)
Date: 01/20/09 04:40 pm Title: Lovesick Lavender
i loved it
Author's Response: i love YOU- for reviewing xD
Date: 01/20/09 02:02 pm Title: Lovesick Lavender
this is not lovelylexxi this is her friend...ur story is really freaking weird!!! I HATE RICH PEOPLE!!! THEY'RE TOO DAMN GREEDY "THE WORLD IS BIG ENOUGH FOR A MAN'S NEEDS BUT NOT BIG ENOUGH FOR A MAN'S GREED!!!!"-GHANDI-
Author's Response: Um, I'm not sure if 'weird' is used as a compliment or not, but I hope it is! Rich people can be okay if they shared their wealth for less fortunate people, but most of them can go die in a pool of cheap champagne xD
Date: 01/20/09 05:58 am Title: Lovesick Lavender
sad yet twisted.
:DDD
I love it!!
Hope to expect even more from you!
Author's Response: Of course, I'm working on a oneshot sequel to this :)
Date: 01/19/09 09:48 pm Title: Lovesick Lavender
I like this plot a lot. Somehow the image of Bill in a ladder looking through a shelf filled with human organs is kinda cool, gory but cool :)
Author's Response: Imagery- Wonderful in the writing world. I've decided, I'll probably make a oneshot SEQUEL instead of making this a multi-chaptered story :) Thanks for the review!
Date: 01/19/09 05:02 pm Title: Lovesick Lavender
yes and since i cant find any other way to contact you.... im going to tell you right here... you should write a sequel thats like a million chapters long.. ha... hugs
Author's Response: Haha, a million chappies is gonna take me eternity xD I hope everyone's sanity can last that long~
Date: 01/19/09 03:42 pm Title: Lovesick Lavender
i want zimmer... but seriously a little confusing i want to see like 200000000 chapters come on keep it goin. it seems like a kick ass plot line
Author's Response: Oh My, I need to make this a little less confusing xD Okay, uhh, so 3 people wants me to keep going?
Date: 01/19/09 03:29 pm Title: Lovesick Lavender
O_______o
Author's Response: xD
Date: 01/19/09 02:52 pm Title: Lovesick Lavender
I really really liked it, slightly creepy but very good. Continue, please ?^^
*puppy eyes*
Author's Response: I think that's like... two people who wants me to continue? IF YOU DO, TELL ME! I need to tally this, hah :) Thanks for the review~
Date: 01/19/09 04:29 am Title: Lovesick Lavender
i really like this. but it was too short. i think you could go somewhere with this. i think you should try to continue, if you can or even want to. or at least try to add some background info. anyways it was good. :)
Author's Response: Thanks :) If enough people think this should be continued, I might just do that!
Date: 01/18/09 08:24 pm Title: Lovesick Lavender
This is going to be long bare with me please.
I like your quote in this short story because I love From First to Last and it sums of their feelings for eachother in your stories.
Love the beginning where Bill just calls Tom for meager thing such as headphones breaking and making Tom think something dire happen to him. Bill has Tom wrap around his finger so bad its funny. Then he puts on the charm when Tom gets mad. Love the banter between the couple even through the harsh words and gestures to eachother you can tell how much they love eachother and they do anything for the other.
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“... Don’t be ashamed, it’s pure human desire to live as long as possible... "
Love this quote from Tom because he so right especially in this story everyone is playing god just to live long especially Bill and Tom.
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And the popsicle was a great touch making Bill a perfection of sweetness and naivete. Love the laundry list not suspicious at all. And his ramdom wants are halarious compared to what he came for they are so cute flowers and candy for him self so romantic. Bill's such a drama queen love that though.
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Love their insurance policy if the patient don't pay up. I guess they give a little back then they also take some back from them as well.
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“I’M AWAKE! I wasn’t sleeping I swear. I was thinking with my eyes closed.”
This quote reminds me of when I do my best thinking too in school or with boring family functions.
I really appreciate the massive, multi-shelved cabinet of internal organs they poses. I would so be telling my BF the same thing Bill said to Tom she has the same fascination with wanting to touch things because of curiosity. I love how professional Bill acts in their private infirmary so organized. I would also have the temptation to just look at all the intresting things Bill collects from the victims. This is my favorite scene in your story. And how they can find affectionate moments in the most bizarre places I don't know it makes me giggle with aww.
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2:00 a.m ritual sounds so horrible to go through for both of them but its a sacrifice they have to make to keep bill living. Everything they do is to contribute to their daily ritual. They make a living to just keep Bill alive good thing they can use their sadistic ways for money.
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The nurse costume sounds hot and kind of kinky in a way but I agree Bill would look sexy.
Bill lifted one bandaged hand and stroked Tom’s cheek.
“Never ever leave me. Please.”
Tom kissed the boy’s tender fingertips.
“I’ll follow you to Hell and back.”
Billa smile
Beautiful words at the end aww young love.
Ok so that's my analysis of the story I love this one so much I didn't realize what they were doing until the end. Thank you so much for dedication this one for my B-day gift its so perfect.
Also your story is my favorite because it has resemblance to two of my favorite movie directors movies in here. First Rob Zombie's House of 1000 Corpses came to mind about the mad scientist DR. Satan because tom reminds me of him in this but with your orginal twist. Second Steven King's Pet Sementary because Bill is like the baby so innocent looking so you don't see the harm or evil in him. He's so scary you don't see him as a serial killer. And because Bill is like the wife and Tom the husband with him going to hell to have him live. But you have great original character's in your stories that other on this website don't.
And in the words of the boys from Zimmer 483 dvd Tom wearing a whitebeater and a Gas Mask and Bill draped in pure white bandages is "sexy" "sexy".
Now to leave with parting quote from a musician that I think sums out Billa's and Tom's relationship and lifestyle
"I wanna live, I wanna love
But its a long hard road, out of hell"
-Marilyn Manson
sincerely with love your biggest fan
-Monique
Author's Response: I think you're simply amazing, I promise :) You spend so much time to analyze my stories, I couldn't be happier. I wasn't completely sure this story was all that great, but your words made me feel more confident. God, you just ROCK! There's so many ideas in my head for future stories that I hope you'll like. You just make me happy! :)