Date: 03/07/09 02:53 pm Title: Thank You
Oooh. Protective Tom is hot. And John better watch out because he's messing with the wrong guy. Tom will probably tear him to shreds if he even looks at Bill wrong. Hee!
Good character development in this chapter. I can really see the attraction between Tom and Bill. A lot of writers just say "Tom and Bill were attracted to each other." in their fics, right? And you can't see any kind of attraction at all. Just writing it isn't enough. It has to show between your main characters, you know? You're doing a good job with that. Keep up the great work.
I'm still noticing a tiny bit of redundancy in your work though. What I mean is... like you repeating stuff in each chapter. For example, you don't need to always remind us that Tom hates when Bill looks down. Every time it's happened so far, Tom has thought: I really hate that. See what I mean? That is overly repeating yourself when you don't need to. You could have told us that Tom hates that once and then the next time Bill did it, just had Tom bend down to catch his eye or tilt his head up without having Tom repeat the same thing over and over. If your fic is good, trust me, your readers will remember the little details such as that, as well as the big details. :DDD
Anyway, the plot is moving along nicely and I am headed off to part 6. Keep up the good work!
Date: 03/07/09 02:20 pm Title: Our Story
awsome, it was interesting, but too short for me :)
Author's Response: Thank you, the length worked for me it just had to end that way. :)
Date: 03/07/09 11:44 am Title: Our Story
you MOST writhe a sequal!!! YOU CANT STOP HERE?!?!? please...? (A)
Author's Response: A sequel? I wouldn't even know what to write about lol, what do you have in mind?
Date: 03/07/09 11:22 am Title: Our Story
ohhh dear... hot chocolate, kisses, hugs and lots of Bill for you! XD
Get well soon!^^
Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I love all your little gifts, especially Bill ;)
Date: 03/07/09 09:09 am Title: Our Story
Aww, the ending to this is so perfect and sweet, I love it! It also just makes me feel really happy that it ended like this because I'm feeling really emotional at the moment. I just finished watching a really sad episode of scrubs... *sniffle*
I don't know why but whenever I read a story about Tomi being seriously in love with someone it makes me feel all warm and happy inside and I can't get enough of it X3
I'm gonna miss getting updates for this, it's such a great story!
Author's Response: Aw thank you, I thought this ending was perfect for the story I'm glad you thought so too. Hm, I've never watched Scrubs before. Tom always seriously in love with Bill, :P :) I'm going to miss wrting this story, but it needed to end here. :)
Date: 03/07/09 08:36 am Title: Our Story
I'm so sad to see this go...but what a wonderful ending! There are so many emotions warring in me right now, so let me just say that this was a great story and I've enjoyed every moment of it. Thanks for such a great fic!
Author's Response: Aw you're welcome! And thank you, I felt really emotional too, I wanted to cry checking the completed box! I'll miss this story but I'm so proud of it, I'm glad you liked it :)
Date: 03/07/09 06:17 am Title: Our Story
Seriously. I just keep crying every time I read a new chapter of Eternity. I don't think I have tears anymore, thanks to you and this...this...WONDERFUL story. I'm high on fiction, again... What a lovely feeling. I hope we'll hear from you again, soon. In a form of a yet another masterpiece, eh? ;P
You know, it sounded sorta funny when you said that "here is this end of Eternity." I mean, you know, the END of ETERNITY? Haha, I'm crazy. A total nutcase due to this ending of this story.
Just a huge thank you, a humongous AWWWW and a *hug* to you for writing this ^^
Author's Response: Here is the end of Eternity lol, I did that on purpose of course, you got it :P Thank you so much for the compliments and I'm really glad you liked this story :) You're very welcome and thank you for the hug! :P *hugs*
Date: 03/07/09 05:25 am Title: Our Story
Awwwe. What a beautiful ending. :3
Author's Response: :) Thank you.
Date: 03/07/09 01:30 am Title: Our Story
marvelous fanfic. no other vampire fanfics can compare to what u have wrote. thanks for writing such a fun and enjoying story. i hope u continue writing stories as good as this one.
p.s. the last line of ur author's not was an oxymoron =^.^=
Author's Response: Lol, I know it was an oxymoron, that was kind of the point. :) But anyways! :P Thank you so much and I'm glad you liked the story, I was a little nervous about writing a vampire fic but well, you know how it turned out!
Date: 03/07/09 12:35 am Title: Our Story
One of my favorite stories ever. As I always said, I definately love the way you write, cause it feels like a movie when you describe the scenes. Can read it thousand times, it's always stunning. Amazing! You've made a loyal fan. ;D
Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! I have a fannnnn. :) It's 3:00am and I'm sick, but you just totally made me smile. :) Thanks for the support!
Date: 03/07/09 12:01 am Title: Our Story
that was so goood=]]]]]]] YAYYYYYYYY
Author's Response: :):):) Thank you!
Date: 03/06/09 11:58 pm Title: Our Story
Awww thank YOU for writing this story! Your chapter note at the top was beautiful "here is this end of Eternity." because it sounded like you meant eternity and not Eternity the story xD I'm glad they all got to stay together and are living a happy life :)
*hug*
Author's Response: You're very welcome! I thought that line was picture... the end of eternity. :) I'm a sucker for happy endings, always have been :) *hugs back*
Date: 03/06/09 11:52 pm Title: Our Story
Aww that was so sweet:) I love it. This was such a great story and it made me so happy. Thank you so much! Tom and Bill are so cute in this story and i love Emery as well. It's great that they were able to sty together and like I said. I love it:) I will miss it though.
Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much. I wanted them to stay together, all of them :) I'll miss writing it, but this was how it had to end :) Thanks again for reading.
Date: 03/06/09 11:40 pm Title: Our Story
I loved this story. I particularly liked Tom at the biggining, so disconnected from humanity, so puzzled by Bill. It's a great take on someone that has "lived" for so long. But, really the whole story is wonderful.
Thank you for such a good read!
Author's Response: Thank you :) Tom was my favourite character to write in this story and I loved developing him from chapter to chapter. I'm glad you enjoyed the story :)
Date: 03/06/09 11:40 pm Title: Our Story
I loved this story so so so so much the ending is perfekt in every way. and yeah.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you thought the ending was good :)
Date: 03/06/09 11:40 pm Title: Our Story
Amazing. Just awesome! I am actually glad you wrote this little conclusion. It sums up the story perfectly. I like how you used the word "eternity" several times. That was a good add-on. This story is definetly one of my all-time favorite stories. I am sure I will end up re-reading it over and over again. The whole story was written so perfectly it just blew my mind away. The detail and the descriptions. Tom's point of view, his thoughts and his devotion. You managed to make this one of the best stories on this website. I will definetly try to feature it again, since last time I wasn't so sucessful. I hope to see more stories from you, because your writing skills have to be used for good. I can read you stories forever! Good job! You should be very proud...
Author's Response: Thank you so much, I'm still emotional from writing and now I feel like crying again! This story took a lot out of me and I devoted so much time to it, I'm so happy to hear you loved it so much and to know that you think it's one the best story on this site makes me feel amazing. Thank you so so so much. I am going to continue to write, I'm not sure what's next but I'll never stop. :)
Date: 03/04/09 09:31 pm Title: No Where We Need To Be
Other than away from the light perhaps?
I'm sorry Alex and Becca died but mommy and Alan had it coming, and I'm pretty happy Bill proved them wrong.
This isn't the end right? You need a nother wrap up chapter or two right? Maybe just a relocation chapter/happy new life thing, and maybe something to make Emery happy?
Author's Response: It's not finished, probably another chapter or two. What did your first line mean?
Date: 03/04/09 05:14 pm Title: No Where We Need To Be
oh god bills a damn beast!! i was like 0.o scary much? lol but at the same time very sexy and when tom killed his mama i was like WOOT WOOT
Author's Response: Haha :) Tom had to be the one to do it! Bill is pretty sexy when he's scary lol.
Date: 03/04/09 11:26 am Title: Never Forget
You're welcome! I'll be waitng...muahaha... *creepy stalker grin*
Date: 03/04/09 05:34 am Title: No Where We Need To Be
I love this fic so much!! Your detail astounds me, and I just adore the interaction between the characters. Love love love LOVE it!!
Author's Response: Aw thank you so much! :):)