Date: 01/16/09 04:42 am Title: Chapter 1
So it's not a oneshot? Thank goodness! You've done a great thing by deciding to post this here. I would love to read more like this from you!
Author's Response: Oh thank you!
Date: 01/16/09 01:50 am Title: Chapter 1
You have to post the rest. Have to. I can't tell you what a barren wasteland this place can be for Billshido in which Bushido is, you know... Bushido. Or even just a character. MOAR. PLEASE.
I'll choose not to respond to the purposely embarrassing Bill part, because this review would be pages, lol.
But seriously, more. You can't just keep ten of those things to yourself.
*_*
Author's Response: Eeek! I am grinning to myself like a lunatic right now because of your review - I am so glad that you liked it. I'm obsessed with pretty much everything that you write, so your review means A LOT. I have started bridging the different scenes together, and rereading them I think (or at least hope) that Bushido's character stays his sexy self throughout them all so hopefully they'll meet your approval:). Thank you!
Date: 01/16/09 01:34 am Title: Chapter 1
I've sat here for a moment, trying to figure out what to say, so I'll make it short and to the point.
Holy crap, woman, you've got talent.
I think I appreciated more than anything that you nailed down a characterization and you stuck with it, which is such a wonderful breath of fresh air.
Bill and Bushido were multi layered, flawed and above all interesting. What they said to each other and how they looked at each other cackled with energy and real emotion, and lust.
Yummy.
I'm always glad to see someone foray into Billshido, and with the wonderful splash you've made, I really hope you'll whip those ten other scenes together and post them, because while I would be satisfied that this was done, it didn't feel done, not by a long shot.
Author's Response: When I saw your review I squealed like a five-year-old (or like a pig, but the former makes me sound not quite as unattractive so let's just stick with that). You have no idea how much your kind words mean, and being told that I have talent from such an outstanding writer makes me feel soooo much less unsure about my story telling skills. It is really important to me that my characters have consistent and dynamic personalities, and that you thought they did is just...wow. Thank you so much!
Date: 01/16/09 01:32 am Title: Chapter 1
Yes. Whether it's one cohesive story or ten oneshots, I don't care, I would love to see more from you.
The review you left for my story was so well written, I was surprised to see that you hadn't posted anything on the site. And then I saw this tonight and couldn't click into it fast enough.
I think you and I are quite opposite in that you leave wonderful reviews less often and I am not great at reviews, though I review often. I just want to leave you a few words.
I really enjoyed this starting out with Bushido watching Bill. It's hard, I think, for any mortal to take his/her eyes off of Bill, and of course, Bushido is nothing if not all man. A real man, not just the man we see in videos. That point really hit home again and again throughout the story. He wants to play it cool, tries so hard, but finds himself failing. I enjoyed his struggle to control himself, and I enjoyed even more watching him lose that control.
Watching him get turned around and finding himself actually wanting to get with Bill again instead of it just being about publicity did not surprise me, because it's pretty common in Billshido. However, it was nicely done, very well written, and you definitely left the door open to seamlessly add more to this story. I sincerely hope you will.
Author's Response: Thank you!rnrnI am much more confident writing reviews than I am writing stories haha. With reviews I just record my observations, but with fiction I have to write dialogue and plot and choose how much description is needed...it's way more complex and rather daunting. That's why I am always so impressed with people who are so good at it (Like you :))rnrnI'm so glad that you understood how I was trying to make Bushido come across. He is naturally masculine, but he feels the need to almost prove how manly he is and he exaggerates the characteristic in accordance with society's expectations of his personality. Who better than Bill to break through the partially real, partially manufactured barrier and shake his confidence and control? In my opinion, at least, no one :)rn
Date: 01/16/09 12:49 am Title: Chapter 1
I really, really liked this. You did a fantastic job and I will be looking forward to any other Billshido you post in the future :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much!