Dayyum. Now that's a wonderful vision to have in my mind to wake me up. Hmm. I wish I could be in that class. Wow. *salivates* :P ^^

Author's Response: Yeah, seriously! Lucky bastard Tom!

I'm going to be honest, this chapter didn't do much for me.

Not because it was so short, although that is also a factor, but because nothing really happened. When you have really short chapters, each chapter has to...well move the story along. In which case this chapter didn't really do that at all. Most of your chapters so far have a lot of Bill/Tom interaction, so when this one didn't really have that, it just seemed as if the momentum of the story stalled. It's fine if Tom and Bill have no interaction from time to time, but if most of your chapters rely on that--and then you have a chapter that doesn't--you've got to really put something there happening that grabs the reader's interest. The stuff that went on in this chapter, to me, is the kind of filler stuff that goes on in between key scenes in your fic--within one chapter or something. Like chapter 5 would have started with the above events, but then something more would have happened. Most likely involving character development etc. Five chapters in, and while I LOVE the sexual tension, it's now at the point where they've either got to fuck or something else needs to happen to grab my interest--like finding out what drives Bill's obvious nympho tendencies. (There's something deeper under the surface, I'm sure, but so far not even a hint of what it could be.) Otherwise it's like Bill and Tom are in this extended form of foreplay that is rapidly becoming more and more painful without any sign of release coming. Drawing out the UST between characters is welcomed so long as there is other stuff in the plot that is keeping your readers interested.

It also doesn't help when I see in author's notes stuff like: "I may lose interest in this if my updating grows level with my notes." That's not the first time I've seen that in fandom and it just screams to me that I should never have gotten involved in your story to begin with because it means you tend to be a flaky writer, and abandon stories at whim.

Nobody likes an abandoned story, right? They like it even less when the author implies five chapters in that the story could be abandoned if they lose interest. It honestly all around sucks, and it makes your readers wonder why they are investing their time and energy into your fic. Even if that's how you feel, it's a good idea to keep those doubts to yourself in the future so that there's a sense of confidence behind your work. I can understand you posting an author's note saying that you feel you've lost the plot in your story and you want to take time to regroup etc. I'd even applaud you for your honesty b/c shit like that happens. But to say you might lose interest and all because you may run out of story notes is just not cool. If you don't care about your fic, why should we?

I am not trying to be a bitch here, I'm just trying to point out a little reasoning. It may be that you don't intend to drop your story at all. And that's wonderful. I think your story is great. You are a good writer and your story is not filled with mistake after mistake that detracts from the reading. That's awesome. The only thing I feel is missing is more character development, but I expect that is coming. I do hope you continue this fic because it has potential to another B/T success.

Just leave all those self doubts at the door next time. A suggestion would be to slow down and take your time writing this. No one is forcing you to chuck the chapters out with such speed. I'd rather you take your time and still ENJOY your story as your writing it, rather than you speeding up and starting to hate everything about it. Like you said, you're growing near to the end of your notes. Why don't you stop for a bit, outline the entire fic and where you want the plot to go/characters to accomplish, and then you'll have ALL your notes and you can write at your leisure? That's the best way to get your story out. A lot of writers make it up as they go along and that is where trouble can develop.

Best of luck to you and I hope to see more from you on this--and on other fics--in the future. :D

Author's Response: Wow, points for delievering the longest review I have ever recieved. o_0 Okay... *dives in*rnYeah, I know, this chapter didn't have a lot going on in it, it's a set up for later chapters in which Bill's modelling is referenced or important to what's going on. Next chapter has interaction between them BECAUSE of what occurred in this chapter. I considered sticking the two together, which I probably should have, but ch5 is kind of lighthearted, and ch6 is a little less so, because Tom really has to start coming to terms with his changing sexuality. I know we haven't had a lot of info from Bill's side, mostly because I've been writing this from Tom's perspective. We actually don't get Bill's perspective until ch8, but I was considering changing it to ch6, because ch6 is sickeningly short, I could slide it in fairly easily, and I already got yelled at for the shortness of this one. ^_^ And yeah, this needs craploads of character developement, I know that, but at the moment, Bill is a very shallow chracter. He's gonna take a little time to crack, if I want to do it right. Now, as for abandoning my story, with this one, I actually think that it is very unlikely. But I think you're misunderstanding what I was saying. The entire story is already planned out, I've got it outlined. What I was saying was that, I write every chapter out longhand, and I was worried about it catching up and me not updating very often. I didn't say I would drop this story, there are too many people now who I know in real life who would strangle me, heh heh. And I have come to the conclusion that I must write everyday, or I really WILL lose interest in the story, which would piss off a lot of people, including myself, haha. Once I miss a day, I will keep putting off going back to it. I wanted to give myself more time, because I was falling into the habit of updating daily, and I knew some readers were getting used to it, and I wouldn't be able to keep it up. I wanted to explain my actions to them. But I want to make it clear, while this story may SEEM like it's thought up at random and is going nowhere, I really do have the whole thing planned out. ^_^; I don't intend to drop it, but I don't want to be updating it only once every couple months, which may happen if my interest fades. Though I can most certainly understand why reading an author's note like that would piss you off. ^_^; Thanks for taking the time to write that long- ass review, I'll try to keep it all running smoothly.

Well, I definitely have no objections to SluttyBill, it's such a nice change to a WeakBill! Your foodplay was just fine :]

Author's Response: Yeah, like the whiny, clingy Bill? I mean, he's... okay, bit sometimes you want a confident, sexy, knows- what- he- wants- and- is- not- afraid- to- go- after- it kind of Bill. And that is SluttyBill. XP And yay, I was kinda nervous about the foodplay.

love it!

Author's Response: Yay!

no, i like slutty billa! d:)

Author's Response: Well, that's good to know, then. ^_^

Imm not that bad I mean the food playing thing :D and I think absouletely the same he will :D

Author's Response: I tried my best, I didn't want it to get unmanageable and beyond what Tom is ready for. Have to break him down, mwahahahaha... And yes. He will. XP

love it! update soon!

Author's Response: Probably update tonight, if I'm not lazy~

I loved this :]

Author's Response: ^_^ That makes me happy.

lol i like the word hypnoeyes ^_^ but ehh i dont usually read chapters that have foodplay but i thought it was ok

Author's Response: Yeah, foodplay can get... weird. o_0 I tried to keep it fairly conservative, which makes sense, since Tom isn't ready for anything crazy anyway, haha.

I so adore slutty bill I know their some past that's driven him to seducing men.

in this chapter I was so cheering on bill with at least coping a feel. I was like yeah than awww so close darn.
I don't know why but I sympathize with bill so much in this story. I just want him to open up to tom in so many ways. and I want him to succeed in seducing tom so bad but I think its so wrong of me. but I know tom will stop bill wild ways and make him calm down and only let slutty bill come out and play with tomi only.

Author's Response: Of course there is. Not sure how I'm gonna fit it in there, though... And yeah, you just essentially summarized the rest of the story. XD I guess you don't need to read it now. ._.;