Date: 02/17/09 12:51 pm Title: Game Over?
Oi! yes Oi! Oh my oi! Tom finally gave in! But now there's another problem... They secretly love each other.. Right? And now you have to find out if they ever will come to the conclusion, THAT THEY DO!!!!
Author's Response: XD Yes, they do, but Bill is in denial, and Tom thinks Bill doesn't love him. MISA CAUSES AGONY AND STRIFE, MWAHAHAHA!!!
Date: 02/17/09 11:18 am Title: Game Over?
OMFG. It better not be the end!! I want this story to go on & on because it's amazing! The dialogue during the sex scene is hilarious, so many great lines, this is my fav though:
“I don't know, did you have a dick transplant with an elephant?”
The end of the chapter is so charged with emotion, you did an awesome job at it.
I can't feel bad for Bill though, cos well, 'you made your bed now lie in it', the devil in me wants him to sufffffer more lol. Poor Tom, he should go get a gf that'll teach Bill to play games hahaha.
Well, I can't wait till the next chapter, I wanna find out what happens next of course!!
Keep up the great work=)
Author's Response: XD Yeah, I like that line. XP Well, the devil in you shall be pleased with the next chapter, then. >:3
Date: 02/17/09 10:44 am Title: Game Over?
i thought this chapter was awesome!! but i feel a little bad for bill he seems so broken
Author's Response: They both are. But I will abuse Bill further in the next chapter. Poor baby... *gives Bill a hug*
Date: 02/17/09 10:10 am Title: Game Over?
It was great!
Author's Response: Thank you! ^_^
Date: 02/17/09 10:02 am Title: Game Over?
this is really good, please don't end this storty, keep it up for ever!!!!!
I'm in love with this
Author's Response: Well, I can't keep it up FOREVER... But I CAN write you a sequel when I finish this one. XD If you're interested.
Date: 02/17/09 09:50 am Title: Game Over?
Oh God, I'm crying... I've never cried while reading a story before but this was just so intense. I love this story and you =D
Author's Response: Cruel as it sounds, I'm pleased that I made you cry. >:D 'Cause it means I did a good job. XP
Date: 02/17/09 09:00 am Title: Game Over?
This is definitely not the end! I've been following this story since you posted your first chapter but I just haven't had the energy (or inspiration) to write any reviews. Sorry for that!
You can probably quess that I'm about to say that I LOVE THIS STORY =:D I'm sure you've heard that so many times already.
To specify my comment I'd like to say that your Bill character is so well build. For a reader it's quite easy to deduce what he's thinking and still understand that from (for example) Tom's pov you couldn't see what goes through Bill's head! It's very professional to be able to create a character like that :) On the other hand, your Tom (sounds weird, but I'm sure you understand I mean the character :DD) is a bit unclear (but this is only my opinion!). I haven't been able to form any kind of personality for him, so I'd really love it if you could somehow focus on how you'd like him to be in the story. And then make him more realistic and not just a shell. (I think one of the main reasons he's so "blurry" is that this story is written in Bill's pov, but I think you could still try it :) You're very talented writer so it won't be mission impossible for you!)
That's probably all I wanted to say about the story so far. For the future chaps and plot I'd like to say what I'd love to read here! (It doesn't mean you'd have to write anything I say to please me :D No matter what you write I'd still love the story!) Ofcourse I wish a happy ending but before that it would be so awsome (and hot!) to see a jealous Bill ;)
And that's all I have to say!!
Once again, thank you for awsome story! I'm impatiently waiting for the next chapter! :D
With love,
Gry
(P.S. I hope this review made any sense to you! I'm not even sure myself what I wrote... :D)
Author's Response: It's okay! I'm just glad you decided to post one now! ^_^ Hm, Tom is unclear? I can see what you mean, because Bill is so interesting, I've kinda been ignoring Tom... >< I'll have to pay more attention to him. Jealous Bill? Well, we do get a jealous Tom in a few chapters, but no jealous Bill for this story, since he refuses to admit he's totally head-over-heels for Tom. HOWEVER, do not despair! There is a sequel planned, and if people want me to post it, I probably will. And the sequel DOES have jealous Bill. Seriously, jealous Bill to the MAX. XD
Date: 02/17/09 08:45 am Title: Game Over?
Man that was sad =0 Really poor, poor Tomi. Makes me wanna punch Bill hard.
And just so you know, I love the way you are writing. It really msde me feel the way Tom did.
Please write more soon? =)
Author's Response: Bill needs punching. I'll make him get smacked into a wall, will that do? XD Glad you love the way I'm writing it, I like emotional stuff like this.
Date: 02/17/09 08:26 am Title: Game Over?
oeeeeehhh! .. bill is such a bitch!~
i want moreeee o_×
Author's Response: He kinda is. XD More soooooooon! Like, today! XD
Date: 02/17/09 08:23 am Title: Game Over?
I don't know if I would want to pity Bill or pull his hair out, so I am so looking forward to the next chappie..I want to understand him..so bad..
Author's Response: I kinda want to do both. XD Yeah, Bill isn't too easy to understand, he's kinda... I don't know. Just has odd thought processes, I guess.
Date: 02/17/09 07:59 am Title: Game Over?
im almost crying.. almost!
its soooo good, dont wait so long, ive been waiting for this, im glad bill realized he love Tom :M good job girl!
Author's Response: Almost? Damn, I tried. XD Sorry for the wait, next one up really soon, don't worry! Actually, Bill hasn't realized it, 'cause he's totally in denial. But Tom has realized that he loves Bill, so... ^_^;
Date: 02/17/09 07:34 am Title: Game Over?
hi! Ok ill write a proper Review when im on my Computer caus my phone has gone german somehow
Anyway i love where this Störy igoing and thw whole slutty bill character
Also about your Rant at the beginning its not bitchy if someone dedicates a chapter to you you have to Review or let them know it means something to you! Btw how do you get a fic featured?
Wow this turned Into a proper Review
Much love and keep writing remember i will haunt you till the Next chapter is Posted!
xXx
Author's Response: XD You can submit a fic for featuring using the 'Feature a Fic' link located at the top of the page. And I'll post the next chapter very soon! Like, today. XD
Date: 02/17/09 05:59 am Title: Game Over?
Can't write a sex scene to s- Jesus! You should see the state I am in now o.O
Ah, the torture continues. Yet. Still. Dammit. First it was the sexual suspense and now the...the...emotional suspense. Gah, this is so killing me! I just have to pray I'll survive the read the ultimate end of this story. Some day, some way...
Hmm, can't say more. I really am addicted to this.
Author's Response: Hehe, Misa likes conflict and suspense and tension. Hold out 'til the end, trust me, you won't regret it. I hope. XD
Date: 02/17/09 05:49 am Title: Game Over?
Billa.... :(
I almost started crying at the end... He's so stupid.
How can't he see what he feels? Ah, of course. He hasn't feel that before, and he don't know what it is. He does not know what love feels like.
Yeah, I understand him. But he's still being one of the most stupid people in the world right now.
How could he hurt Tom like that? Why, why did he do that if he knew it torn him apart? And Tom too.
Tom... I wonder what did he feel... It must be pretty hard to see that the person you like turns out to be a cruel liar. Well.. Bill isn't like this in real, but almost. He didn't tell Tom what he felt, but he told what he usually felt over the people he had used.
It makes me sad to see both boys in that state; disappointment, sadness... and all this... :(
Yeah. But I totally liked the sex scene. I think it was completely well-written. :)
Now please, update soon, hun. I really wanna see if they are gonna kill each other in the next chap, or not. :D
Loved it, thanks for the chap! ^
Author's Response: He is, he's really dense, and it makes for lots of drama. XD He's an idiot who refuses to accept the situation, he's in more denial than Tom was about his sexuality. But yeah, poor Tom, that's harsh, to put it lightly. I'm glad you liked the sex scene, I tried really hard to make it good! I just finished the next chapter and will post it in a few minutes. And funny you should say about killing each other...
Date: 02/17/09 05:48 am Title: Game Over?
Wtf I cried D': ♥
Author's Response: Did you really cry? If you did, that makes you the 3rd one. (Who's told me anyway) Yes, I'm on a roll!
Date: 02/17/09 04:54 am Title: Game Over?
Butbut D:
When I saw the title chapter I was like "OMG IF THIS IS OVER I'LL KILL HER!" LOOOL XD
I was sooo happy when I saw you had responded to my review cause that meant you had updated this. I really want you to get this story featured, but I suck at writing just what I think about a story and why they deserve it, cause... well describing things like that just isn't my thing xD
I tried, but I failed. All I could come up with was "oh it's so perfect, blahblahblah, so amazing" Lol xD
But either way, I'm gonna try out a bit, and see if I'm able to describe this fic good enough to get it featured :3
You're like a God to me. Lol xD
Author's Response: XD I've been waiting to pull that fake ending practically since I began this story. XP And thanks for making the effort to get this featured, it means a lot to me. ^_^
Date: 02/17/09 03:42 am Title: Game Over?
omg at first i thought you were serious about it being the end :O
but i'm sorry you're having such a shitty week :/
but this chapter really made me want to slap the crap out of bill -.- poor tom ;-;
Author's Response: Haha, psyched you out, did I? No, I couldn't do that to you guys. Besides, that ending would be epically depressing. XD Bill really should probably be slapped...
Date: 02/17/09 03:14 am Title: Game Over?
MOre! >.< I wonder how Tom is gon a payback Bill, if he's gonna do that...
Please update soon! *begs*
Author's Response: He's not going to. XP What he does end up doing is a lot better, in my opinion...
Date: 02/17/09 02:44 am Title: Game Over?
YOU can't write a sex scene?! you should see my attempts! they don't even get put up on the website!!! that scene was great! compared to that, my shit would seem like an eight year old who bearely knows anything about sex itself trying to write a sex scene!
okay, babeling aside, great chapter Misa!
btw, ive been meaning to ask, is "Misa Sugar" a reference to death note? if it is, yay! i like death note! if it isn't where the hell did you get that name from?
Author's Response: XD I know the feeling. This is my first *official* attempt, but a while ago I tried writing one with Bill on top, just for kicks... It was a bloody nightmare. I was unable to get past the first few sentences, Bill simply wouldn't cooperate. And yes, it is a Death Note reference! XD 'Cause I'm awesome like that. XD Kidding.
Date: 02/17/09 02:30 am Title: Game Over?
>_< I've been so busy and always start to feature this story but end up having to do something. Forgive me? And I don't get why Bill is acting so heartless...he will regret this. Poor Tomi... ;_;
Author's Response: It's no big deal, don't worry about it. ^_^ Bill's acting heartless because he refuses to accept that he actually has a heart. XD And he's already regretting it, I'm sure.