Date: 06/26/25 03:52 am Title: Chapter 1
I am a Chinese fan who came a bit late. Discovering this website is the happiest thing for me in recent years. I used to use bookmarking as commenting. I must say that I have read and bookmarked this story. Reading this story is undoubtedly a pleasure! Today I plan to leave a comment. Thank you for your story. You are an amazing writer.
Date: 06/18/11 12:12 pm Title: Chapter 1
A really good story! Nice job!
Date: 01/06/09 08:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
AWW!!! CUTE! It was awesome!
Date: 01/06/09 05:50 pm Title: Chapter 1
Sweet. Sexy. Delicious!! Hubba-hubba!!!!
Date: 01/06/09 08:15 am Title: Chapter 1
I loved it :D Though I like TopBill better xD He still be nice and kinky :)
xx Chi ^^
Date: 01/05/09 06:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
this was sweet but you didn't mention them returning to their room. I wasn't nutty about the last sentece either but otherwise it was good.
Date: 01/05/09 04:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
YES! Finally someone else wrote about the vacation with the new hair. :) I loved it, really sweet and cute.
Date: 01/05/09 03:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
I loved it. It was sweet and beautiful, and the story was just perfect however I think you should have a chat with your beta because there were still several mistakes in there. You put 'quit' instead of quiet more than once, at least one possessive apostrophe was missing, you put 'star' instead of stare, wonder instead of 'wander', 'to' instead of too, 'were' instead of we're, 'and always' instead of 'as always', 'intertwined' instead of entwined, 'sitting' instead of setting and 'there' instead of they're
I also think, 'An hour and some stupid show later' would sound better than 'An hour later and some stupid show later'. Your beta-reader is supposed to correct these problems, so I do not think she is doing you credit here.
Other than that I absolutely loved it. I adore your one-shots, honey and this one was awesome. Please don't be offended by my criticism. It was really good. :)