Date: 07/23/10 11:31 am Title: Chapter Nine
ok. WOAH! i was just like looking for something to pass the time and then i found this beyond awesome fic. WOAH! its completely more than awesome! thanks so much for writing it! i love how the characters and the whole storyline is soo well developed
Author's Response: Aww yay, I'm very glad you liked it! Your review means a lot to me! Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: 06/14/10 07:40 pm Title: Chapter Six
gott, i simply loved the way u wrote the twins relationship in here, i can only imagine them being that way in real life. u know, they trusting completely the other and when feeling down knowing the other will be right there with them... it was simply beautiful.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! I'm glad you enjoyed the way I wrote the twins! I wanted to give them a close relationship because I feel they would probably share a close and caring one in real life!
Date: 06/02/10 09:52 am Title: Chapter Nine
Awwww this was soooo cute!! Loved each second of it!! ^^
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Date: 09/19/09 05:19 am Title: Chapter Nine
I might be on the verge of a very dangerous flu (I can feel it, I might wake up tomorrow either feeling really awesome or really sick),but sickness or not, this story really cheered me up from my impending doom of toilet hugging and trying to breathe whilst talking when you have a sore throat and a runny nose.
This has to be my second Torg I've read, ever, and I've been on this site since '07.
And I really enjoyed. I like how you'd not only described Tom's emotions, but everyone else. I like how you made Tom wait. I like how it ended by putting a warm feeling in my tummy (almost making me think that maybe tomorrow, I won't wake up sick).
Thank you for writing this fantastic story.
Author's Response: While I'm sorry to hear that you're not feeling well (and I hope you feel better and get well, I honestly do!), it makes me feel very honored that you enjoyed my story! I'm glad you understood much of what I was trying to get at with my characters and their emotions and thank you for thinking it was fantastic!
Date: 07/17/09 05:42 pm Title: Chapter Nine
Damn good, damn good.
So well developed. I would
love to see a progression
of Georg and Tom from here.
Wonderful nonetheless. (;
Author's Response: I am very glad you enjoyed my story and thought it was well-developed! Thanks for your review!
Date: 07/16/09 12:09 pm Title: Chapter Nine
Ok I’m going to give you constructive criticism. It’s good for you to get solid feed back. If you don’t want to hear it you can delete it or ignore it or whatever. But I’m going to give it to you. And I’m going to be honest.
I wanted to let you know that it was an ok story and ok writing. I wouldn’t give you constructive criticism if I didn’t think you were worth my time. You have potential so I wanted to give you some feed back that I hope might help.
This was not the greatest Torg I’ve ever read in fact it was in the lower range of stories I’ve read. This said I don’t usually finish stories that I don’t deem great, so in a way that’s so of, not very nice, kind of, complement.
I said it before but the parenthesizes ie the () notes in the story were a bit of a cop out. Your job as the author is to tell us the story not write notes within the story to give us cues. You job is to explain it to us to we know what’s going out without notes or direction.
Your dialogue was hit or miss. Some of it was really good, funny, accurate, made sense for the story, made sense for the character. Some of it was crap. Some of it sounded off or juvenile or wrong for the character or something a boy wouldn’t say. Some of the confessions were too perfect, they shared too much, said too much too soon. Sometime it was right and was funny and flowed really nicely. I tried to let you know when it was bad and when it was good.
You timing and your flow was sometimes on and sometimes off. Flow is difficult and sometimes it take a rewrite or a second look to realize that it’s off. I noticed it most when a piece of vital information was put in a beat too late or wasn’t put in at all. A lot of times I would have just wanted a reordering of the paragraphs to make it flow better. There were times when I really wanted a little more background before a character answered a remark, something that would help set up for the remark. This can be a bit of a mine field in that if you put too much background in it gets wordy. But you beta should catch that and say oops too much.
The story line was interesting which is why I kept reading. But sometimes it drug because of the actions of the character which seemed out of place or the dialogue.
Your character development for Tom was great. Bill was off and often a characterization of himself. Georg was kind of flat with moment of deep emotion. And Gustav was a puppet, I really don’t think he’d be THAT stupid. Where was anyone else? It was like there were in a TH bubble with the exception of groupies who were characterizations of the sluttiest women I’ve never met. Where was Jost? Or Tobi? Or Saki? They didn’t need big parts but they would surely interact with the band at some point or other.
I hope some of this helps and that you do understand that I’m trying to be polite and helpful and genuine.
Author's Response: I respect your help and do value your opinion - surprisingly enough I was not annoyed by your comment like I feared I might be. I can understand the issues you had with my story and I can also say that I'm proud of it but I'm aware that it has its faults. However I will be taking your advice lightly - I checked on your profile to see what type of a reviewer you are and it seems like you only enjoy reading smut (which this story wasn't supposed to be about; I noticed that when you left reviews your positive comments were only for scenes where something sexual happened/was hinted at) and you seem to know which authors to praise (the mods/admins). Granted I am not up to their writing level but it annoys me greatly when some reviewers talk down good or average stories just because they aren't up to par with those written by the people running the website. The use of () was not a cop-out against writing emotions and I chose not to use other Tokio Hotel staff members. But once again thank you for your criticism and I'm glad you were polite.
Date: 07/16/09 11:42 am Title: Chapter Eight
One of them looks straight at him and she starts screaming, shrieking, “Tom! I love you! Fuck me!” at the top of her lungs. Bill hears it and looks at Tom, frowning slightly. - lol
Gustav looks angry, his arms crossed and his drumsticks clenched between tight fists. Tom feels bad for Gustav, but he chose to play the drums so it’s his fault that he has to hide in the back all the time and get ignored by their fans. - lol
Georg looks back over at Tom and nods his head towards Bill. Tom’s face burns with heat as his cheeks flush a deep red; he’d been so lost in thought that he hadn’t realized Bill’s been waiting for him to start the guitar on the next song. – lol
Tom waits until after the second chorus when he makes his move. Carefully making sure that wires, chords, or a dancing Bill are not in his way, he strides as confidently as he can across the stage and stands directly in front of Georg. – Their sets are choreographed.
“This isn’t a good time,” Georg says through gritted teeth. “They might be able to hear us.” – lol not the best time at all!
“I made my decision awhile ago. I’ll tell you when I feel like it.” – lol awesome.
Tom knows he shouldn’t keep chasing after Georg. When Georg was ready he would come to him. – it’s hard to sit and wait when you are usually the aggressor.
Georg steps in, face down and his hands shoved in the pockets of his jeans. He leans against the wall and fixes his gaze on his feet and Tom doesn’t know whether or not he should jump off his bed and attack the bassist or stay where he is. - *bemused smile*
“I’m going to have to tell Bill to stop giving you my room key,” he says, grinning at Georg in hopes to make the bassist see how happy he is that he’s here.
Georg smiles back and Tom is thrilled. “He’s just doing me a favor,” Georg responds – oops backfire
“Okay. I just wanted to make sure. I still need to think about it.” – He’s totally string him along.
His eyes start to drift closed when he suddenly feels someone sitting on him. Tom barely has time to react when a pair of lips touch his and a hand runs slowly over his dreadlocks, and he feels another hand resting against his cheek as a thumb strokes his skin. – Yea Georg!
Tom shifts his hips upward and begins to grind his cock against Georg’s and the feel of their erections pushing alongside each other forces Georg to start whispering his name in short, heavy breaths. “Tom…Tom…Tom” is whispered in his ear and it’s driving Tom insane; he’s never loved anyone saying his name so much before. – this is very nice!
Tom kisses Georg on the neck and grinds faster. “In me…now,” he gasps and Georg nods, grasping Tom’s legs and wrapping them around his waist. – what?! Tom decided he’s the bottom just like that?
Tom clenches his eyes shut and waits for it to happen and the next thing he knows Georg’s inside him, thrusting slowly, and with each thrust Tom feels himself grow harder and harder until it happens, he finally comes, crying out Georg’s name at the same time. – this is a pathetic excuse for a sex scene one sentence for sex? And where is the LUBE!!!!!! You can’t have anal sex with out lube!!!!!! Aaaahhhh drives me crazy when people do this!
Tom shrugs. “It hurt a little,” he replies – um no with no prep and no lube he would have been screaming bloody murder and be in incredible pain!!!!
“It won’t hurt that much next time,” he whispers. – nope it feels the same every time. You have to learn to relax but with no prep and no lube it always hurts!
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Date: 07/16/09 10:47 am Title: Chapter Seven
“Okay, what the hell is going on?” Gustav asks, his dark eyes flitting over to the door. – oh no lol!
Tom laughs sarcastically, and he’s surprised to hear how dead his laugh sounds. – awh!
Gustav’s about to continue when the door opens again and Georg walks in. Tom glues his eyes to the floor. – awh all brokeny hearts!
He’s not going to be the one who asks for forgiveness. It’s just not something he’ll do. – so stubborn!
“I don’t know,” he mumbles, and Tom is surprised to hear that his voice sounds just as dead as his does. “He was saying something to the crowd.” – lol what? What is he saying to the crowd? lol
Tom feels anger beginning to warm in his veins. “Bill, I have a reputation to maintain.”
“That’s no excuse. You know that’s no excuse. Oh Tomi, that sounds so stupid!” – yes it is!
Tom groans. “Bill, you know I don’t like it when you go soft on me.”
Bill shrugs playfully. “You let Georg go soft on you all the time,” – ha ha
Tom hasn’t moved from the booth he’s been sitting in since the band arrived at the after party. … Georg is sitting right across from Tom. He hasn’t moved since the band arrived at the party either. – lol a stalemate.
“So. Why aren’t you out seducing girls?”
Georg doesn’t say it nastily and he doesn’t say it sarcastically. Tom looks at Georg and sees that he’s being honest with his question, that he really wants to know why he isn’t out being Tom Kaulitz, Tokio Hotel womanizer. - awh
Tom doesn’t respond and Georg laughs darkly. “Why I am not surprised? Damn it, Tom. Talk to me when it’s actually you that makes the decision and not because Bill and Gustav are afraid we’re going to ruin the band.” - *grimace* well Tom just always needs a push.
They’re both panting, Tom’s eyes on Georg as Georg looks over at the doors. “You asshole,” he says to Tom. “Someone could have seen us!” – yeah that’s what I was thinking.
Georg’s gaze drops to his feet. “It doesn’t matter if it felt right,” he murmurs. “You shouldn’t have kissed me, Tom. It’s only going to make it harder for me.” – awh
When Georg doesn’t respond Tom chances looking at him. Georg’s arms are folded defensively across his chest, but his eyes are thoughtful as he gazes at Tom. “Are you being serious?” he asks.
Tom nods. “I really mean it. I wish there was a way I could prove it to you, but you’re just going to have to believe me.” – something about the presentation of this makes it seem out of place, like they’re not acting their age.
“He got thrown out for arguing with the bartender,” he says. – lol!!!
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Date: 07/15/09 09:32 pm Title: Chapter Six
It’s all of these similarities between this random girl and the bassist that makes him look at her more than once.
Tom isn’t the one who makes the move. – why does Tom let her make a move at all?
But Georg gets bored after twenty minutes and says he’s going to go to his room – is it perhaps an invitation?
Instead his eyes drift off and he finds his brother in the middle of the crowd, dancing by himself, his face alive with laughter. - lol
It’s when she suggests that they go somewhere else that Tom knows he should say no, but he’s Tom Kaulitz and Tom knows he has a reputation to keep up so he agrees. – you can still have a reputation and not do anything about it?!
She’s quiet, staring up at the ceiling as the elevator begins to move, and Tom wonders if it’s possible that he’s actually found a reserved Tokio Hotel fan. The door opens and they walk out and then she attacks him. – ha ha guess not!
The entire time it takes for her to drag him into her room and push him onto her bed Tom’s thinking of Georg and how this is breaking the promise he made to him. But it’s that thought that gives Tom the strength to push the girl off him. – good!
WHERE R U? GEORG JUST CAME DOWN AND ASKED GUSTAV WHERE U R AND GUSTAV SAID U HAD GONE OFF WITH A GIRL!!! – OMG don’t do the chick thing!
He’s about to head towards the door when it opens and Georg walks in, slamming the door shut behind him. – why did he bother to knock at all?
“So, Tom. A girl. That’s interesting. I thought you weren’t doing that anymore because, you know, you thought you might like me and were respecting my feelings.” He steps closer again. “I guess you really are an asshole. Oh, and you’re a liar.” – uuuggghh the chick card really?! *sigh* I don’t think that Georg would be exactly like this. It’s a little OOC for him.
“Damn it, Georg, you don’t understand!” Tom yells, suddenly alive with his own anger. “I didn’t take her back by choice!” – what? lol
“Georg, I didn’t want to do anything with her!”
“Sure Tom, is that because you only want to do something with me?" – Tom is going to have a few slip ups he’s changing his behavior.
He pauses, his green eyes darkening and making Tom feel nervous. "Fine! We’re going to do something now!” – O_O oh!
Georg looks at him, panting as well, but there’s still a look of deep anger in his eyes and Tom decides that it’s his turn. - *grins*
He grabs Georg by the shoulders and pushes him down on the bed. Tom climbs on top of him and presses down on him. Their lips collide together and Tom starts to thrust his hips into Georg’s. Georg moans as Tom’s arousal pushes against his own and he grabs Tom’s waist, forcing the guitarist to stop lunging his cock against his. – mmmhhh! So hot!
Georg leans over and begins to place gentle kisses against Tom’s fingers. He continues up his arm and then on his shoulder, to his collarbone and then his neck. Tom moans softly each time he feels Georg’s lips against his skin and his anger starts to dissipate. – mmmhh hot…and anticipate not dissipate.
The aching in his pants becomes urgent but Georg stops, turning his head and resting his cheek against Tom’s stomach. – awh he’s a little broken.
The hurt in Georg’s eyes is penetrating and almost tangible; Tom’s never seen anyone look so wounded before. – this would be more realistic then his tirade before. The look and then perhaps the tirade and then the hot kissing.
Georg looks down, his hair falling into his face. “I can’t do this anymore, Tom,” he says and he looks back up at Tom and Tom’s surprised to see that his eyes look wet. “It’s over. I just…I can’t, Tom, I can’t. I’m so fucking in love with you and it’s killing me and…that’s it.” He turns and stumbles slightly. – awh he’s totally broken!
Tom lies motionless in Bill’s bed as his twin runs his fingers over his dreadlocks, humming softly in his ear. He’s been in Bill’s room for over an hour and he can’t make sense of anything anymore. – lol awh he broke himself!
Tom has realized that all he really wants is Georg, and it took him fucking up to make that realization emerge. – sometimes that’s the only time you really realize you want something is when you can’t have it.
“Cry, Tomi,” he murmurs softly. “Let it all out.” – that is a very good answer!
Tom’s confused for a moment but he blinks and inhales sharply; his eyes have welled up and the tears that have unknowingly been waiting to be shed trickle slowly down Tom’s cheeks. He shudders once and they start to come faster, but he lies silently and does not make a sound. – sometimes it’s nice to just cry, it’s nice to be given permission to cry. But boys don’t really cry much, this is the way that girls cry.
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Date: 07/15/09 06:33 pm Title: Chapter Five
“You’re so nasty!” he exclaims, resting his chin on Tom’s shoulder. “I don’t even want to be anywhere near you when you see Georg later.” – lol I bet Tom had forgotten until this moment!
“Did Georg give me a hand job last night?” - lol
I can’t stop thinking about how loud you were moaning and-” – lol, I don’t like a whiny Bill this is generally annoying!
Georg gave him a hard on. – yup!
So it really was Georg. Tom couldn’t deny it. – do you not want to be in love with Georg? Is there a reason?
Bill eyes Tom. “He kissed you once and you got hard? Wow. I didn’t think he had that much of a hold on you already.”
Tom sits fully up. “What’s that supposed to mean?” he asks. – That Bill did know.
“Back when you first started sleeping in his room I thought you were only teasing him because you thought his crush on you was stupid. Now I think you’re doing it because you actually want to be in bed with him.” – yes he’s right, You Bill is annoying and too perky and too silly. And where is Tom’s hang over?
“Why would I seduce him?” Tom asks as he grinds his teeth together. He’s getting angry listening to Bill. There’s no way Bill can be right. No way at all. “I’m not interested in him like that.”
“You keep telling yourself that,” Bill says – lol!
Tom sits in Georg’s booth. Georg looks nervous, and Tom knows it’s because he’s expecting some sort of remark about last night. Tom smiles at him in what he hopes is a reassuring way and Georg smiles back, despite a look of confusion slipping over his features. – I wonder what Tom’s going to do?
Georg frowns (Tom can tell Georg thinks this conversation is going to turn negative). “Tom, if this is about last night, then -” – I’m a little frustrated by the () notes, they feel like stage direction or narrative; but the problem with that is that this is a story why don’t you just explain what is in the () not just tell us. That was a story is you explain everything you don’t just narrate the action. Tom feels this…you explain what Tom is feeling otherwise it’s just kind of pointless.
“Anyway,” Tom continues, moving on to the most important part from his prepared discussion with Bill, “I’m going to stop bringing girls to my room as a favor for you and for me until I know how I feel. I’ve realized that the only reason I’ve been bringing girls to my room lately is because I was afraid that I wasn’t getting aroused by anyone anymore. I was just using them to try and make me feel something. And then you aroused me last night, and that made me realize I need to sort my feelings out.” – wow this is very insightful almost too insightful.
“This is hard for me,” he repeats, and he means it. Tom’s never been good with expressing his feelings. It was a personality flaw he never really bothered working on. - *nods* yeah lots of guys are that way!
Tom glares at Georg as the bassist starts laughing again. He’s about to retort when Georg’s suddenly leaning against him, his hands on both sides of Tom’s face and his eyes full of adoration. “I appreciate it,” he whispers. “I can’t believe you’re actually doing something like that for me.” – awh!
Georg presses his lips against Tom’s and Tom goes numb with ecstasy, moaning loudly. He can feel himself starting to get hard and he runs his hands through Georg’s hair in attempt to get himself to focus on the feeling of something else. Georg presses himself tightly against Tom and rubs himself gently against Tom’s leg and Tom gives up as he becomes fully aroused. – mmmhhh hot!
Tom turns white. He’d forgotten that Gustav has been sitting in the booth across from Georg’s the entire time. – lol!!!
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Date: 07/15/09 06:17 pm Title: Chapter Four
The entire time he had been thinking of Georg and the hurt on his face a few hours earlier, when they were still out partying. – he took a girl back to his hotel but was thinking of Georg the entire time?
Tom rolls off the bed and hits the floor, groaning slightly. He reaches around for his shirt and his pants, cursing at the extended period of time that it takes him to remember where his arms and legs are supposed to go. – lol perfect!
“Tom, you’re drunk. Hang up before you say something you’re going to regret.” – lol!!!
Tom launches himself at Georg, throwing his arms around his neck and crawling into his lap. - lol
“I want your body,” he murmurs and Georg pauses.
“What?” Georg asks, his voice unsteady. – lol well he knows what he wants when he can’t stop himself maybe he’ll get it after this?!
Tom shudders and Georg pulls his hand away, flushing slightly.
“No,” Tom whispers, grabbing Georg’s hand and shoving it up his shirt. He moves Georg’s hand across his stomach and his chest, slowly so Georg can feel every inch of his upper body and so he can enjoy the feel of Georg’s touch. – yummy!!!
Georg lowers Tom onto the bathroom floor; the tiles are cool against Tom’s skin and he gasps. A small smile appears on Georg’s lips and Tom smiles back – oh my will Tom regret this?
Tom’s never been kissed by Georg before, but when the bassist’s lips touch his he feels a rush that knocks the breath from his body and makes him feel dizzy. – yummy!
Tom realizes that Georg’s dominated him, but he doesn’t mind. Not tonight. – hum? I wonder who will the Top?
Tom pulls away. He’s breathless and he feels sober and he’s panting and he’s in ecstasy. He leans up and presses his lips against Georg’s, begging for another kiss like the one he’s just been given. – mmmhhh yum!!! OMG so good!
Georg pulls away and shakes his head; he sits up and untangles himself from Tom, leaning against the bathtub. – is this Georg’s little pay back or is he taking a time out to see if Tom wants to continue?
He feels a warmth in his stomach that’s spreading across his entire body, a warmth he hasn’t felt in a long time. - *grins*
“What?” he asks, sitting up.
Georg looks back at him, a mischievous grin on his face. “You’re hard,” he says. – ha ha!!! You’ve just been called out of the closet! lol
“Get up.” He reaches down and grabs Tom’s hand, pulling him off the floor. “You’re going to Bill’s room.” – But? But? *sighs in defeat*
“She might even think I’m you. And if she asks where you are I’ll lie and say you took her to my room. If she continues to bother me I’ll ignore her. Don’t worry. It’ll be fine. – lol!!!
Georg kissed him once and he got the arousal he’s been waiting months for. – because you’ve been waiting to be kissed by HIM!
Bill rolls his eyes and gives Georg a look. “You don’t even want to know what he’s going to be like tomorrow. I saw what he was drinking. If he wasn’t my twin I’d leave him in the hallway for the night.” - lol!!!
“By the way,” he begins, gaze on Bill. “He’s hard.” – *gasp* dude!!!!
Georg laughs. “Actually, that’s my fault.” Bill looks up at Georg and then at Tom, his mouth wide. Georg returns to the foot of the bed. “I could take care of it,” Georg suggests, his voice very quiet. “If you want me too.” – oh lord!
Bill jumps off the bed. “I don’t care what you do. I don’t want to see it, I don’t want to hear it. Ew. Ew. Ew!” He scurries towards the bathroom, squealing in disgust as he shoves his fingers into his ears. - *cracks up* lol OMG!!!
Tom’s too out of it to know exactly what Georg’s planning on doing but he nods, because he can tell that Georg is going to touch him again and he wants to feel Georg’s touch on his body. – OH my!
Georg unbuckles Tom’s belt and slides his pants down to his knees. “I’m keeping your boxers on,” he tells him, and Tom nods, unsure of what else to do. “This isn’t going to take long,” he adds. “Then I’m leaving.” - *Gasp* in Bill’s room?! Why couldn’t you have done it in Tom’s bathroom?!
Georg slips his hand down Tom’s boxers and Tom gasps as he feels Georg’s fingers stroke his hard on. He lets out a soft moan and Georg attempts to keep himself from smiling. He encircles his hand around Tom’s cock and begins to pump slowly. Tom moans again, drowning in the feeling of Georg’s cool hand against his heated skin. The bassist starts pumping harder and faster until Tom moans and jerks and suddenly it’s over. Georg removes his hand, wiping it clean on Tom’s shirt. “You’re welcome,” he says as he stands up. Tom doesn’t respond. His mind is numb. – first really hot, second OMG! In Bill’s room? OMG!
Tom comes back to life the moment Georg’s lips touch his. Georg pulls away, laughter alive in his eyes. “If you ever push me away again when I’m affectionate with you and you’re sober I’m going to remind you of tonight,” he whispers, and Tom knows that Georg knows that he’ll be embarrassed about what’s gone on in the morning. – lol he has the best black mail ever!!!
Tom suddenly feels so alone and he wants to ask Bill to tell Georg to come back but he knows it’s a stupid idea because when he wakes up tomorrow he’ll be angry at Georg for everything they did together tonight (no matter how much Tom knows he was enjoying it). – lol the conundrum
Bill sits down next to Tom, gazing at his twin. “I’m not cleaning that up,” he says, pointing a manicured finger down at Tom’s boxers. – Bill seems a little calm about this. He must have known for a while what Tom and Georg didn’t.
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Date: 07/15/09 05:38 pm Title: Chapter Three
“You’ve been hiding in here the entire time?” Bill asks him – lol caught!
Tom shakes his head, suddenly feeling very upset. Bill sighs and pulls Tom into a hug, clutching his older brother to his chest. “You’ll be fine,” Bill whispers, running his fingers over a few of Tom’s dreadlocks. “He’s not going to hate you.” – no he won’t but you need to figure yourself out before you have to chase Georg.
Bill groans loudly and shoots a glare at his brother, but Tom’s eyes aren’t on Bill and he doesn’t see it. – awh because he’s watching Georg!
All he can tell is that Georg looks weary and depressed and Tom can’t shake off a feeling that he’s responsible for the bassist’s negative mood. – well duh!
When Tom makes no other movements Bill turns swiftly and marches out, heading straight over to Georg and sitting in the seat across from him. – oh lord Bill you can’t fix it you have to let them do it!
“My brother did something to you last night.” – Bill! What did I just say?
Georg laughs sourly. “Thanks, but that’s not going to help. I tried telling him to stop last night and he didn’t.” – but you let him put your heart on the line every time!
He panics slightly as Georg stares at him, his gaze suddenly turning cold. - eeeee
Tom tries to ignore Georg’s unfriendly glare and strides towards the bassist, a smirk plastered on his face. – not the best way to approach him but it’s your own defense mechanism.
Tom decides to go first. “I guess you’re expecting me to say sorry,” he says, and the moment the statement is out of his mouth he mentally kicks himself (that’s not what he wanted to say at all). – uuuuhhhhggg!!!! TOM! OMG! TOM!
I don’t know what the hell you want anymore. I let you come into my room and stay in my bed because you can’t seem to fuck a girl anymore and then any time I try to be affectionate you push me away!” – oh lol Georg doesn’t know either!
Georg wants explanations and Tom doesn’t know how to explain anything he does anymore. – lol awh poor boys!
Tom’s original motive was to show Georg who was dominant and to make it known that he wasn’t going to take shit from him when he was doing stupid things like going out and pretending to get laid. – um but…*shakes head* ok fine
he unwillingly admits to himself that he partially continued on because he was enjoying it. – um hello you can’t get it up for girls but you like kissing Georg, do you need a giant paper placard in front of you?!
“I don’t get you,” he replies, and while he doesn’t say it Tom can tell he’s been forgiven. – awh just to have his heart broken again!
Gustav’s gaze flickers between the guitarist and bassist, eyes narrowed with suspicion. - lol
“Wake me up the next time you’re planning on ditching me. I woke up this morning really hard and next time I’m not the one who’s going to be taking care of it.” He grins coyly at Tom and pats him on the hand as Tom’s mouth drops open. “Count that as your punishment.” - *cracks up* so evil lol!!!!!
There’s silence. “What?” Gustav cries out, and for once Tom finds himself agreeing with him. – lol!!!! *cracks up*
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Date: 07/15/09 03:03 pm Title: Chapter Two
Tom turns his head the opposite way and stares blankly at the couch, trying hard to ignore Bill. His heart has started to pound a little harder than usual and he finds himself waiting, waiting anxiously for Georg and Gustav to come backstage after they’ve harassed the crowd with their gestures and water tossing. – awh!!!
Tom lifts his head slightly and Georg looks right at him; their gazes lock briefly for a moment and the smile fades off Georg’s face. – awh Tom you broke you and Georg!
Bill’s eyes are going from Georg to Tom and he’s frowning, and Gustav doesn’t seem to notice what’s going on. – lol!
Georg confuses him too much and he had been scared. – still is!
“You know what?” Georg says to no one in particular, but his eyes are still on Tom and Tom knows that he’s directing it at him. “I think I’m going out tonight.” He turns and grabs his jacket off the chair next to him, slipping it on.
“C’mon Gustav.” Gustav looks over at Georg with curiosity. “Let’s go out and pick up girls.” Gustav raises his eyebrows and shrugs, reaching for his jacket as well. - *grimace!*
Tom can’t wrap his mind around it because even before Tom had found out Georg didn’t like girls Georg never went out of his way to chase girls and it just wasn’t making sense and all Tom knew was that Georg was supposed to be in love with him. – Jealous? But I thought that you weren’t in to Geo *winks*
Georg looks at Gustav, and there’s something about the odd smile on his face that has Tom worried. “I really want to fuck a girl tonight,” Georg says to Gustav, but he’s speaking so loudly that Tom knows he wants him to hear it. “I just want to bring some girl back to my hotel room and fuck her. I want to have amazing sex. I want it to be the best sex she’s ever had in her entire life.” – lol OMG ham it up a little more that way everyone will believe you more! *shakes head*
If Tom wasn’t so blinded by anger he might laugh at how stupid Georg sounds, but he knows he needs to fight off his temper or he might slam his fist into Georg’s face. – lol
“You don’t know how to have sex with a girl,” he spits at Georg, fuming.
Georg’s eyes widen momentarily but he quickly regains his composure. “Maybe you’re right Tom,” he says slowly, and for a moment Tom is shocked out of his anger. “Maybe I should go out and have sex with a guy instead!” He’s yelling and Tom’s anger comes back at full speed and he feels Bill grab his arm and pull him close. “I think I’ll go have sex with a guy!” - *crack up* OMG!!!
I know that you’ve been sleeping in his room because you don’t want to have sex with girls anymore-” Tom tries to interrupt but Bill gives him a look –“Tom, you know you don’t want to have sex with girls anymore. Stop being in denial.” – lol even Bill has noticed lol
Tom doesn’t say anything. He knows Bill’s right and he knows he needs to stop, but he won’t admit it to Bill because he’s not sure if he can stop. He doesn’t know why. – I wonder if you kissed him would it all make sense?
all he knows is that he’s waiting for something (someone) and it’s making him nervous. – duh!
“Stop Gustav. I can get back to my room from here.” Georg sounds tired and his words are slightly slurred; he’s drunk (Tom’s been around a drunk Georg a lot and he knows he never gets silly; when Georg’s drunk he gets serious and pensive and everyone knows it’s best to leave him alone). – nice!
“Damn it,” Georg curses and Tom feels a smirk spread across his lips. It’s obvious that he is the last person Georg wants to be dealing with while drunk, but Tom suddenly feels like he has something to accomplish and he won’t back down until it’s been done. – hum?!
He slips the brown lock behind Georg’s ear and moves his hand down to his face, bringing his other hand up to hold the other side of Georg’s face as well. – uh-oh!
“Did you fuck somebody?”
Georg glares at him. “Fuck you.” - lol
Tom pulls Georg’s face to his and presses his lips forcibly to the bassist’s. Georg is numb against him and Tom presses harder. Finally Georg begins to respond almost lethargically; he starts sucking gently on Tom’s lip ring. Tom moans and Georg runs his tongue against his lower lip; Tom’s mouth slips slightly open and Georg plunges in and their tongues entwine together and Tom is overcome with ecstasy. He feels Georg’s hand gripping his shirt and he lets his own hands slide down Georg’s shoulders and chest and he encircles his arms around Georg’s waist. – nice!!!!!
They’re both breathless and red-faced and Tom’s slightly afraid to realize that he’d been enjoying it – I don’t think Tom is going to get it is he? lol
Tom doesn’t reply; instead he lowers his lips to Georg’s neck and kisses it. Georg tightens his grip on Tom’s shirt and Tom lets out a chuckle. “Resist me,” he replies and kisses Georg on the neck again, sucking gently on the soft skin. – uh-oh he’s going to take it too far isn’t he? And then he’s going to freak. lol
Tom shrugs and keeps rubbing. “Answer me and I’ll leave you alone. Did you fuck someone tonight?” – I think that might make Georg not tell him…just so he’ll keep going!
He had aroused Georg in an attempt to show his dominance and he wasn’t sure how he felt about it. But he knew he had started something and now he had to finish it or else he would seem weak and he didn’t want Georg to think he was a weak person (if Georg didn’t hate him when he was hung over in the morning). – um…has to finish it? O_O *giggles*
“I didn’t think you did,” he replies softly, leaning in to give Georg another kiss. – but what are you going to do now?
Tom suddenly feels like he’s been punched in the stomach; Bill’s brown eyes are filled with disappointment and Tom unfortunately remembers why. - *sigh*
He’s lying on top of the bassist, his arms around Georg’s waist and Georg’s arms wrapped around him. They’re pressed tightly against each other and Tom feels his face burn with embarrassment when he realizes that they’re both wearing nothing but their boxers. – very compromising *grins*
Tom looks over his shoulder at Georg and feels nothing but guilt; guilt for messing with him and guilt for leaving him without an explanation. Bill tugs on his arm and points towards the door and Tom surrenders to his twin, dragging himself out of the room. – yes you’re leading him on but…do you know why?
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Date: 07/15/09 02:38 pm Title: Chapter One
Tom’s drunk out of his mind (or he likes to think he is) and he has no idea what’s going on. – thinks he is?
Tom checks her out once. It’s too dark and he can’t see her well, but her clothes are tight enough and she has plenty to hold up top, so he doesn’t really care what she looks like. - lol
The girl giggles and turns around, shoving her ass onto his lap. She begins to grind on him forcibly, rough and hard and dirty. – ewww!!
The song changes to a faster pulsing and she begins to grind harder and Tom waits for it to happen, wills it to happen with his mind, but nothing does. – can’t get it up for her? hum?
There’s a pause that’s interrupted by a drunken giggling. “You’re not the Tokio Hotel virgin, are you Tom Kaulitz?”
Tom smirks . Silly groupie. There is no Tokio Hotel virgin, and even if there was it wouldn’t be him. - lol
She continues to giggle uncontrollably. “Are you the gay one?” – Oh! Not cool!
Through the haze of the alcohol Tom goes over of his options, but he’s too upset and his head is pounding and he isn’t sure what’s going on. He hates himself and he hates the girl unconscious on the bed inside and he hates everything and he hates not knowing what’s wrong and he hates that he can’t go through with it. – hum?! What is going on Tom?
Tom hates that he hasn’t been able to have sex with the groupie. He hates that he hasn’t been able to have sex with a girl for almost a year. – whoa!!!
He gets into the elevator and rides his way up to the ninth floor in silence. They’re not supposed to be staying in this hotel, but Bill sent him a text message earlier telling him they were getting rooms. Tom feels shameful; it’s his fault they were staying overnight (Bill had made sure he knew that by sending several more angry texts) and his fault they would be forced to rush to the next show tomorrow. – ouch naughty Tom!
Loneliness sweeps over Tom as he lies there, willing sleep to come but receiving no comfort. His mind keeps replaying the night over and over again, an endless movie Tom doesn’t want to keep watching. All he sees is the blonde girl and all he feels is the lack of feeling, the lack of arousal at her touch. No matter how far they’d gone, no matter where she touched him, he wouldn’t get hard. – awh and he doesn’t know why does he?...or does he?
The loneliness still has a tight hold and he can’t shake it off. Tom stands too quickly and falls over. He moans and swears and forces himself back onto his unsteady feet. He has to get out of his room. He can’t stand to be alone any longer. – awh!
He always came through for him with his subtle offers – and Tom never refuses a good offer. – who? O_O *grins* Georg?
Georg shows no signs of waking, not even shifting around, and Tom is thankful; he’ll deal with the problem involving Georg tomorrow. -
(Tom knows that Georg likes to sleep naked, but on the nights when Tom comes to him he always seems to have boxers on). – awh!
He can still remember when they were younger and Georg was chubby and there were no muscles in sight, back when he had been the biggest in the band (back before Tom and his twin had shot up and Georg had started working out). - lol
Tom wonders what Georg’s abs and chest feel like, and he’s surprised to find that Georg’s skin is soft no matter where he touches him. - *giggles* touching him while he sleep?!
Tom suddenly wants to feel every inch of the sleeping bassist, wants to feel if he’s smooth all over, but he quickly rids himself of that desire. – lol!
“Morning,” Tom whispers as he lowers his voice on purpose to make himself sound more seductive. It works; Georg’s eyes widen and Tom can feel something hard pressing against his leg (the same leg Tom suddenly realizes with embarrassment that’s slung across Georg’s thighs). - *squeaks and giggles*
Tom smirks and brushes his lips across Georg’s lips so quickly that one barely feels the touch of the other and places the kiss on the corner of Georg’s mouth. Georg groans with disappointment; Tom knows he can see that he’s smirking and Georg realizes Tom’s only messing with him. – awh he’s just mean!
Tom knows that Georg is in love with him (everyone except Gustav knows), but he still can’t seem to stop himself from teasing the bassist. – and you don’t find it a funny coincidence that you can’t get it up for a girl? lol
“So you couldn’t fuck her, could you?”
Tom frowns at Georg’s remark. “Fuck you,” he mutters under his breath.
“I bet you couldn’t fuck me either.” – lol I bet he could!
“Hey, I’m not the one who comes into your room to sleep with you every time you get rejected.”
“Yeah, but I’m not the one who slides their room key underneath my door.”
“I’m not the one who follows through on the offer.” – lol I love this!
There’s a truth in Georg’s statement that makes Tom feel nauseous; he doesn’t know why, but something about what Georg said bothers him. He starts to head for the door, confused and no longer wanting to be in the room, when he feels Georg’s arms circle around his waist and he stops, shuddering slightly. The bassist places a kiss on Tom’s shoulder and Tom closes his eyes, suddenly feeling weary. - *smirks*
“Georg.” Tom’s tone warns the bassist (he hates it when Georg goes soft on him) and Georg sighs; Tom can feel his breath on his shoulder. Georg pulls away in defeat and Tom suddenly feels cold without him there. – awh!
“You always pretend to kiss me and then…” he begins, but he stops and shrugs. He tries to speak again but nothing comes out. “Fuck it,” he mutters instead. He shakes his head and turns. – awh you broke Georg! JERK!
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Date: 07/12/09 11:56 pm Title: Chapter Nine
This was a great read!
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Date: 06/19/09 11:17 pm Title: Chapter One
omg I'm sorry I didn't review all the chapters but I just couldn't stop reading I usually don't dot tom georg but your story made me love it seriousli it was awsome I loved the way you describe there feelings and a every detail you put it's just wonderful. Honestly I love this story it's so simple but the way you makes it's so much more than that your writing is awsome I love it it has so much detail that's great I hope this review makes up for the lost ones
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! I'm really glad you liked the story and my descriptions of their feelings. It means a lot to me that you like it so much, especially since you don't usually read Tom/Georg. And thanks for the compliment to my writing skills - that means a lot to me too!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! I'm really glad you liked the story and my descriptions of their feelings. It means a lot to me that you like it so much, especially since you don't usually read Tom/Georg. And thanks for the compliment to my writing skills - that means a lot to me too!
Date: 05/10/09 09:04 pm Title: Chapter Eight
luv tha story...cnt wait4tha last ch.
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Date: 04/30/09 10:14 am Title: Chapter Nine
Omg, LOVE this story, sooo cuteeeeh
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Date: 04/26/09 05:35 pm Title: Chapter Nine
Oops. I've only belatedly realized that I reviewed chapter 1 but not the whole story. Shame on me! I like it so much! And Torg doesn't do it for me on any given day, so kudos to you. :-)
Tom in denial, Georg being hurt, Bill being bossy (it's what he is best at, right?) and Gustav being secretly turned on by a lap dance (mwahahahaah!)r30;these are some awesome ingredients for a story. ;-)
I like the seriousness of it most, tough. Watching how Tom gradually comes to accept what he feels, to embrace it even, to be happy to love someone who loves you in returnr30;even if it happens to be a man that he loves. It's a painful process for him and you've captured that really well.
Author's Response: Aw, thanks so much! And don't worry about not reviewing after chapter one...but besides that, I am so happy you liked the story and my characterizations (especially bossy Bill and pervy Gustav). You said some really sweet things and I am very flattered; thank you so much for enjoying and reading my story!
Author's Response: Aw, thanks so much! And don't worry about not reviewing after chapter one...but besides that, I am so happy you liked the story and my characterizations (especially bossy Bill and pervy Gustav). You said some really sweet things and I am very flattered; thank you so much for enjoying and reading my story!
Date: 04/23/09 01:07 am Title: Chapter Nine
omg i loved this
Author's Response: Aw, I'm so happy you did! Thanks for the review!