Date: 01/03/09 04:59 am Title: What They Do
Genius.This is what I call a real relationship.This is not fiction at some degrees because everything, i say EVERYTHING you described in this is like what i've experienced and I gaped through your whole story.It is without doubt one of the VERY RARE realistic fictions ever in terms of feelings,logic,coherence(minus some parts that seemes a bit stretched ,scratch that this is a piece of art nonetheless)...You are truly BRILLIANT to put to words those feelings.Really,I'm amazed at that and I am somewhat totally speechless. I was like "omg,I understand you Bill","I know the feeling"...Thank you,beautiful story you have here.Has to go straight to my favorites because I'll read this a couple more times in the future for sure.
Also LMAO at the Manzini part haha!Frankly i'm indifferent to that kid,but i admit that i was supporting Tom hehe!crush the kid XD.Plus he wanted to be taken? lol lol lol!!
Plus i love how you pu many realities in the fic,many real events and all.Makes this more interesting.Thank you!
Date: 01/02/09 11:37 pm Title: What They Do
thanks to you, I discovered Manzini, the COOLEST Danish rapper/break dancer like, EVER.
this fic was awesome. really. wow, I loved it. I can't even begin to describe it. *__________________________________*
Date: 01/02/09 10:50 pm Title: What They Do
Looooong...XD But GREEEEAAAAAAAATT!!!
I soooo love it!!^^ Amazing... It felt so real.. Waaaahh and I love the ending!!XD Wahaha.. Love it, love it!!!XD
Date: 01/02/09 10:34 pm Title: What They Do
No words! This story combined everything that I've come to love about your stories; they're just way too good. Thanks so much for writing this!
Date: 01/02/09 09:29 pm Title: What They Do
This was felt so honest, realistic, painful, and beautiful. Just everything about it was perfect, it really hits home.
Date: 01/02/09 07:47 pm Title: What They Do
This story is beautifully written - as always, you're definitely very talented. It is emotional, and hot, and very interesting.
Although honestly I would admit that the first 'sad' part seemed very logical to me and I felt it through and through, while the second one seemed a bit unrealistic.
They had a major problem, then they came to a conclusion to end their relationship - and they actually felt quite a relief - and then suddenly they're back together, although they hadn't really discussed the problem, nothing had really changed, so the 'jump' to love confessions and sudden lust for each other is a bit... rushed? Unexplained? I don't know.
I really love twincest stories, I really love happy endings in them, and I most definitely love your fics and your way of seeing the twins, it's just that I felt a bit of disharmony here and I thought it would be honest to tell.
But that doesn't change the fact that I really liked the story :)
Author's Response: :) Yeah you are right, it definitely felt rushed etc to me, because it was, literally lol. I had a deadline and a set prompt (Darcy wanted twins in a sexual rut) and I knew I couldn't write it short, as solving problems takes time. The story needs to be extended into a proper chapter fic, but I wasn't going to submit a non finished story to the fic fest, so I tried to wrap it up, because I couldn't stand leaving the twins in such a bad situation. As it mentions in the fic, Tom knew they still had lots to talk to about, but I only wrote the parts that I knew Darcy would want to see, the rut, the break up angst, but with a happy ending. As for their love confessions, they never stopped loving each other so to me that was never a big issue, it was trying to get Tom to see past his own cozy little bubble he'd created for himself, to notice that his complacency and taking Bill for granted was pushing Bill away, even though Bill didn't want to be pushed away at all, he tried his best just to get Tom to acknowledge that they lacked passion lol. It took Tom losing Bill and being stubborn and too proud to see that he COULD have Bill, for him to finally realize his mistakes. Deep down they never stopped wanting or needing each other, but Bill freaked out a little too much and made a big issue of the fact that their sex life was in a lull. From out outsider's point of view, I think he jumped the gun in breaking up with Tom (and he realized that the next day, when the reality of what he'd done kicked in), I think if he had given Tom a chance to help fix it, they might have muddled through without all the extra angst, but of course human beings make mistakes, and I wanted to write that, because I think in nearly all my stories the twins are always so madly in love with each other, a sexual rut and Bill kissing someone else would just be a big fat no no lol, so I was glad to have a chance at writing a story where they mess up a lot, but fumble their way back. In my opinion, for these particular twins it won't be the last rut they experience, but hopefully they would both learn from the first time to react differently.rnrnThanks for reading, and for being honest. :) *hugs*
Date: 01/02/09 07:31 pm Title: What They Do
I'm completely in love with this. It has all of the elements of a chapter fic wrapped in to one. A perfect little present :) Fantastic job!!
Date: 01/02/09 05:50 pm Title: What They Do
love it love it love it!
Date: 01/02/09 05:39 pm Title: What They Do
**let them have their rock star, just as long as he gets to have Bill.**
I was trying to hold back tears, but at this point I just couldn't anymore..That was simply amazing, as always. In your fictions you can see the situations, you can feel the character's feelings, and I love all this!!Thank you for this new wonderful fic! Happy new year!!
Date: 01/02/09 04:49 pm Title: What They Do
Whoa, this was the longest one-shot I've ever read, but I couldn't stop reading. This was soo good. My heart hurt when the twins were with other people, so I'm so glad they ended up with each other. So sweet and hot, lovely. :)
Date: 01/02/09 03:04 pm Title: What They Do
*_*
It's just perfect, Darcy is so lucky. :D
Date: 01/02/09 02:57 pm Title: What They Do
so amazing, exactly what I want, THANK YOU SO MUCH AGAIN :) :) :) *favorites*
Date: 01/02/09 12:55 pm Title: What They Do
That was so intense,
so real
AND SO SCARY !
I don't know why but i'm so scared !
you're an amazing writer !
Date: 01/02/09 12:52 pm Title: What They Do
wow this was one of the greatest stories i have read on this site
it jus so awsome how they solved their little problems then ended up fucking like rabbits
Date: 01/02/09 12:48 pm Title: What They Do
That was so emotional...and so fucking brilliant.
*speechless*
Date: 01/02/09 12:47 pm Title: What They Do
Holy hell. This was so...emotional. I was at the verge of breaking down when it seemed SO bad between them. Even though I knew you couldn't possibly give us a sad ending. Ugh, I dunno what to say now. This was just...something else. And...oh so hot. I think I melted.
Date: 01/02/09 12:09 pm Title: What They Do
I knew it *_____*
Date: 01/02/09 10:51 am Title: What They Do
OMFGGGGGGG..
This is so incredilbe.
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i'm so speechless. you re so talented
Date: 01/02/09 09:48 am Title: What They Do
woah...just fucking woah...that was hott ^_^ i loved the ENTIRE story lol
Date: 01/02/09 09:19 am Title: What They Do
OO I can't breathe...