Date: 02/20/09 11:12 pm Title: Get It On
So sweet,sad,and erotic. If only we could forget about smelly Bushido in the background.
Date: 02/14/09 04:04 pm Title: Stay Out Of It
Ah man T you must be having fun with this making Bushido really sick. It's good though.
Date: 02/13/09 02:48 pm Title: Stay Out Of It
Nein!!! Tomi!!! He's so nice!! Can I have him?? PLEEZES???
Date: 02/13/09 09:19 am Title: Stay Out Of It
scoping the many jaggedly appraised, yet strangely gossamer sheets of metal. Each rounded off at an end with a golden filigree handle, they glistened in the newly billowing light. - nope still not sure exactly what this is? Am I just stupid? Sometimes I need a vague description and then a word that actually tells me what in the world it is. So what is it/are they?
"Well? Does this meet your satisfaction, dear one?" - Bushido is sufficiently creepy!
My body was a hundred plus times more vulnerable and frail than his own, and I wouldn't put it past him to do to me what I had so desperately prayed would befall his own being. Very slim were the chances I would survive through such torture, and even if I did, it was likely my life would be taken shortly after, this time by my own hand, to spare myself of the excruciating memory. - I really like his realization!
Me and Tom… ahem, excuse me, Tom and Me - ahem I do believe it is “Tom and I”
Swirling the muscle a few times around his mouth, gathering as much saliva he could with one swipe, the brunette puckered his lips and launched a great gob of spit at the man. It hit him just at the temple and slid down over his cheekbone. Obviously this was not taken well, Bill hadn't expected it would be, but it did its job correctly and had kept him from the horrid sensation of the older males' mouth against his own. - oh my Bill has a death wish doesn’t he!
Bushido pushed the burning cigg harder against Bill's skin until it finally elicited a blood-curdling scream. He chortled and dragged the fag down arms length, stopping only just before the flaming sensation reached the teens' wrist. - nice!!!
"Leave him the fuck alone!!" - well that was nice of Tom!
This is so good! I’m enjoying it so much…tell me you read ImaginaryNumbers almost all of her stuff is this dark!
Date: 02/08/09 12:10 am Title: So You've Met
You aren't getting many reviews and mine have been, honesly kind of crapy as of late. But I wanted to let you know that this fic rocks! It has amazing potential and I'm really looking forward to you torturing Bill and Tom. I look forward to updates and I can't wait to see where this goes and what happens and if they ever escape! I really enjoy Bushido in just about everything because he's such an untaped character. This kind of fic is right up my alley and I'm so down to read Tom getting all bloody and brused. And reading about Bill totally freaking out at Tom getting bloody and his antisipation at also getting raped and bloody and tide to surfaces and tortured in general. Yeah mean stuff to Bill and Tom. Hurt them please bitte, not just for me but for others too!!! We're counting on you to make them hurt and bleed and plead!!! Yes I love it when they plead. Sorry I digress. I like your used of antisipation nothing truely awful has happend but we know, and Bill knows it will. I enjoy that nothing has happend but that I can smell it on the wind. Lovely thanks again for sharing your fic with us!
Date: 02/06/09 06:26 pm Title: So You've Met
I am actually scared of Bushido, it's so well written! Seriously, my heart pounds a little bit.
I don't think I have words to describe how much I want the next chapter!!
Date: 02/06/09 04:04 pm Title: So You've Met
HOLY crapinsky, I'm scared.
Date: 02/06/09 01:03 pm Title: So You've Met
I'm not in the mood to give a proper review but this is lovly! *shiver* I love a trapped Bill and TOm. ABUSE THEM MORE bitte!! *grins wickedly!*
Date: 01/24/09 10:26 am Title: Bad Move
clear no one had lived in them for year upon years – plural issue and grammar issue… clearly no one had lived in them for years upon years
I felt around, beneath the mounds of denim bunch at his feet, until my hands finally found his ankle; a thick brace dug there into the skin, and when I lifted the material to better see what I was doing I could see it dug painfully into the blondes' skin. Blood soaked the very hem of his jeans. - *grins* I love it when they torture Tom!
It went against everything in me humane, even considering leaving Tom here brought my always overpowering concience to the forefront. In the foremost part of my mind began to burn scalding hot, but before I knew what I was doing I nodded and my feet were already carrying me to the door.
The whole time I had spent, busy pondering, I hadn't realized that the faint tapping I heard in the depth of my eardrum had increased in audibility. Before long I'd made it to the front of the bus, but once I was there I wished I was back there again, cowering with Tom.
The tapping hadn't been the tapping of the impatient pendulum in my minds eye at all. They were footsteps - and where they stopped was inches from where I now stood.
"Bad move, Darlin'" – *grins and bites lower lip then chuckles evilly* this is so much fun *she squeaks while bouncing in her chair and wickedly smiling*
Date: 01/24/09 10:16 am Title: Eyes of a Monster
Spindles, we don't name those in America. I'm likely not the only confused American here; the others just didn't say anything. If I (a typical America) were going to describe it I would say that brief case was packed and ready to go lying next to the banister.
Date: 01/24/09 10:13 am Title: Something Doesn't Feel Right
I hopped up the last few steps, lifting my legs a lot higher than I would normally to make sure I did not loose my footing tripping over the arduousness. Likely that would not be my problem, and I would simply fall for absolutely no other reason than to administer embarrassment, landing on him with my luck. - *chuckles*
I would have to go to bed without food. – oh ok they do with hold food. *nods*
“Where are we?” I asked.
There was no reply.
Something wasn’t right. I could most definitely feel it. Instinctively I jumped from my seat.
“Come on! Let’s go!” I pulled the boy from his seat, but then stopped, frozen. The clanking sound of metal on the dirty bus flooring brought my attention downward. That’s when I noticed them. He was no freer to move than the cement foundation of the school. His ankles were shackled, and purpley-pink. It was obvious he wasn’t going anywhere. He was nailed to the floor. - *BIG EYES* OMG AWESOME! *Giggles and claps* totally out of left field. I wasn’t expecting it at all! *Grins* LOVE IT!
Author's Response: *blushes* Hee-hee, aww thanks so much.
Date: 01/24/09 10:02 am Title: Dirty, Yellow, Bus
Craw? *cracks up* I love when people use words like mawh and craw for mouths lol
The gum is almost out, I think my nails for that, - woops wrong word…I thank my nails for that,
I'm still sort of fearful about that hemorrhoids thing. – what’s that all about? Can’t wait to have it explained.
Dammn girl you fiine. Oh, I'm sorry Bill, I didn't notice it was you – ha ha
Well at least he gets to eat. While clothing is scarce at least food isn’t
She wanted eggnog. It had to be her most favourite beverage on the entire planet, and every Christmas Bill would be sent out, sometimes several times a night, to fetch her carton-after-carton. – GROSS!!!! Ewww eggnog! *gags*
It stopped right beside him, and the doors opened wide. The bus was terrible gungy, and dirt encrusted, but what did that matter. It was the only one left, and it's not like anyone was there left to hassel him. Bill climbed the few steps, and the door closed behind him. – um he can get on any yellow school bus? Really that works? Ok.
Author's Response: Well I guess I made another oopsie. I'll have to go right in and fix that before I forget. Thanks ^^ I HATE eggnog. So nasty! My friend buys like 50 billion cartons of the stuff at the store across the street from our school on her lunch break around Christmas time. So nasty. I dunno' how she can drink that scheisse. ^^ Yup, doesn't matter what bus you take, they all go to the same place. Just they arrive at different times. We're assuming everyone at that school lives in the same general area. lol.
Date: 01/24/09 09:53 am Title: Eyes of a Monster
I'll have my first friend.- oh pathetic!
She's wearing her best pinstriped suit jacket and pants, and I can see her suitcase packed and ready to go leaning by the spindles. She's a psychiatrist and a good one too, pulling in a minimum of $800 a session. She shares none of her enormous fortune except with my father. Maybe once every few years I'll get a new pair of sneakers, or a new wardrobe if I'm lucky. – nice detail…suitcase? Is she leaving or something…or is that supposed to be briefcase? And what are spindles?
He didn't realize he had been staring, until the man raised his head and their eyes met. - *grins*
I’m so into this chapter. Is a great start the tone of the story is awesome. Character development is great. I understand Bill’s motivations, longings, wants and desires.
Author's Response: Ooops. Good eye girl, :P I'll have to fix that. Yes, I meant breifcase. I knew something wasn't right abou tthe one I picked. lol. ^^ Spindles are those uhm .. hmm, never had to explain spindles. lol. The uhm, .. one sec I'll find a picture. (pic 1, pic 2). Thanks so much for reading hunn. :D
Date: 01/19/09 01:30 pm Title: Bad Move
*squeals loudly* More more more!!!
Author's Response: I totally forgot yesterday was Saturday. That's when I post updates for my fics (Biss Mich & this one). I wrote a new chapter for Biss Mich, but I haven't starting on Chapter 5 for this yet. Bad me. I will start writing soon though. But it's Saturday now so I won't be posting it until next Friday. (That'll give me time to write it without speeding through it). I'm off all week from school (except Tuesday morning because I have an Exam - I only had one exam this semester), so I'll have plenty of time to write. Promise.
Date: 01/18/09 01:53 pm Title: Bad Move
Oh, goodness. You can't just leave it there! I need to know what happens. This is really good so far. Please keep writing.
Date: 01/18/09 02:08 am Title: Bad Move
This is getting interesting! Please continue! ASAP
Date: 01/17/09 03:34 am Title: Bad Move
holy crap. I can't wait for more!!!
Date: 01/17/09 12:03 am Title: Bad Move
Iya!!!! Damn I LOVE this already T! How fast do you think you can update?
Date: 01/15/09 09:00 pm Title: Something Doesn't Feel Right
Daaaaaaaaaaaaaaaamn T this is sooooo good!!! So cant wait for the next update.
Date: 01/14/09 12:22 pm Title: Dirty, Yellow, Bus
hahahh, no worries, hun! I at least am!^^ This is good!! I can't wait for it to continue! :P