Date: 12/29/08 01:59 pm Title: Chapter 2
I really like it
u should keep going
Author's Response: Yesh Ma'am!
Date: 12/29/08 01:42 pm Title: Chapter 2
D'aw smitted Gusti! How cute! This chapter was so amusing to read. ^^ I love it so far, and can't wait to see where you take it.
Author's Response: lol thank you. I can't wait to see where i take this myself XD
Date: 12/29/08 01:32 pm Title: Chapter 2
I didn't find it confusing in the least! I LOVED it! XD Tom is too funny, and Bill is just hilarious! Their interaction is great!
Aw, poor Gustav... I know how that one feels lol
Author's Response: aww thanks!rnrnand yeah, poor gusti U-U
Date: 12/29/08 12:35 pm Title: Chapter 2
XD I couldn't stop laughing at the last bit. Poor Gustav, though. How will he ever get over Tom stealing his poor little Billa? XDXDXD
Author's Response: thanks, i love knowing i made someone laugh ^-^rnrni dont know, maybe he will go bat shit insane and jump off a cliff....or maybe he'll meet georg ;Drnrnbut for real, ive no clue XD
Date: 12/29/08 10:45 am Title: Chapter 2
school fics, that's what dixi likes :D i have to admit you are a good writer, your story is interesting and well-written. and no, i don't think you use their names too much. it didn't disturb me :P
please write moreeee!
buzi:*
Author's Response: thankies
Date: 12/29/08 10:12 am Title: Chapter 2
yay he spoke to bill
yay
i'm happy
Author's Response: good :)
Date: 12/29/08 09:05 am Title: Chapter 2
I actually really like this story! Please do continue. :D
Date: 12/29/08 07:21 am Title: Chapter 2
Haha how embarrassing for Bill! xD
Author's Response: I know right o-o
Date: 12/29/08 07:17 am Title: Chapter 2
oh, this is so cool! Really hope you update soon, I will read it, that's for sure.
I think maybe people call me stalker sometimes to >.> Well, not my fault that I like to follow people around! oO
Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoy my story ^^
Date: 12/29/08 06:42 am Title: Chapter 2
I don't know if it was rushed, maybe a little bit. But it's ok, like U said, now we know little bit what Tom thinks too. And it's interesting to know that Tom knows about Bill and his photos. I would like to see Bill's face when he finds out ;)
And I'm not confused, just waiting for the future chapters where will be more information and answers to some questions.
Maybe it was not as good chapter as the first one but it was good too, don't worry about it :)
And Bill and Gustav? Nooooo....
xx
Author's Response: no on gusti/Bill O.Ornrnonly time will tell.rnrnThank you!^--^
Date: 12/29/08 06:17 am Title: Chapter 2
lol. gawaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa..i so wasnt confused, i just wish i knew HOW tom was knew bill took pics of him AND why we was jealous....but anywhoos. THAT WAS AWESOME ^_^ i loved this chapter so so so much ^_^
Author's Response: Thank you! i rewrote in chappie two how Bill is just a klutz and sticks out like a sore thumb snd how tom could possibly NOT know>->rnrnas for jealous...well just read and find out i guess :D
Date: 12/29/08 05:45 am Title: Chapter 2
first, repetition of names is fine. i think of it as a style of writing, and here its perfectlyfine to do so. second, i see where u kinda confused urself. u sorta rushed the whole bit about tom knowing that bill took pics of him. it was smack dab in the middle of thier cutesy little interaction at the store, which i really luvd. i like gusti's protectiveness and i like tom's character so far. he seems sweet and ineterested in bill. i hope he isnt double faced,like at skool he really should make contact with bill. itll be interesting and gusti would have the perfect chance to be jealous! :D i really like this, and this chap was fine. dont worry bout rushing, just take it easy. ok stopping now ^^' hope u continue with this cuz its really good!
Author's Response: Thanks. Your feedback is most useful, and yeah I figured it seemed rushed. I'll clear up Toms side of this in the next chapter though. Might even rewrite this one if I can take a minute to stop being such a lazy ass (sloth is one of my deadly sins XP ). rnrnThank you again!
Date: 12/28/08 11:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ok love it already, one cus its good, two its well written and three it has to do with photography! Cant wait for more.
Author's Response: thankes, hope you keep reading ^^
Date: 12/28/08 10:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
ohhhh... SO good! can't wait for more!
Author's Response: :D
Date: 12/28/08 10:47 pm Title: Chapter 1
I liked it. Keep it going...Please.
Author's Response: will do, thankes :D
Date: 12/28/08 06:59 pm Title: Chapter 1
i really like it. the plot and character descriptions are really good. but the only thing i have to critique on is the grammar. like when u typed "Bill's made this person the object of his affection. After all, they are the reason Bill found his love of photography." the 'they are' should be 'he is'. and the 'his' in "Bill would just tell himself his not jealous" should be "he's"
other than that, i say keep on going and update quick ;-)
Author's Response: Thanks, sadly you'll find some grammer issues now and then.rnAs I stated, I'm not the best of proof readers plus english is not my native language. Any broken english is not intentional and will be fixed as soon as problems are found. :)
Date: 12/28/08 05:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
No, I didn't make one. Plus your is a little better then what I had in mind... It was along the same lines though... I was thinking about the filmstrip thingy too lol. I likes this story though. It's really cute. I like it, it's different. Cameras and photos always inspire me ^-^ But keep up the great work =]
Author's Response: Oh good good didnt want you to waste time ^^rnrnand thak you, will try to keep up.
Date: 12/28/08 05:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow! This is quite intresting! Loved the plot! Can't wait to see what happens next! :D Please.. Update soon! ^-^
Author's Response: thank you :)
Date: 12/28/08 03:30 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like ! keep it comin!