Date: 04/07/09 11:32 pm Title: Intimidation and Abandonment
Oh, that's so sad. What ever happened to Tom's mom? Bill, don't give up!
Date: 04/07/09 05:23 pm Title: Frantic
I'm so sad that I have to take a break from this story now to go eat dinner. I have a feeling I will be staying up late tonight to finish this. It's so good! Oh my God! Tom! Why must I leave at this part? Damn me for having friends...unlike poor Tom. But now he has someone as amazing as Bill! Okay, you will hear from me again....in a couple of hours or so.
Date: 03/16/09 06:31 am Title: Epilogue
this storie was amazing and so lovely!
i loved the way tom acted like a little kid, really! ...n well thankz to synnie from showing me the banner i got interested in this storie! ^^
Date: 03/11/09 02:49 am Title: Prologue
Good story really good! I enjoyed it so much... ok there wasn't a happy happy ending but it was good!... maybe u could do a sequel uhmm I don't know but for me everything was good.. :D
Date: 03/10/09 02:24 am Title: Heavy Rain, Light Hearts
Amazing chapter, it made me so happy when Tom finally started talking that I actually cried. Love the way this chapter ended.
Date: 03/10/09 01:16 am Title: Blatant Dismissal
Very good chapter. That Andreas really pissed me off... gosh
Date: 03/01/09 07:05 am Title: Epilogue
*cries litterallly* WHY????? NO HAPPY ENDINGG GRRRRR!!!! its a shame
Date: 01/07/09 07:53 pm Title: No Words Needed
[[Insert A Word That Is Better Than Any Word Ever Made To Describe How Good Somthing Is]]
Date: 01/07/09 06:06 pm Title: Epilogue
Nooo, they can't be seperated!
I neeed a sequel, seriously
What's gonna happen?
You got me all caught up in the story here
It's awfull, read it all in one time
I couldn't stop reading
Like, wow!
Really good writing
Date: 01/07/09 05:41 am Title: Epilogue
Allie...
I read it.
I read all of it.
And now i have to comment rape it.
You were right.
Your cliffhanger endings ARE good. Better then mine. lol.
You have talent, Allie. One day, I will figure out how to steal part of that talent.
I hope you're happy, I cried on 4 seperate occasions whilst reading this.
Sorry it took me so long to finish, but there are so many distractions! That, and I'm talking to you in between reading.
I really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really liked it. Like alot.
LOL damn you, you've hooked me on Till!
Your smut isn't that bad.
*chases you with a pitchfork*
*trips*
*impales self*
*dies*
Well, there you go Allie, there's your comment rape. Now i'm off to go read the sequel. And annoy you endlessly so you update it fast.
Love ya.
Date: 01/06/09 01:22 am Title: Frantic
so proud of bill for speaking up ^_^
Date: 01/06/09 01:16 am Title: The approaching darkness
:O omg why is tom with that person?! i mean his dad >.>
Date: 01/06/09 01:10 am Title: Tom
aww i couldnt help but squeal when tom also looked at bill for a second >.
Date: 01/06/09 01:03 am Title: Prologue
T-T poor tom, but sheesh when i saw the banner i was like wtf?! who's getting their ass beat for doing that to tom? lol
Date: 01/04/09 04:02 am Title: Prologue
Are you kidding me? Blow? Like hell it does, this is AMAZING! It's so well written that it took my breath away! *runs to read next chapter*
Date: 01/02/09 08:27 am Title: Epilogue
Wow that was amazing. I really liked how you changed the POV back and forth between tom and bill but didn't just repeat the same scenes from both their views. And I think their relationship moved at the perfect speed in this. Any faster and it wouldn't have been believable any slower and we all would have been impatient. Im adding this to my favorites and am dashing off to check out this sequel. Though I do have to point out a few things that seemed a bit off first: This last "chapter" didn't really feel like an ending and I know it's because you are going on to write more but this story should still have a definite end. I feel like the end of Chapter 19 was a perfect place to end and this should have been incorporated into the next part. Also through out the story I felt like the timeline was a bit off. Like too much time would pass in too short an amount of time. For example, and this is just the one I remember best, When Andi gets into a fight with Tom and they are both sent home. I felt while reading, that that event happened relatively early in the day like before lunch, yet Tom wasn't home that long before he ran out and Bill finds him supposedly hours later at the park... I could be wrong but thats how it came off to me. Also I leave you with one final small grammatical error:
"Whispering out ‘I love you’ they feLL into an uneasy slumber,"
Date: 01/02/09 07:11 am Title: Nightmares and Safety
" “So…Are you staying HOME from school again tomorrow…?” The blond asked next."
"His sudden movements roused the dark hairED boy, who Tom just realized had been sleeping next to him."
"He was still in the same position, arms wrapped around Bill with his NOSE? FACE? buried right in the side of Bill’s neck"
Date: 01/02/09 06:59 am Title: Can't Take It
"He backed up against the wall as his father pushed his way into the room and headed for him and all Tom could do was stare wide eyed at his father and pray to whatever goD that there was the he would make it out of this…"
Date: 01/02/09 06:20 am Title: When Push Comes To Shove
"...when he let Bill question him about his mother but he did feel as if a small amount of weight had been lifted off his chest"
"He knew now just HOW uncomfortable the dread head had been"
Date: 01/02/09 06:01 am Title: Shining Tears
"He could feel two other sets of eyes burning into him, searching for a reactiON…"
"He passed through the toO clean house and prattled off the excuse he had been given to Tom’s dad ..."