Date: 07/27/11 11:29 pm Title: Giving up control may be good
"Whistling happily" omg. I am just speechless right now.
Date: 02/19/10 01:47 pm Title: Giving up control may be good
Ciao, sono sempre io. xD.
I know I fail at being prompt and at keeping my promises, I said I would read the sequel soon and... well... some time has passed. I'm so sorry.
... But I'm also going to punish myself for putting it off. It was so worth reading it!
It was well long, it totally captured my attention, and length makes a story more believable I think. I liked it very much.
You did a good job with the characters too; usually, I like all the twincests I read, I'm not overly critical, I just enjoy most of them. When it comes to Billshidos, sometimes I have problems with the way Bushido is portrayed.
Basically, I don't like him if he's OOC, though I admit that it must be quiet difficult to write about him.
I extremely enjoyed your Bushido, the way he seems so physically attracted to Bill. That totally fits the picture of him that I have in my mind. Reading about him felt like an utter satisfaction actually. Well done, really.
I also appreciated Bill being so much of a tease. Usually, when he's flanked by Bushido in stories, I can imagine him being all innocent and protected by the others, since Bushido really said those things about him. I loved that in here he provokes Bushido almost more than how Bushido provokes him. Actually Bill started it all, seriously, thumbs up for that. :)
Compared to this Bill, even Tom sounded almost uninterested in sex. xD.
Then again, I definitely found it fluent and lovely to read, but I don't think my opinion about this counts very much, as I'm italian and it might just be the fact that I'm used to the way we structure our sentences. But still, I liked the way you organised words; if anything, I liked the way you pictured some moments, such as...
Don’t. Think.
Black out.
…
That’s better.
See what I mean? I'm speaking about style rather than grammar, I guess.
I enjoyed Bushido's point of view, too! It's actually pretty rare and I can remember I read it only a few times, not so much after all. It's... good. I guess it helps readers get a proper idea of how slutty and attractive Bill can be in his eyes. xD.
Now I think I'm off to read the other Billshido you've written, I think it's the sequel to this one? I saw an interesting summary there. :D
Well done, I loved it!
Date: 02/11/10 06:54 pm Title: Giving up control may be good
Excellent
Date: 12/13/09 08:39 pm Title: Giving up control may be good
oh yeah!!!
Date: 12/10/08 01:50 pm Title: Giving up control may be good
Great story!!
Hope you continue it !!
Author's Response: Thank you ^^ I'll write another shot, that's for sure =)
Date: 12/08/08 07:21 am Title: Giving up control may be good
*screams*
YYEEEESSS!!!!
FUCK YES!
THERE IS MORE!!!
*dies*
Author's Response: Yep, 'more' is on the way ;) It'll take its time, though ^^
Date: 12/07/08 07:09 pm Title: Giving up control may be good
I love this struggle for control and dominance. And the sex is mighty fine, too. I will definitely read the next one.
Author's Response: *.* Thanks! I'll try my best to update soon =)
Date: 12/07/08 04:40 pm Title: Giving up control may be good
very nice^^
Author's Response: Thank you ^.^
Date: 12/07/08 03:28 pm Title: Giving up control may be good
Holy shit that was Hawt. Phew *fans self*
ROUND TWO! ROUND TWO!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks ^^ There will be round two, yeah. Well, round three, actually, this was the second one already ;)