Date: 07/02/09 07:01 am Title: 4. The Skittles
Such a cute, sweet story :) Also not too grpahic, I don't see the point in that lol... ^-^
Date: 02/01/09 03:56 pm Title: 4. The Skittles
This is a great story, I love it! For a first fic, this is fantastic! My first fanfic sucked (I've since then deleted it)
Date: 02/01/09 03:30 pm Title: 1. The Ice Cream Sundae
I've been reading fanfics for a while. Whenever someone says it's their first fanfic in the summary or author's note, I'm often a little wary, because they tend to suck. Yours, however, is off to a very good start! I like it!
Date: 01/10/09 03:38 pm Title: 4. The Skittles
so being up for anything, means being up for your brother too! sorry can't help but find it kinda funny that tom just said anything worked for him, and then bill kisses him :) but a very cute, and well written 'story.'
Date: 12/09/08 08:38 pm Title: 4. The Skittles
Ah, shit.
Why'd you have to go and end it there? Now I've gotta wait to see what happens! XD
Date: 12/09/08 08:17 pm Title: 4. The Skittles
squeeee!!! i luv it! lol
Date: 12/09/08 02:44 pm Title: 4. The Skittles
*Screams* There isn't a word for how i feel right now... I'm sick and this kinda made my day... what's left of it ;D Great story!
Author's Response: Glad you liked it :D rnAnd get well soon!
Date: 12/01/08 10:33 pm Title: 3. The Pancakes
Oh your chapters are so short! I wanna know what Tomi's gonna do! Is his 'education' gonna be purely theoretical or is he gonna apply some 'hands on' learning ;P
Author's Response: I know they're short... but I get impatient and just want to publish them!! Okay... I'll try and make them a bit longer from now on :)
Date: 12/01/08 05:01 pm Title: 2. The Candy Bar
Great first fanfic :D
Date: 12/01/08 01:30 pm Title: 2. The Candy Bar
this sounds like conversations i've had with my friends. i can totally identify with it. i like this. more now?
Date: 12/01/08 01:26 pm Title: 2. The Candy Bar
Lol, really like this story! Please more! FAV!
Date: 11/26/08 10:42 pm Title: 1. The Ice Cream Sundae
Oh wow! This is a great set up and i love the fact that you're bringing up Tom's media persona (or real personality? who knows?) and Bill's possible (in this case, definite) virginity, because I know the exact interview you're talking about and have always wondered about it... Anyway, I'm very interested in seeing where this goes ^^
Author's Response: Aah, yes. That interview. I always wondered too :) Whether it's tru or not, I guess we'll never know (a teen sex god? Virgin? Probably not.) but they'll always be that air of mystery around Bill, this is just how I interpreted it ^-^
Date: 11/26/08 07:36 pm Title: 1. The Ice Cream Sundae
I like it, its very cute. Keep going.
Date: 11/26/08 07:32 pm Title: 1. The Ice Cream Sundae
Pretty good. I don't remember if I saw whether it was completed or not, but I sure hope it isn't. :3 So much hope for a long chaptered fic resided here, and I just can't wait for more.
But there were quite a few mistakes. Spelling was pretty good, but punctuation and missing words had me going back a couple times to see what I had missed.
You might want to find a beta-reader, if you don't have one already. :3 There is a list of them near the top of the page under the main menu, or you can ask a teacher (like my friends and I do).
If you want, next time you post, send me a copy beforehand and I'll take a look too, if you'd like.
Great start on your stories! And I honestly can't wait for more. :3
Author's Response: That sounds great! To be honest, I knew there would be some mistakes even though I used Spell- Check, after all I'm quick a clumsy typer, and new to this website. It sounds great that you'll take a look at it, if you want :)
Date: 11/26/08 07:11 pm Title: 1. The Ice Cream Sundae
Hey, I'm first YAY!! This sounds cool, you have a nice style. I'm gonna stick around for a while see where this heads to, and if you keep giving me chapters, I'll keep giving you cookies. We have a deal??
Author's Response: It's always a deal when there's cookies involved ^_^