Date: 12/08/10 07:08 pm Title: Chapter 19 - Epilogue - Potential
MAKE ANOTHER! have it be for my belated birthday! (it was on saturday)
Date: 10/17/10 08:41 am Title: Chapter 19 - Epilogue - Potential
I simply loved it! Very cute! :)
Since you asked if your German was correct: A lot of it isn't :P
This is how it should be:
Chapter 1:
“Ja, ist das recht,” --> „Ja, klar..“
Chapter 6:
Seien Sie gut --> Benimm dich.
Sie verstehen Deutsch? (That’s basically correct with „Sie“ but too formal, I think..) --> Du verstehst Deutsch?
Ich verstehe nur ein bissen Deutsch. --> Ich verstehe nur ein bissCHen Deutsch.
Ja, Ich wünschen etwas essen --> Ja, ich würde gerne etwas essen.
“Was Sie essen möchten? --> Was möchtest du essen?
Chapter 9:
“Ich bin schwanger. Es ist Ihr.“ --> „Ich bin schwanger. Es ist deins.“
Sie sind mit seinem Baby schwanger --> Du bist mit meinem Baby schwanger.
Chapter 10:
“I’m sorry, entschuldigen sie bitte,” --> „entschuldigen Sie bitte.“
Chapter 11
… when you start speaking Deutsche with your American accent.” --> when you start speaking Deutsch…
“Should Ich spreche nur Deutsche?” -> Soll ich nur noch Deutsch sprechen?
“Nien!” --> „Nein“
Chapter 13
Ja, ist das recht, --> „Ja, klar..“
I don't know if you want to change it but wanted to tell you :)
Viele Grüße
Penny
Date: 01/20/10 08:56 pm Title: Chapter 19 - Epilogue - Potential
I loved this story so much! You did such an amazing job on it! Everything about it was wonderful.
Author's Response: Thank you, you are very sweet. I think this story could use a major edit and some character help. But it's not bad for my first story ever.
Date: 07/14/09 07:31 am Title: Chapter 2 – Going to Hollywood
grammer needs a little help. I like the fact that you have both groups of people being told together.
Author's Response: OMG this is soooooo old! Read it with the fact that it was my first story EVER. It needs a lot of love to get up to par but I'm not even going to touch it. It gets better as it goes along. But nowhere near where it needs to be, to be considered even good. ha ha
Date: 06/25/09 07:04 am Title: Chapter 1 – Fuck you Tom!
omg a het fic so happy right now. thank you.
Author's Response: I'm glad you're excited. I hope it wasn't too bad!
Date: 06/24/09 08:37 pm Title: Chapter 19 - Epilogue - Potential
I love it, i love you for writing it, the moment i liked the most was the birth, the bit that'll stay with meh for-ev-ahh was the birth (again) since i dont commonly have happy tears x], the part i liked the least was.......*thinks* nothing! TADAAA!!! this story is going STRAIGHT to faves, cause its so damn awesome!!! *snifful* and such a great ending!!! You should make a sequel! If you do, i promise ill comment every single chapter 10 times! Or maybe a little less, but...LOL still, seriously, you should!!
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the birth, I had a bit of trouble with it, wasn't sure how to go about it all. Awh thanks for favoriteing it! that's super sweet of you. I've been asked to make a sequal of this but it's been so long and I didn't love my OFC so much (I didn't even name her!) I'll write other het in the near future, better written I promise, this one is...bellow my standards now.
Date: 06/24/09 08:32 pm Title: Chapter 18 – 6.11.08 the day I learned to breathe.
AAAAAHHH IM CRYINGG!!! IM CRYING IMM CRYING IM CRYINGG!!!! SO SPECIAL!! SO TOUCHING!!!!! AHHH I cant even see what im typing its all too b lurry!! *snifful*
Author's Response: Awh thank you! lol I love the typing while crying, that's a nice touch lol. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Date: 06/24/09 07:17 pm Title: Chapter 4 – First US Concert
HAHA ROFL!!! the entire time i was reading this, i was going like EEEEK cause its like actually going to a concert *squeel* EEEP!!!
Author's Response: Thanks. I been to enough of them that I should be able to write the concert experience well!
Date: 04/23/09 07:36 pm Title: Chapter 19 - Epilogue - Potential
absolutetly LOVE this story! i cna't believe it's your first! i kinda hope there's a sequel!! GREAT JOB! keep writing!! =]
Author's Response: I'm glad you loved this story. Thanks a lot! I'm doubtful there will be a sequel. But thanks so much for your love and support.
Date: 04/10/09 03:02 pm Title: Chapter 4 – First US Concert
And the excitement begins. I like the way you've shown the story from both sides of view without making the feelings repetitive.
Author's Response: Thank you! I tried to get both POVs but to allude to different information or views of the same story.
Date: 04/10/09 01:12 pm Title: Chapter 3 – Hollywood
First hot scene of the story (even if it was a dream) and once again well written. A little too much of a filler chapter for my liking but sometimes it's necessary so i'm sure you're forgiven.
Author's Response: Thanks *grins* It wasn't a filler chapter...it's to short to be a filler chapter it's a transition chapter you have to get from wherever she, and wherever they are to Hollywood.
Date: 04/10/09 12:59 pm Title: Chapter 2 – Going to Hollywood
I must admit i'm absolutely loving the vocabulary in this piece. I think that's the first time i've read the word accoutrements around here. Thankyou.
Author's Response: lol I try and bring a little bit of my amazing and immense vocabulary to my work. I'm being facetious of course. Thank you! You should go check out my favorites list I have all of the good stuff that I've read favorited, I make notes not everyone does, I’m up to about 100 or so. As well as you should check out Chi her favorites list is very extensive I think she’s up to about ~250.
Date: 04/10/09 12:48 pm Title: Chapter 1 – Fuck you Tom!
Interesting opening-not many people seem able to get away with diving straight into a plotline but you did it very well. All in all a good initial chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you! I like stories that start in the middle and then go back and explain from the beginning what the hell just happened.
Date: 12/23/08 11:03 am Title: Chapter 19 - Epilogue - Potential
i loved it!
i love you for writing it...but i don't want it to be over!!!!
Author's Response: Awh thank you. But she can't be pregnant forever? She's not an elepahnt! lol I'm glad you love it. It's good to have a story that people enjoy. Thank you!
Date: 12/22/08 12:08 pm Title: Chapter 19 - Epilogue - Potential
This was an extremely well written story. I think that you should write a sequal.
Author's Response: Thank you that’s a great complement! Honestly I’m burnt out on this story right now. I don’t want to deal with this storyline anymore. I am however going to write a couple of new stories, new characters, new plot lines. We’ll see how that goes. But thank you for the complement! It inspires me to worker harder on my other stories!
Date: 12/12/08 06:01 pm Title: Chapter 19 - Epilogue - Potential
I loved the story although i would have love it better if you would have shown the baby a litle more I don't even no her name!!! and georg und gustav!!!
but I love all the rest!!
i wish i had bill as an uncle(:
i love your writing...
Author's Response: So appreciative that you loved and read it. And the lovely complement about my writing skills. *smiles and blushes* as for little nameless Kaulitz, Georg, and Gustav they were props? I used them to tell a story. And truth be told I wasn’t sure exactly what to do with the G’s in this story. It was almost a complete accident that Aly and Bill played a role as big as they did. I used them to help the story move when I wasn’t sure how to get my OFC and Tom to do it alone. *shrugs* And as for little nameless well…honestly I couldn’t decide on a name for her *make a face* I just couldn’t name her and feel that it was the right one. I was going to name her after Majestrix baby but I just couldn’t bring myself to do that either. IDK I’m weird ok?
Date: 12/11/08 09:51 pm Title: Chapter 19 - Epilogue - Potential
*squeals*
Adorable!!!! Uncle Bill *laughs*
I can hear him gasp over the phone, “Liar!”
“Ok yes, I received it. I just wanted to fuck with you.”
*snickers* mahahahah... I loved this story from beginning to end, your humor was tasteful and FUNNY (which is always a plus), brilliantly worded, loved how she was still a fangirl at heart even to the end. The evolution of Tom seemed real, and not fictional if he was in the same situation. You made her character come to life, and made us love her like a sister, a really close friend. God I just adored the whole thing, honestly.
Brilliantly amazing!!!
*grabs tissues and submits final review*
Mad love hun! xo
Author's Response: I'm glad you think I'm funny, so often in life I'm the only one laughing at my jokes. *shrugs* At least someone other then me thinks I'm funny even if they are half way around the world ok a couple of thousand miles away you Canadian. *chuckles* brilliantly worded? really? now that's a cool complement! You know you and I would be still fangirling too. *giggles* I tried to make this story as true to life as possible. Tom has never seemed like the kind of guy who would go whole heartily into something as scary as being a parent with out kicking and screaming and steps backward and forward so I wanted to reflect that. He sister had to be a friend because her sister was all she had, her sister is the reason why she got up in the morning because her parents were gone I didn't delve into that much but I had a whole, WHOLE, story behind that. But I decided it could emerge more organically. To be adored is a wonderful thing. Thank you for all of your lovely reviews and comments along the way.
Date: 12/11/08 09:37 pm Title: Chapter 18 – 6.11.08 the day I learned to breathe.
IM CRYYYINNNGG!!!
Amazingly and beautifuly written *wipes tears* I would be content even if it ended here!! Im so grateful I caught this story just as it was being finished, and that the epilogue was posted AS I was reading ^_^
I liked the BillundAly part with the quiet doodling =) And the end, gaaaah!
So so so so so much love is being sent!!!!
Author's Response: I made you cry?! Really?! wow either you're easy or I'm good...honestly I suspect the first *smiles* ha ha you're easy and it's going to be in my reviews forever! *giggles* Thank you for the lovely compelments really! Really thank you! I liked the Bill and Aly doodling scene too. It just happened. Half of my writing just does. I have a plan a basic skeleton and the funny little details like doodling Bill and Aly, and ooh-gah-chucka skin-a-max just happen as I'm going along. It's a gift *winks* I'm glad you liked it's a really nice feeling having someone read my story and enjoy it.
Date: 12/11/08 09:23 pm Title: Chapter 17 - Sooner then planned
WOOO! HERE COMES NAMELESS BABY KAULITZ!
I cant wait to find out what you named her!! ^^ I love Aly's subtle protection of her sister, they're so much like my sister and I ( i think i mentioned that before..??) Anyway
Mad love, Big Cinema, and will for sure check out The Assistant by Steena... since its a vampire fic, and recommended by an awesome writer xP
Author's Response: Yup little nameless lol! he he I didn't! *giggles* Thanks for the made love and the big cinema. You called me an awesome writer! *blushes* thank you *giggles* And thanks for checking out my recommendations. I also recommend that you check out my favorites list. I have notes about all of my favorites and keep the good ones up there for now and ever!
Date: 12/11/08 08:58 pm Title: Chapter 16 – Information he didn't know he needed
Again, goosebumps.
I hope you know that you're the only author on this site to do that to me. And you've done it twice! *claps* Vell done ^^ lol
Im so sad this story is so close to coming to a close!!! But then again, you cant really do much of an intensely long story with a pregnancy plot =P
Author's Response: Wow goosebumps? That's super cool but I don't think my story is that amazing. Not fishing for complements here just being honest. You are so cute. That's so funny that you said that because I actually had another reader make a comment about wanting it to go on longer and I told her I was sorry that I couldn't make my OFC have an 20 month pregnancy like an elephant. LOL made me laugh! *shakes head* Anyways thanks for reading!