Date: 10/09/10 03:50 am Title: Cherry on Top
So immensely cute O_O
Date: 08/08/10 03:22 pm Title: Cherry on Top
only if the sundae were on top of one of the beautiful Kaulitz boys...wouldnt matter which I like both for different reasons. very cute.
Date: 05/20/10 10:27 pm Title: Cherry on Top
I only want an ice cream sundae if it comes with sexy twins. I liked it a lot.
Date: 05/04/09 06:42 pm Title: Cherry on Top
Ice Cream Sundae.... I'm dying! Must have one! Even though I have a newly-broken tooth and I'm not allowed to eat anything.... WHIPPED CREAM NAO! XD
Date: 03/28/09 04:25 pm Title: Cherry on Top
hmph, i really do want one.(; I liked this alot. ^__^
Date: 03/20/09 06:29 pm Title: Cherry on Top
O_O -totally needs icecream now-
that was RIDICULOUSLY hott. :3
Food Play = amazing. :3
Date: 02/20/09 04:59 am Title: Cherry on Top
YES, THERE IS A FIC OF IT!!! XD Nom nom~ Nom on Tom? NomTom? XD
Date: 11/23/08 08:31 pm Title: Cherry on Top
lmaO I LOVE UR STORIES THIS ONE IS HILARIOUS
Date: 11/23/08 08:30 pm Title: Cherry on Top
lmaO I LOVE UR STORIES THIS ONE IS HILARIOUS
Date: 11/22/08 08:05 pm Title: Cherry on Top
I do want an ice cream sundae, and I want the twins dressed in only their boxers to bring it to me :)
Nice story!
Date: 11/19/08 02:05 pm Title: Cherry on Top
Awww that was so cute.
Date: 11/19/08 01:54 pm Title: Cherry on Top
Oh I do!! You got me in a better mood!
Date: 11/19/08 10:18 am Title: Cherry on Top
Ok, and now to make things less confusing, what I would have said would be ""Shut the fuck up," was his only reply, and without warning, he picked up the whipped cream and sprayed some on Tom's black shirt. The later jumped in surprise, and within seconds was suddenly fueled by anger." Just in case I hadn't explained myself as good as I thought.
Date: 11/19/08 10:15 am Title: Cherry on Top
But not vainilla, vainilla makes me sick for an unknown reason. This was nice, but sometimes you messed with the points of view and the pronouns.
""Shut the fuck up," was his only reply, and without warning, he picked up the whipped cream and sprayed some on Tom's black shirt. He jumped in surprise, and within seconds was suddenly fueled by anger." Take that one as an example. The sentence is said by Bill, the action of spraying the cream on Tom is made by Bill, you should not use "he" there, because if I didn't know better by the context, I could have thought that it was Bill who acted angry, and that would make no sense. You made this quite some times and I had to read those parts twice.
Apart from that...luuuvly
Author's Response: lol I noticed. xD I wrote this really quickly, right before school started, so I didn't have time to edit a lot of stuff because I really wanted to put it up. I'm also not the best at third-person, unless it's a short crack fic. =P
Date: 11/19/08 08:47 am Title: Cherry on Top
I totally do want an ice cream sundae now, with a Kaulitz twin on top ;)