Date: 04/26/09 05:30 pm Title: Audition
Stee, you already know what im gonna say bout this story! I love it, like always.. :D see I love how you frase things and your choice og words, "japanese people are generally weird", and the bit with bubbles, and the 'im full' bit, just to name some of my favourites.. ;D theres just to many to name them all here..
Its also the subtleness of the whole thing, especially in the beginning, that is just brill.. And i have to tell you someting, the Bill-character here reminds me of someone else with his games, not needing anyone else, being annoyed bu human affaction, and the mentioning of limits (; Made me smile, just like always when reading one of your stories. The little twists to the story and David talking her into staying, thats what i like bout this, its just awesome! I also love the twins relationship in this, and how they arent all cuddly like they can be at times. And yeah, do i have to tell you that i LOVE that hes a vampire, different from my favourite family of vampires, but still in that category! its new, its fresh, it wonderful.. (:
Cant wait to read more, like always, keep this up and I know you'll end up a famous writer someday.. ;b xx
Author's Response: OMG I love you <3<3 Thank you so much, I ADORE long reviews :D xoxo
Date: 04/26/09 04:49 pm Title: Decision
wow! Intense as always! Good job, kept me on the edge the whole time. i cant wait to see what she's gonna do, how their relationship evolves.Good work!
Author's Response: Thanx Irene, hope you'll stick around for the next :D
Date: 04/26/09 02:24 pm Title: Decision
OMFG...
Yeah, itīs smexy to see evil vampire Bill but damn... heīs mean. lol.
Iīve read your story from the beginning but hadnīt posted a review.
I LOVE IT. lol.
Seriously awesome.
Author's Response: Aww, thank you so much for reading and the review and I'm glad you stuck around to wait for the update even though it took some time :) xox
Date: 04/19/09 02:06 am Title: Temptation
Omg I have been completely glued to this story. I really really like it, please don't ever stop! ^.^
Author's Response: Argh, I feel so guilty for being shit at regular updates :( I'm SO sorry for being such a busy girl, you guys <3<3
Date: 03/29/09 01:23 am Title: Temptation
Omg Please Update!!!! This fanfic makes my lifeeeee
Author's Response: I've just been hit by a nastyass virus and have been without computer for over a month, but I'm back now and will be doing some writing as fast as I can to get a new chapter out for you guys :) <3
Date: 03/11/09 05:06 pm Title: Temptation
Eventually everything bursts. Even if it’s dreams, hopes or just champagne bubbles. – wow Tom depressed much?
“I don’t think I should have any more,” Jenna’s voice slurred a bit but it still sounded like music in Tom’s ears. – someone’s got a little crush… you know she’s not yours!
She hesitated at first but as she made the mistake of looking into Bill’s eyes, Tom knew it was a lost cause.
Him self had fallen for those eyes so many times, it was no use resisting. - *snickers* I love an aggressive Bill!
In contrast to the warm charming voice Bill had used just a second ago, the cold snarl the lead singer was producing now was almost frightening, but the older twin was used to it by now.– nice tone change.
“She’s can’t handle it, she’s had too much already! We should be getting her home, not pouring champagne into her!” – dangerous path Tom, very dangerous!
“Don’t treat me like a little girl! I can so handle it. You don’t get to decide what I can and can’t do, Tom!” Jenna spat and before Tom could make a rebuttal she leaned her head back and emptied all of the poor bubbles down her throat. – wow she’s not that smart…why does Tom have a crush on her? Or is it a crush is he just feeling guilty that he is a party to her being eaten once a week? She stupid and it’s kind of annoying.
No one but Tom noticed the subtle signs of his brother’s plan. – maybe the G’s have learned to ignore Bill for self preservation.
Doesn’t Bill want to turn Tom? Or do they not love each other in this one. Was the twin/brother connection broken before Bill turned or after?
“Tom, chill. You can’t keep him from doing it,” Georg tried to reason and his words seemed to be the only thing keeping Tom from bolting after the couple walking out into the chilly night. “It’s what she’s here for.” – yeah Tom, why are you still there when you know what Bill is and you have such a problem with it. You can’t do anything to stop him.
His answer made me giggle a bit and I stumbled along without noticing anything around me other than how safe I felt around him. Bill was a lot stronger that I would have thought a few months ago. – she’s very drunk.
He’d been so sweet all night, giving me drinks, making me laugh and defending me to Tom, who apparently thought I was just a little girl who wouldn’t take care of herself. Well I showed him downing that glass of champagne.
I showed him, yes I did! - *eye roll and smacks her across the face* dude you deserve to be drained!
I felt his cold breath on my face – cold breath… creepy!
“I’ve wanted to be alone with you all night,” Bill whispered back. “All week actually.” – wow that sounds really sweet. Bill is really good at this.
Bill Kaulitz was kissing me. Right here in the dark alleyway behind a club, the object of my desire and affection for years was kissing me and pressing me up against the brick wall with more force and more passion. – dude that would make us all swoon!
“Tell me you want me to,” he whispered – he has to ask for permission? Really? He didn’t, or is it just something he kind of gets off on making them beg to get beaten?
“Finally!” I heard a relief in his voice and then a long hiss that made my spine shiver. – It seems like he asking for permission. Hum?
“Mmhh, the surprise is always the most fun to watch,” Bill laughed and looked at me with pitch black eyes. – that’s just mean *giggles*
“Ah, the desperation. You said yes, remember? You gave me permission to take you, to make you feel alive.” Bill laughed and let his tongue run over his canine weapons. – he’s very cruel! *grins*
“Oh, he’s here,” a smile was clearly adoring Bill’s deep voice as he was looking towards where we had entered and saw something no one else saw. “Good. That makes it so much more fun!” – Bill likes to tease Tom…why?
Bill leaned in, slashed his fangs through my exposed skin and started drinking as a heart wrenching scream echoed off the brick walls of the alley.
The scream could have been mine, but I wasn’t sure. All I could feel was darkness, weakness and pain and after what seemed like forever of the pain, the weakness and darkness started to take over. – I like that she’s not sure if the scream is hers or someone else’s *smiles* that’s nice.
He sat there till the screams died, till the sobbing died and the nauseating sound of slurping died away as well. He sat there, his face hidden tightly in his arms till the sound of high healed boots and singing necklaces left the alley and walked right past him.
“I hope you enjoyed the concert,” even with his face hidden in his large hood, Tom couldn’t still hear that Bill was smiling. “There’s nothing like dinner and a show.” – hum? Why does Tom torture himself like this? Why does he fight against someone who he know he won’t win against?
“Tom, maybe you should just let Georg deal with the cleaning up. Come inside with me and have a drink, before we leave,” Bill took a step towards his twin – ok so he does care but…why does he torture Tom so much? Why doesn’t he just turn him?
However much he’d want to help the little bubbles hang on to the side of the glass, if they were meant to raise to the edge and burst, then he wouldn’t be able to stop them or protect them. All he could do was make sure this particular bubble got home safely afterwards. – I like the bubble metaphor *smiles* it was cute.
Author's Response: Thankyou SO SO SO SO SO SO MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!! for this amazing review, ur my fave reader and I hope you've stuck around even tho I havent updates for aaaages :( <3
Date: 02/27/09 06:05 am Title: Temptation
Hey Stine, I just found this one and I love the way you describe the scenario with attention to every little detail! I hope you update soon cause I can't wait to find out when Toms gonna realise that he loves Jenna and what he's going to do about it... Ugh, you own my mind now, tsk tsk
Take care!
Author's Response: omg, how do u know my real name? :O lol.. Well thanx, I'll try to update as soon as I can :) Thanx for the read and please keep reviewing :)
Date: 02/25/09 11:54 am Title: Temptation
awsome.. can't wait til the next chapter comes:D
Author's Response: Thanku loads - hopefully I'll get some writing time tonight :)
Date: 02/24/09 09:45 pm Title: Temptation
love it
Author's Response: Thankuu :D
Date: 02/24/09 06:25 pm Title: Temptation
Bill is a Monster! Jenna is -_-' she really pissed me off acting like she was the shit when tom was trying to protect her.
I hope she'll remember every single thing that happened when she wakes up. She got a serious wake-up call.
poor tom, he can use a hug!
Author's Response: Does anyone volunteer to hug Tom? Anyone? Og well, I guess it's on me then :P Keep reading and reviewing :D <3
Date: 02/18/09 12:39 pm Title: Persuasion
love it!
Author's Response: Thankyou very much :D The next chapther should be up within a few days :)
Date: 02/13/09 06:00 pm Title: Persuasion
*had ran and made quick tea when I saw a new chapter was up*
WOOOOOO FINALLY!!! And you didn't disappoint at all^^
"His chains and necklaces were singing to the rhythm of his high healed boots on the marble floors, making sure absolutely everyone in the hotel hall noticed the presence of music royalty."
BAH, Love! And I also really like the fact that she took all of it as some sick joke, it keeps it more real I think. As in, I would have reacted the same way, thinking everyone was just playing me out to be stupid. I think thats why I totally enjoyed this chapter, it's just incredibly realistic in her reactions to everything =D
Ooooo sneaky Bill, very sneaky.. trying to get her drunk.. GO TOM!!
-Much love&thanks! Keep it up, its all awesome ^^
Author's Response: Thanx for the lovely long review and for sticking by me through the story even tho I know I'm the worst at fast updates. Thanku so much, it means a lot to me. <3
Date: 02/13/09 09:01 am Title: Persuasion
“My GOD, Tom, how fucking stupid do you think I am?” - really stupid considering you just had your throat attacked!
Bill had actually physically hurt me. - yes and that MORE then enough reason to quit!
“Jenna, don’t be mad. It’s a sort of… Ritual they do… do new assistants… To test how much they can handle,” he smiled lightly as if this whole thing was amusing to him as he leaned his shoulder against the doorframe in a relaxed manner. “And it seemed like you’ve failed the test.”
I just stared at him with wide eyes as the boiling anger in my gut seemed to fizz out a bit and I was left with a feeling of misbelieve. They’d done this to other assistants as well?
“A… A test? You mean this was a…” I was trying to wrap my head around this but also to make the gnawing feeling of failing in my stomach go away. I’d jumped right into their little trap, hadn’t I?
“Yes, I’m afraid you didn’t quite handle it they way we’d hoped. They boys designed the test on their own; I’m not in any way involved. It’d supposed to see how you handle craziness of this industry.” - ok number one you’re a genius for making David say this!!! David is amazing! She is sooooo stupid or in complete denial! OMG I don’t care who they are if they hurt me at all I don’t care who they are there would be police, a law suit and obviously I would be gone before you could say “boo.” She doesn’t have much self worth does she? Or much self preservation.
“I apologize” - SHE’s apologizing? OMG
“Oh, and Tom?”
Tom turned around but didn’t look at the man by the bed. “Yeah?”
“Don’t fall for her, okay? It would be stupid.”
“I know, I know, I won’t…”
David cleared his voice and sighed slightly.
“You never know when Bill might lose control and kill -”
“I know!” - too late!
Bill seemed as relaxed as ever around me, even though he was rarely alone with me for more than two seconds before Tom would show up and stay close. - I don’t know what Tom thinks he can do? He has NO power against Bill. He can’t even save himself, how does he think he can help her?
“It’s gonna be great, I haven’t had a drink in ages. I’m practically dying for it,” Bill smiled - you’re awful!
“Would you mind not drinking tonight?” - like that’s going to help her!
I rushed to my bathroom and started pouring a bath. This was a race against time! I had to look perfect and I only had four hours to do it! - OMG two hours is more then enough!
Author's Response: Okay first of all: I LOVE YOU!!!! Thats like one of the best reviews I've ever gotten! Just the length of it! I adore you, tahnku xx - 2nd, yeah this girl is probably the stupidest girl in the world.. Or universe, really... haha, your review just totally made me wish I was home and could continue the story now, but unfortunately I'm at work :( Thaku loads tho, promise me to always writes reviews like that <3
Date: 02/13/09 06:12 am Title: Persuasion
you better find the time and quick because I can't wait to see what's gonna happen! well written, sweetie, please go on, vampire Bill has always been a challenging choice!
Author's Response: Lol, is that an order? :P I'll do my very best to satisby your need for vampire Bill, but I'm gonna be very hung up the next week, so I coubt I'll get much written until next weekend sometime... Thanku SO much for reviewing <3
Date: 02/12/09 06:05 pm Title: Persuasion
xD gosh, what a ignorant girl!
She really is slow, hehhee
Can't believe David got her to stay0_o.
Continue when you can^^
Author's Response: Haha, yeah she's got the IQ of cardboard :P Thanx for readin :) x
Date: 02/12/09 05:49 pm Title: Persuasion
wow it`s a great story but isn`t she blind and dumb she has truth in front of her and doesn`t see it......anyway....keep going it`s really fun....looking forward to what`s happening next......take care.
Author's Response: Yeah, she is both blind and dumb and probably a b it in denial aswell, who I guess its very few people who would actually believe someone was a genuine vampire these days... Anyway, thanx for reading and reviewin :) <3
Date: 01/04/09 04:21 pm Title: Sensation
OMFK you can NOT just leave it like this. Update soon pwease!!!! Or I'll send my evil ninja plot bunnies to.... gently *snickers* help you get your move on... lol
Author's Response: Lmao, then I better get started on writing the next chapter, :P I'll do my best, cant promise anything though. Work is very stressful these days :(
Date: 01/04/09 02:18 am Title: Sensation
LOVE. IT. i hate bill and love him so much at the same time, its not his fault he's a vampire, but he's such a douche about it to poor jenna. tom is such a sweethear!
cant wait to read more!
Author's Response: Ah, the old "love but hate" dilemma, lol. Thanx for readin xx
Date: 01/03/09 05:30 pm Title: Sensation
Loooooool! I could only imagine how someone would react if Tom Kaulitz told them his twin was a vampire. Hahah!
& LOLZ @ THE JAPANESE ARE WEIRD XDD
Awesome chapter! Update soon! :D
Author's Response: The Japanese ARE weird! Have you seen their gameshows? lmao! Thanx for readin xx
Date: 01/03/09 12:44 pm Title: Sensation
First of all thank you for the update, we will survive, life is more enjoyable with regular updates but this IS free and we get what we pay for. Secondly I hope you had a fuckin’ ragein’ time in Norway. And I hope you said hi to my friend Madden while you were there. *giggles*
He let one last mouthful make its way from her neck to his stomach – nice imagery
“We’re twins, what is mine is yours, burden or else,” – wow this is line I chose to represent this section…there is no love between Tom and Bill, very unusual. And OMG Bill is a freaking asshole! *grins* I like it when you abuse Tom.
“Yeah… He does that; it’s sort of his… Thing…” - *snorts* yeah his…thing!
“Bill is a vampire.” – dun-dun-duunnnnn and now the truth is out…at least for Jenna.
Author's Response: Lmao, I loved readin your review, it made me laugh. I like how you tell me what you think of the individual pieces of the story coz that helps me to figure out what you guys like and doesnt like. Keep it up :D